My diary in English

I made up my mind ten minutes ago that I had to start to write diary in English and keep it up as a habit because of the fact that it is a practical method for English learner to use English in his or her daily life. As there may be some errors or improper usages in my sentences , all advices and rectifying are appreciated and valuable for me to know how to write English in a native way.
　　
　　April 1,2007
　　
　 　Today is April Fools' Day. It reminds me of the April Fools' Day twenty years ago when my classmate made a deceit on me. She told me when I came back from the class that there had been a phone call for me . She said the caller wanted me to call him on. I believed what she said really. Hehe, what a silly girl I was.
　　
　　But this April Fools' Day is so dull that no one cheated me and no one I could fool with because my husband has gone to Shanghai for businees this morning.

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It's a good way of honing your English skills. Just stick to it and you will someday find yourself on a much higher level than you are now today.
April Fool's is nothing special to me, just a regular day by the way.

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Thank you for your encouragement.

Could you tell me whether it is appropriate or not that I say "She told me when I came back from the class that there had been a phone call for me ."

In order to connect the preceding, I put "she told me" at the begining of this sentence,otherwise it will be written as : "When I came back from the class, she told me that there had been a phone call for me ."

Meanwhile I think "she told me that there had been a phone call for me when I came back from the class." will make confusion which "when clause" is belonged to.

Is that Right? which one from the three is best here?

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The second is the best

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A few years ago,one day afer work,the colleagues from my department were about to go out for dinner,but unfortunately the vice director Mr.Huang was already off,I made a call to him that we were planning for dinner and would you like to join us?,he said that were you kidding,it was not 1st April,he didn't believe me as I often made a jok on him

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she told me that there had been a phone call for me .

如用had been 就是那个电话一直在等着你没挂,看你是什么意思了.如只是来过一个电话用过去时就行.

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vice director 一般不这么用. ASSOCIATE DIRECTOR付主任, VICE PRESIDENT付校长.

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我们都不过什么愚人节.国内反而时髦了.

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I believed what she said really.

I really believed what she said. or I believed what she said was true.

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But this April Fools' Day is so dull that no one cheated me and no one I could fool with because my husband has gone to Shanghai for businees this morning.时态有问题.

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Beijing2008,Thank you very much!
Could I say:"But this April Fools' Day is so dull that no one has cheated me and no one I can fool with because my husband has gone to Shanghai for businees this morning." ?

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April 2, 2007 Morning, After rain

Yersterday it was raining all the night as if it had never rained for years.

I like most the spring rainy day. It often rains at night and there is no any inconvinience for people to go out in the daytime. When you come out of your house in the morning after a night's raining, you are wrapping yourself with the huge and most natural watersupplying film without any cost for the air is humid and clean. Please have a sensitive feeling to enjoy your world. You can hear the birds are singing cheerfully besides you. You can feel the cool wind is blowing slightly through the fresh air as well. You can even smell the sweet fragrance is coming from the flower and grass. However, the feeling when it is raining in winter is quite different from that in spring. You can only feel the cold dipping into your body little by little. It is so lucky that it is spring now.

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onlimy 说:

Beijing2008,Thank you very much!
Could I say:"But this April Fools' Day is so dull that no one has cheated me and no one I can fool with because my husband has gone to Shanghai for businees this morning." ?

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我觉得你写日记是在晚上了,所以一般一天就算过去了,而且"去"上海是瞬间动词,不用完成时.

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I should use past tense as you said.

"But this April Fools' Day was so dull that no one cheated me and no one I could fool with because my husband went to Shanghai for businees this morning." ?

Could you please tell me any difference among cheat,deceive/deceit,kid,make fun of and fool? Could you give me some other usual words for this meaning?

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Main Entry: 1cheat
Pronunciation: 'chEt
Function: verb
Etymology: 2cheat
transitive verb
1 : to deprive of something valuable by the use of deceit or fraud
2 : to influence or lead by deceit, trick, or artifice
3 : to elude or thwart by or as if by outwitting <cheat death>
intransitive verb
1 a : to practice fraud or trickery b : to violate rules dishonestly <cheat at cards> <cheating on a test>
2 : to be sexually unfaithful -- usually used with on <was cheating on his wife>
3 : to position oneself defensively near a particular area in anticipation of a play in that area <the shortstop was cheating toward second base>
- cheat·er noun
synonyms CHEAT, COZEN, DEFRAUD, SWINDLE mean to get something by dishonesty or deception. CHEAT suggests using trickery that escapes observation <cheated me out of a dollar>. COZEN implies artful persuading or flattering to attain a thing or a purpose <always able to cozen her grandfather out of a few dollars>. DEFRAUD stresses depriving one of his or her rights and usually connotes deliberate perversion of the truth <defrauded of her inheritance by an unscrupulous lawyer>. SWINDLE implies large-scale cheating by misrepresentation or abuse of confidence <swindled of their savings by con artists>.

Main Entry: de·ceive
Pronunciation: di-'sEv
Function: verb
Inflected Form(s): de·ceived; de·ceiv·ing
Etymology: Middle English, from Anglo-French deceivre, from Latin decipere, from de- + capere to take -- more at HEAVE
transitive verb
1 archaic : ENSNARE
2 a obsolete : to be false to b archaic : to fail to fulfill
3 obsolete : CHEAT
4 : to cause to accept as true or valid what is false or invalid
5 archaic : to while away
intransitive verb : to practice deceit; also : to give a false impression <appearances can deceive>
- de·ceiv·er noun
- de·ceiv·ing·ly /-'sE-vi[ng]-lE/ adverb
synonyms DECEIVE, MISLEAD, DELUDE, BEGUILE mean to lead astray or frustrate usually by underhandedness. DECEIVE implies imposing a false idea or belief that causes ignorance, bewilderment, or helplessness <tried to deceive me about the cost>. MISLEAD implies a leading astray that may or may not be intentional <I was misled by the confusing sign>. DELUDE implies deceiving so thoroughly as to obscure the truth <we were deluded into thinking we were safe>. BEGUILE stresses the use of charm and persuasion in deceiving <was beguiled by false promises>.

http://www.m-w.com/dictionary/deceive

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it had been raining all the night

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Thank you for your quick reply. Yes, I should use past perfect progressive tense because it had stopped raining before I wrote.

Be the way, I put the url into my bookmark as a useful website. The explaination is more detailed than JINSHANCIBA. Is there any else useful url you may share with me? Thanks.

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hehe, google. usually I do cross validation on several online dictionaries.

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I would rephrase like this:

I like most of the rainy days in the spring. It frequently rains at night. There is no any inconvinience for people to go outside at daytime. When you open your door in the morning after a rainy night, ((I am not clear about the following )...you are wrapping yourself with the huge and most natural water supplying film without any cost for the air is humid and clean. Please have a sensitive feeling to enjoy your world. You can hear the birds singing cheerfully around you. You can feel the cool wind blowing slightly through the fresh air as well. You can even smell the sweet fragrance coming from the flower and grass. However, the feeling for raining in winter is quite different from that in spring. You can only feel the cold dipping into your body little by little. It is so lucky that it is spring now.

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Beijing2008 说:

vice director 一般不这么用. ASSOCIATE DIRECTOR付主任, VICE PRESIDENT付校长.

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Tks,08

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It is windy today and it is also my first time to experience "dust blast" in Shanghai.Indeed I am sad badly that the evenironment deterioration is extended to the whole country gradually,moreover the tendency is becoming worse.How to control the disaster is an urgent subject for the government.

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Good rephasing.

I want to express the meaning of
"因为空气湿润干净，等于你敷上一张巨大、纯天然（pure natural）、免费的补水面膜。"Could you help me?

may I say
" It frequently rains at night and consequently, there is no any inconvinience for people to go outside at the daytime."

Thanks again.

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zznn123456 说:

It is windy today and it is also my first time to experience "dust blast" in Shanghai.Indeed I am sad badly that the evenironment deterioration is extended to the whole country gradually,moreover the tendency is becoming worse.How to control the disaster is an urgent subject for the government.

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You are closer to Beijing than me. In contrast with Shanghai, our city is much smaller and heavy industry can hardly be found.

But the tendency is the same. Your today is our tomorrow.(right?)

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onlimy 说:

You are closer to Beijing than me. In contrast with Shanghai, our city is much smaller and heavy industry can hardly be found.

But the tendency is the same. Your today is our tomorrow.(right?)

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Are you in Canada?

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onlimy 说:

Good rephasing.

I want to express the meaning of
"因为空气湿润干净，等于你敷上一张巨大、纯天然（pure natural）、免费的补水面膜。"Could you help me?

may I say
" It frequently rains at night and consequently, there is no any inconvinience for people to go outside at the daytime."

Thanks again.

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Native English speakers will easily get confused when they come across such metaphors as "免费的补水面膜 ". Try not to embellish the sentance too much. I have to admit that I can hardly translate what you asked in a reasonably accurate way. 2008 might satisfy your request, I suppose.

Keep learning from all of you.

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My dialy in English ???daily???Cinglish??

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sorry, It should be "My diary in English", Thanks.

I cannot correct the subject, Could Banzhu please help me?

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reorganizing it as follows:

April 2, 2007 Morning, After rain

Yersterday it was raining all the night as if it had never rained for years.

I most like the rainy days in the spring(most like,right?). It always rains at night as though it would not like to make any inconvinience to us. If I push my door open and pass through the central park for work at this moment , my eyes will be filing up with green and my every skin will be breathing the fresh and humid air just like I am doing natural water supplying skin care without any cost (tense right?如果这时候我推开门穿过中心花园去上班，我会看到满眼的绿，每寸肌肤呼吸到新鲜而湿润的空气，仿佛做了免费补水皮肤护理一样。我觉得用虚拟语气不妥，虽然有虚拟（与事实相反）的成分（我没推门出去），但绿和空气是真实的). Let me open all my feeling to sense the world. I can hear the birds singing cheerfully around me. I can feel the cool wind blowing slightly through the fresh air as well. I can even smell the sweet fragrance coming from the flower and grass. However, the feelings for raining in other seasons are quite different from that in spring. I can only feel the cold dipping into my body little by little in winter rainy days. Rain is always accompanied by typhoon in summer while in autumn,it always rains all of a sudden to make people soaked through. It is so lucky that it is spring now.

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zznn123456 说:

Are you in Canada?

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No, If I was in Canada, I would be good at English already.

I am in Fuzhou quite far from Beijing and almost in the southest of China.

By the way, I have not got FN yet, I wait the FN with the flower going declined.

If I landed in Canada to end the waiting, I would laugh in the dream, jump in the air.

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Perhaps I should use subjunctive mood in blue area. Even if green and air are objective, whether I could see the green and breathe the air is subjective and depends on whether I go outside or not.

Right?

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angelonduty 说:

Native English speakers will easily get confused when they come across such metaphors as "免费的补水面膜 ". Try not to embellish the sentance too much. I have to admit that I can hardly translate what you asked in a reasonably accurate way. 2008 might satisfy your request, I suppose.

Keep learning from all of you.

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您讲的很对.如要比喻,要让人看得懂.

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英文写作不是翻译,建议看看有关写作的书.

onlimy 说:

reorganizing it as follows:

April 2, 2007 Morning, After rain

Yersterday it was raining all the night as if it had never rained for years.

I most like the rainy days in the spring(most like,right?). It always rains at night as though it would not like to make any inconvinience to us. If I push my door open and pass through the central park for work at this moment , my eyes will be filing up with green and my every skin will be breathing the fresh and humid air just like I am doing natural water supplying skin care without any cost (tense right?如果这时候我推开门穿过中心花园去上班，我会看到满眼的绿，每寸肌肤呼吸到新鲜而湿润的空气，仿佛做了免费补水皮肤护理一样。我觉得用虚拟语气不妥，虽然有虚拟（与事实相反）的成分（我没推门出去），但绿和空气是真实的). Let me open all my feeling to sense the world. I can hear the birds singing cheerfully around me. I can feel the cool wind blowing slightly through the fresh air as well. I can even smell the sweet fragrance coming from the flower and grass. However, the feelings for raining in other seasons are quite different from that in spring. I can only feel the cold dipping into my body little by little in winter rainy days. Rain is always accompanied by typhoon in summer while in autumn,it always rains all of a sudden to make people soaked through. It is so lucky that it is spring now.

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onlimy 说:

No, If I was in Canada, I would be good at English already.

I am in Fuzhou quite far from Beijing and almost in the southest of China.

By the way, I have not got FN yet, I wait the FN with the flower going declined.

If I landed in Canada to end the waiting, I would laugh in the dream, jump in the air.

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Why did you say that my today was your tomorrow?,So I supposed that you were in Canada.

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pick some words here:

Moisturizing the Skin:
Skin's main requirement is moisture, so moisturizers help to achieve the balance of oil & moisture, so that the skin can be softened on the outer layer and keep it in a youthful condition. Supplying moisture to the skin by the use of moisturizers are the only way to prevent the skin from drying up.

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onlimy 说:

reorganizing it as follows:

April 2, 2007 Morning, After rain

Yersterday it was raining all the night as if it had never rained for years.

I most like the rainy days in the spring(most like,right?)(I like the rainy days best). It always rains at night as though it would not like to make any inconvinience to us.(so that we never fell any inconvenience )If I push my door open and pass through the central park for work at this moment (while leaving for work in the morning by passing through the central park), my eyes will be filing up with green and my every skin will be breathing the fresh and humid air just like I am doing natural water supplying skin care without any cost (my eyes are full of green and every inch of my skin is submerged in a fresh and humid air,which is the same as free skin protection by beauticians)(tense right?如果这时候我推开门穿过中心花园去上班，我会看到满眼的绿，每寸肌肤呼吸到新鲜而湿润的空气，仿佛做了免费补水皮肤护理一样。我觉得用虚拟语气不妥，虽然有虚拟（与事实相反）的成分（我没推门出去），但绿和空气是真实的). Let me open all my feeling to sense the world. I can hear the birds singing cheerfully around me. I can feel the cool wind blowing slightly through the fresh air as well. I can even smell the sweet fragrance coming from the flower and grass. However, the feelings for raining in other seasons are quite different from that in spring. I can only feel the cold dipping into my body little by little in winter rainy days. Rain is always accompanied by typhoon in summer while in autumn,it always rains all of a sudden to make people soaked through. It is so lucky that it is spring now.

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corrections in red words and hopefully learn each other

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zznn123456 说:

Why did you say that my today was your tomorrow?,So I supposed that you were in Canada.

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Shanghai 's today is Fuzhou's tomorrow. hehe. I will feel what you are feeling.

I have not got accustomed to English expression. In fact, I always write English in Chinese way.

Thank you for your modification.

I feel so happy to learn from all of you .

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Beijing2008 说:

英文写作不是翻译,建议看看有关写作的书.

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Could you give me any url to download a writing book?

I cannot find one written by native English speaker in local bookstore. I have ever downloaded one, but it has too many pages (430s pages,cambridge) to print out. Thanks very very ......much!

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google "effective English writing" you will have what you want!

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Beijing2008 说:

google "effective English writing" you will have what you want!

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Beijing2008 说:

google "effective English writing" you will have what you want!

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Thanks! let me try it right quick.

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onlimy 说:

Shanghai 's today is Fuzhou's tomorrow. hehe. I will feel what you are feeling.

I have not got accustomed to English expression. In fact, I always write English in Chinese way.

Thank you for your modification.

I feel so happy to learn from all of you .

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I lack the courage and perseverance to keep brushing up my English writing skills. If I were to write in English here, I would be sure to make a very poor show mixed with either Chinese way of thinking or grammatical problems or other kinds of misnomers. I have been keeping an eye on your diary as well as all the responses from other persons, although I answered little. I do hope your diary to continue, in a way of improving the writing abilities of us all.

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I am waiting for sharing your results^_^

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angelonduty 说:

I lack the courage and perseverance to keep brushing up my English writing skills. If I were to write in English here, I would be sure to make a very poor show mixed with either Chinese way of thinking or grammatical problems or other kinds of misnomers. I have been keeping an eye on your diary as well as all the responses from other persons, although I answered little. I do hope your diary to continue, in a way of improving the writing abilities of us all.

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LZ,come on!

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onlimy 说:

I am waiting for sharing your results^_^

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SW just went your way.

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angelonduty 说:

I lack the courage and perseverance to keep brushing up my English writing skills. If I were to write in English here, I would be sure to make a very poor show mixed with either Chinese way of thinking or grammatical problems or other kinds of misnomers. I have been keeping an eye on your diary as well as all the responses from other persons, although I answered little. I do hope your diary to continue, in a way of improving the writing abilities of us all.

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I will, thank all of you.

I'm going to post two compositions here tomorrow for I am so tired now.

Being Chinese for so many years, of course we are speaking English in Chinese way. Don't worry about it. I think we can improve this situation under Beijing and all DXs' help.

May I give you some words in Chinese style for courage?

who fear whom
good good study, day day up
If someone laughs at us, please say:"I'll give you some color see see"

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onlimy 说:

who fear whom
good good study, day day up
If someone laughs at us, please say:"I'll give you some color see see"

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Hehehe.

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onlimy 说:

I will, thank all of you.

I'm going to post two compositions here tomorrow for I am so tired now.

Being Chinese for so much years, of course we are speaking English in Chinese way. Don't worry about it. I think we can improve this situation under Beijing and all DXs' help.

May I give you some words in Chinese style for courage?

who fear whom
good good study, day day up
If someone laughs at us, please say:"I'll give you some color see see"

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April 4

I was requested to report my work in front of all my colleagues this afternoon for a special reason.

I did not take it as a matter at first. However, I felt disgusted strongly when I was reading "Love motherland, love Chinese Communist Party...". I had no choice but to read on.

It was full of exaggerated self-prizing adjectives and I felt so guilty. But I had to do so. The only thing I could do was speeding up so as to read off it quickly.

But these words were strange for me to speak out. Inevitably my voice was a little bit nervous and the reading was not fluently somehow.

I am an honest person. I can bear creating a story but I can not bear reading the story in public again and again.

I hope in the near future I can do what I want to do, say what I want to say. Nothing can be worse than being constrained to do something.

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April 5

I had a strange dream last night.

I dreamed that we were flooded with water. Being contrary with ordinary floodwater, the water was clean and limpid.

Sitting on the bamboo boat made by ourselves, my husband,daughter and I were rowing slowly and idly on the water. We passed by one family and another, watching them cutting their bamboos and making boats. In the dream, We all lived in bungalows with bamboos planted in the yards. The bamboos I dreamed of were quite different with ones in realism. They were tinier and much greener.

Passing through them,we got to the entrance of the ocean, the polices were there. They told us it was not safe if we still want to go up to. They adviced us to go to the bomb shelter.

There were some people in the bomb shelter already. There were also stores, houses. The shelter was huge and not depressing us at all. Storm was coming, we saw stormwater hitting the shelter once and again. However we didn't feel fear at it. We were funny by driving the boat to get into and out of holes one by one as playing hiding and seeking.

It seemed that we were floating to the ocean through the shelter at the end.

Hehe, I could not remember any more about the dream. How funny it was.

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onlimy 说:

April 4

I was requested to report my work in front of all my colleagues this afternoon for a special reason.

I did not take it as a matter at first. However, I felt disgusted strongly when I was reading "Love motherland, love Chinese Communist Party...". I had no choice but to read on.

It was full of exaggerated self-prizing adjectives and I felt so guilty. But I had to do so. The only thing I could do was speeding up so as to read off it quickly.

But these words were strange for me to speak out. Inevitably my voice was a little bit nervous and the reading was not fluently somehow.

I am an honest person. I can bear creating a story but I can not bear reading the story in public again and again.

I hope in the near future I can do what I want to do, say what I want to say. Nothing can be worse than being constrained to do something.

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Every now and then we are obliged to do things like what you went though yesterday. We've got to get used to it so long as we are still living on this soil. As a matter of fact, it is nothing wrong to be requested to love our motherland. I love it unconditionally, whether it be rich or impoverished, whether it be uncrrupted or the opposite. Saying this was not to label myself as patriotic nor was I to argue with what LZ has writen here. I too am often forced to do things that I hate to do and get really frustrated afterwards. But we have no choice, as you said.

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A reply to the dream that you made "last night" (it's better said this way rather than at yesterday night, by the way). I was thinking my head off how on earth you made it from a bamboo boat to a bomb shelter, from peace and tranquility to wartime, as if everything were just a boat-ride away.

Interesting.

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I agree with you that we ought to love motherland. But I don't think we should take it at mouth and it is not a condition to get some beneft from.

I was not shameful at these words but the words followed. Mao,Deng, three representives all mentioned. Luxian ,fangzhen and policy were all included.....

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zan yi ge

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angelonduty 说:

A reply to the dream that you made "last night" (it's better said this way rather than at yesterday night, by the way). I was thinking my head off how on earth you made it from a bamboo boat to a bomb shelter, from piece and tranquility to wartime, as if everything were just a boat-ridding away.

Interesting.

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It was a dream lack of logic. This bomb shelter(防空洞是这么表示的么？) was on the ground like a city. Hehe

It was coincident that my husband dreamed flood last night too. So I wrote this special dream down. The people in the dream were peaceful and happy ,they are Chinese but were very different with chinese. I'd like to suppose it was in Canada. That was FN flood.

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I need SW~~heehee

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benkok 说:

I need SW~~heehee

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SW just went your way and I ask twice as many in return.

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I think I should pay more attention to Ielts writing now.

Here is a writing topic I picked up from Ielts .

April 6,2007


Task 1: You have asked for accommodation to do a course in a country; your plan has changed and you would like to ask for new accommodation. Write the agency and explain your situation and ask for your new accommodation. (April 25 2003 General)


Dear Sir/Madiam,

This is writing to ask for a new accommodation instead of the one I asked last Monday. I am sorry for making trouble for changing my demand but I have to alter the requirement of acommodation for the situations are listed below.

I applied for doing a course in your country at Leeds University. Leeds' Information Technology Department accepted me as I expected. So I wrote to you to ask for accommodation near the university last Monday. Unfortunately I did not know until last night that Informatin System Department is at its branch college which is located at King Avenue, far from the Leeds University . So I have no choice but to ask you for a new accommodation at King Avenue.

Second, My wife got her visa last Friday. She hoped she could go to your country accompanied with me. Thus I want to ask for a double bed room not a single bed room.

I would be grateful if you could replace my recorders by the new requirement with new accommodation. Looking forward your replay and any accomodation offers.

Your faithfully
Jane Bell

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why double bed room? You don't sleep with your wife?

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Jane Bell是女人名字吧? 哪来的WIFE?别成了LESBIAN了,你好搞笑!

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Second, My wife got her visa last Friday. She hoped she could go to your country accompanied with me. Thus I want to ask for a double bed room not a single bed room.

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I applied for doing a course in your country at Leeds University. Leeds' Information Technology Department accepted me as I expected. So I wrote to you to ask for accommodation near the university last Monday. Unfortunately I did not know until last night that Informatin System Department is at its branch college which is located at King Avenue, far from the Leeds University . So I have no choice but to ask you for a new accommodation at King Avenue.

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一般是你申请了什么学校什么系,学校录取你,系没权利录取.离本部或主校区远而不是离大学远,那系所在就不是那个学校了?有些则表达不确切.

my diary in Enlish

2007-04-08 sunny but windy

I have been receiving short message from a combine of shopping mall since the day before yesterday. The 15th of April is their anniversary so they will give everything discount from the 6th to 16th. It is no doubt that it is another way they begin to their sales promotion. But I still believe there will be something really worthy well to buy. So I am going to look for something I need after end my job in company.


Thank for the space I can practice my writing here. I dare not to save my English essays in my computer at work because I want to avoid the noticing from others. Since the computer is always opened and anybody can use the files saved inside it is very danger to save personal files in. Another reason is that recently my fixed disk rang abnormally almost every day so I have to change it as soon as possible. All my files that work involved I had saved in a service while I had to delete these personal files.
The last but the most important reason is I need your help. If you pass here to read it and give me some suggestion I will appreciate it sincerely even that is a piece of word.
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I can read and hear a little. But my writing is very poor. Since I have left school over ten years I have no idea about many English words so I can not write English very exactly. That is the big nuisance in my English.[FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

I do not know if I have expressed my mind very clearly. I will expect your question and suggestion. Later I will update my diary if I have time.[FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

I hope I can stick on it and eventually improve my English.[FONT=宋体][/FONT]​

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I dare not to save my English essays in my computer at work because I want to avoid the noticing from others. Since the computer is always opened and anybody can use the files saved inside it is very danger to save personal files in.

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I can read and hear a little. But my writing is very poor.

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I have been receiving short message from a combine of shopping mall since the day before yesterday.

那个短信一直不间断地在发的话那把你的信箱也暴满了.

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Beijing2008 说:

I can read and hear a little. But my writing is very poor.

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My reading and listening skills are at intermediate level (but不合适), however, my writing skills are at beginner level.

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存什么东西在电脑或硬盘上用ON.

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电脑OPEN的话你是把机箱打开了.

The computer is always turning on.

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So I am going to look for something I need after end my job in company.

那你的工作丢了? END也不能用原型.

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希望你坚持,但最好看看写作书.

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office computer, home computer

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每一句都要斟酌一下.

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不要用什么POOR,那是口语,也不常用,书面英语的话,好坏分beginner, intermediate, and advanced三级

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或用fluent 等形容词

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BUT是否定前面讲的,不能单独成句.

My reading and listening skills are at intermediate level (but不合适), however, my writing skills are at beginner level.

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Tharnk you for your criticism. Yes,I should name me Bruce Bell for I was supposed to be a man.

double bed不是双人床么？
一间有双人床的房间怎么表达?

I am going to rewrite it later. Please point out all errors here without reservation. Thanks.

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onlimy 说:

Tharnk you for your criticism. Yes,I should name me Bruce Bell for I was supposed to be a man.

double bed不是双人床么？
一间有双人床的房间怎么表达?

I am going to rewrite it later. Please point out all errors here without reservation. Thanks.

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问题你是你和你老婆要分开睡吗?一般讲twin bed

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总得来讲,还可以,但可写得更好些.

onlimy 说:

I think I should pay more attention to Ielts writing now.

Here is a writing topic I picked up from Ielts .

April 6,2007


Task 1: You have asked for accommodation to do a course in a country; your plan has changed and you would like to ask for new accommodation. Write the agency and explain your situation and ask for your new accommodation. (April 25 2003 General)


Dear Sir/Madiam,

This is writing to ask for a new accommodation instead of the one I asked last Monday(给个具体日期更好). I am sorry for making trouble(制造麻烦,不合适) for changing my demand but I have to alter the requirement of acommodation(重复) for the situations are listed below.(最好讲PLAN变了)

I applied for doing a course at( the department of Information Technology,) in your country(多余) Leeds University. Leeds' Information Technology Department accepted me as I expected. So I wrote to you to ask for accommodation near the university last Monday. Unfortunately I did not know until last night that Informatin System Department is at its branch college which is located at King Avenue, far from the Leeds University . So I have no choice (是CHANＧE YOUR CHOICE,住远一点也是CHOICE) but to ask you for a new accommodation at King Avenue.

Second, My wife got her visa last Friday. She hoped(都已拿到VISA了还HOPE什么?) she could (不是COULD,COULD是有可能,现在是肯定要)go to your country accompanied with me. Thus I want to (不礼貌 I prefer..)ask for a double bed room not a single bed room.

I (It)would be grateful if you could replace (update) my recorders (application) by the new requirement with new accommodation. (主语不能省　Ｉ　am）　Looking forward (to)your replay and any accomodation offers.(多余）

Your faithfully
Jane Bell

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I applied for doing a course at( the department of Information Technology,) in your country(多余) Leeds University. Leeds' Information Technology Department accepted me as I expected.

并成一句．

I applied for doing a course at the department of Information Technology, Leeds University and I have been accepted.

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This letter is to inform you about the change of ...

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Dear Sir/Madiam,前要有地址，最好用一个名字：


Judy Alisen

Future Campus Partners LLC

1180 Chave Street, Suite 101

New Lizz, XYZ 1-00050

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so my writing was 6.
Thank u very much~~~~~~~.
I often wander which word I can use or not when I write in English.
Later I will write it again.
Would you please recommend a book for me ?

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Beijing2008 说:

google "effective English writing" you will have what you want!

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我也去试试

感谢2008

感谢网络

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Task 1: You have asked for accommodation to do a course in a country; your plan has changed and you would like to ask for new accommodation. Write the agency and explain your situation and ask for your new accommodation. (April 25 2003 General)


Judy Alisen
Future Campus Partners LLC
1180 Chave Street, Suite 101
New Lizz, XYZ 1-00050

Dear Mrs. Alisen,

This letter is to inform you about the change of accomodation. I has changed my plan and prefer to ask you for a new accommodation.

I applied for doing a course at the department of Information Technology, Leeds University and I have been accepted. At the same time I also applied one at Kings University where I have not received any information from for a long time. I hereby supposed there were no hope for King University and gave it up. Accordingly I wrote to you to ask for accommodation at Leed road on April 4,2007.

Fortunately, I finally received the matriculating paper from Kings University yersterday. Of course I would like to change my plan to take enrollment in Kings University . Therefore I was writing to asked for a new accommodation at King Avenue.

Furthermore, my wife got her visa last Friday. She will accompany me to do the course. Consequently I need a twin bed room instead of a single bed room.

It would be grateful if you could update my application by the new requirement with new accommodation as soon as possible. I am looking forward to your reply.

Your sincerely
Bruce Bell


Could this letter be better? I am waiting for directions.

Beijing2008, may I ask for your experience to study English so well?
Thanks.

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onlimy 说:

Task 1: You have asked for accommodation to do a course in a country; your plan has changed and you would like to ask for new accommodation. Write the agency and explain your situation and ask for your new accommodation. (April 25 2003 General)


Judy Alisen
Future Campus Partners LLC
1180 Chave Street, Suite 101
New Lizz, XYZ 1-00050

Dear Mrs. Alisen,

This letter is to inform you about the change of accomodation. I has changed my plan and prefer to ask you for a new accommodation.

I applied for doing a course at the department of Information Technology, Leeds University and I have been accepted. At the same time I also applied one at Kings University where I have not received any information from for a long time. I hereby supposed there were no hope for King University and gave it up. Accordingly I wrote to you to ask for accommodation at Leed road on April 4,2007.

Fortunately, I finally received the matriculating paper from Kings University yersterday. Of course I would like to change my plan to take enrollment in Kings University . Therefore I was writing to asked for a new accommodation at King Avenue.

Furthermore, my wife got her visa last Friday. She will accompany me to do the course. Consequently I need a twin bed room instead of a single bed room.

It would be grateful if you could update my application by the new requirement with new accommodation as soon as possible. I am looking forward to your reply.

Your sincerely
Bruce Bell


Could this letter be better? I am waiting for directions.

Beijing2008, may I ask for your experience to study English so well?
Thanks.

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改了好多了,你觉得呢?
我是因为在MCGILL读了四年半二个MASTER学位,有很多时间学英文.

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Judy Alisen
Future Campus Partners LLC
1180 Chave Street, Suite 101
New Lizz, XYZ 1-00050

Dear Mrs. Alisen,

This letter is to inform you about the change of accomodation. I has (have) changed my plan. and prefer to (拿掉) So I have to ask you for a new accommodation.

I applied for doing a course at the department of Information Technology, Leeds University and I have been accepted. At the same time I also applied for one course at Kings University. I have did not received any information before I submit an application to you on April 4, 2007 and asked for an apartment near Leeds university.

Fortunately, finally received the acceptance letter matriculating paper from Kings University yersterday. Of coursse After careful consideration, I would like decided to change my study plan. I prefer to take enrollment in at Kings University. Therefore I was writing to asked for hope you find a new accommodation at King Avenue.for me near Kings University.

Furthermore, my wife got her visa last Friday. She will accompany me to do the course go to your country. Consequently I need an two twin bed room apartment instead of a single a one bed room apartment.

It would be grateful if you could update my application by with the new requirement with new accommodation as soon as possible. I am looking forward to your reply.

Your sincerely
Bruce Bell

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我给你改了以后:

April 7, 2007
Judy Alisen
Future Campus Partners LLC
1180 Chave Street, Suite 101
New Lizz, XYZ 1-00050

Dear Mrs. Alisen,

This letter is to inform you about the change of accomodation. I have changed my study plan. So I have to ask you to change my application and find a new apartment for me.

My previous application was to ask you to find an apartment near Leeds University since I applied for doing a course at the department of Information Technology, Leeds University and I have been accepted. However, I also applied for one course at Kings University. I did not receive any information before I submit the application to you on April 4.

Fortunately, I received the acceptance letter from Kings University yersterday. After careful consideration, I decided to change my study plan. I prefer to take enrollment at Kings University. Therefore I hope you to find a new accommodation for me near Kings University.

Furthermore, my wife got her visa last Friday. She will accompany me to go to your country. Consequently I need a two bed room apartment instead of a one bed room apartment.

It would be grateful if you could update my application with the new requirement. I am looking forward to your reply.

Your sincerely

Bruce Bell

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我们在国外的房子一般是不带家具的,但有的包热,热水和电,有的要你自付.你可在这方面再加些内容.

双人房等是旅馆才有的,除了阔佬,学生住不起.

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房型是按几个BED ROOM 来算的,含不含卫生,厨房(包炉紫冰柜)也要说明.有没有洗衣洗碗设备也要说明.

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一个字如accommodation不要重复多次使用,否则显出词贫,也得不到高分.

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onlimy 说:

Tharnk you for your criticism. Yes,I should name me Bruce Bell for I was supposed to be a man.

double bed不是双人床么？
一间有双人床的房间怎么表达?

I am going to rewrite it later. Please point out all errors here without reservation. Thanks.

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hesitation

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Thank you,beijing2008

It appears more clear in meaning and variously in words and sentences.
再学到一点，客观的事情时候要把事务作主语,Thus 不会总I,I,I,I的了。This letter, my previous application...

btw, could " I did not receive any information before I submit the application to you on April 4."
be altered to
" I had not received any information before I submited the application to you on April 4."?

Could "reservation " be used in "无保留地指出我的错误"？

I am so admiring your having gotten 2 master degrees in foreign university that I could do nothing but learn and learn from you!

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before 是一个时间点，一般用过去时就行，如你用since...可用完成时．当然before也可用过去完成，强调你一直没收到，两者都可．

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毫无保留我觉的zznn12345用hesitation的对．

Ｒeservation是订票，预定．

我们写信一般在最后说：
Don't hesitate to contact me if you have any question.

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onlimy 说:

Thank you,beijing2008

It appears more clearer in the meaning and variously in words and sentences.

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学习一下

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It appears clearer in the meaning and has more various usage in words and sentences than before.

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Furthermore, my wife got her visa last Friday. She will accompany me to do the course. Consequently I need a twin bed room instead of a single bed room where heating system, cooker and washer are required. Electricity cooker is prefered.

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April 8,2007

General Training Writing Sample
Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You rent a house through an agency. The heating system has stopped working. You phoned the agency a week ago but it has still not been repaired.
Write a letter to the agency. In your letter introduce yourself
and explain the situation
say what action you would like the agency to take
Write at least 150 words.

You do not need to write your own address.
Begin your letter as follows:

Dear.......................,


Dear Mr. Smith,

This letter is writing to you to complain the heating system in my house, rent through you three weeks before, has stopped working for almost two weeks. Actually you promised that you would make it repaired immediately when I phoned you to ask for help last week.

I has been used to warm weather for 30 years and can not suffer from even a bit cold without warming system. Being a student at Leeds' University, I have many assignments to do. How could I focus on my study in the cold winter night for indeed it is -40 degree? I tried to fix it by myself many times but indicator lights kept dark. The air-conditioner seems perfect in appearance, however, I dare not open it to look into what has been wrong with it . I have no idea about it now at all .

I hope this letter could drag your attention to this trouble and give me any practical action to have it run in order again. Mend or replacement are all appropriate. Please feel free to contact me at 000-8888888 if you are coming. I will get to home as soon as possible wherever I am being.


Your faithfully
Janry Bell

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can I say:

Warming system is included in my rent and you are responsible to offer heating service for me. If you could not repair or replace it within one week, could you please introduce me a new accommodation and refund some discount of the rent of three weeks since heating system went wrong?

Is it polite? I think it is reasonable.

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onlimy 说:

April 8,2007

General Training Writing Sample
Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You rent a house through an agency. The heating system has stopped working. You phoned the agency a week ago but it has still not been repaired.
Write a letter to the agency. In your letter introduce yourself
and explain the situation
say what action you would like the agency to take
Write at least 150 words.

You do not need to write your own address.
Begin your letter as follows:

Dear.......................,


Dear Mr. Smith,


This letter is writing to you to complain the heating system in my house, rent through you three weeks before, has stopped working for almost two weeks. Actually you promised that you would make it repaired immediately when I phoned you to ask for help last week.(I am Janry Bell,I write to complain about your services regarding my heating system that did not work for two weeks because I am very regretful thay you did not take any measures to tackle it even though I informed you the problems by phone a week ago.)

I has been used to warm weather for 30 years and can not suffer from even a bit cold without warming system. Being a student at Leeds' University, I have many assignments to do. How could I focus on my study in the cold winter night for indeed it is -40 degree? I tried to fix it by myself many times but indicator lights kept dark. The air-conditioner seems perfect in appearance, however, I dare not open it to look into what has been wrong with it . I have no idea about it now at all . (I am used to living in a warm room in winter and can not suffer from cold.Being a student at Leeds' University,I have to finish many homework every day and usually may study into deep night ,therefore I am obliged to wear thick cotton coat and gloves to fight for the cold,which lead to inconvenience for me and nearly force me to stop study,even worse the room temperature is declined to -40 degree centigrade these days because of the heavy snow.How can I concentrate on my study under such lower tmeperature !)

I hope this letter could drag your attention to this trouble and give me any practical action to have it run in order again. Mend or replacement are all appropriate. Please feel free to contact me at 000-8888888 if you are coming. I will get to home as soon as possible wherever I am being.

(I hope that you should send workers to my home immediatley to check and repaire the heating system and bring a new spare one as well,if the old one can not be put into operation after maintenance ,pls.replace a new one to keep my room warm.

Your prompt action will be highly appreciated.

Your faithfully
Janry Bell

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Pls.kindly not that you did not introduce yourself first according to the task,I am not sure whether it is necessary or not ,ask 2008 for the comments.

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onlimy 说:

April 8,2007

General Training Writing Sample
Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You rent a house through an agency. The heating system has stopped working. You phoned the agency a week ago but it has still not been repaired.
Write a letter to the agency. In your letter introduce yourself
and explain the situation
say what action you would like the agency to take
Write at least 150 words.

You do not need to write your own address.
Begin your letter as follows:

Dear.......................,


Dear Mr. Smith,

This letter is writing to you to complain the heating system in my house, rent through you three weeks before, has stopped working for almost two weeks. Actually you promised that you would make it repaired immediately when I phoned you to ask for help last week.

I has been used to warm weather for 30 years and can not suffer from even a bit cold without warming system. Being a student at Leeds' University, I have many assignments to do. How could I focus on my study in the cold winter night for indeed it is -40 degree? I tried to fix it by myself many times but indicator lights kept dark. The air-conditioner seems perfect in appearance, however, I dare not open it to look into what has been wrong with it . I have no idea about it now at all .

I hope this letter could drag your attention to this trouble and give me any practical action to have it run in order again. Mend or replacement are all appropriate. Please feel free to contact me at 000-8888888 if you are coming. I will get to home as soon as possible wherever I am being.


Your faithfully
Janry Bell

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Thanks for sharing your writing and I learn a lot.

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Beijing2008 说:

毫无保留我觉的zznn12345用hesitation的对．

Ｒeservation是订票，预定．

我们写信一般在最后说：
Don't hesitate to contact me if you have any question.

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TKS

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I have felt not good since Thursday and I think that the specail days are coming,therefore I did not care about it ,until Saturday I realised that I cought cold because the conditions are becoming worse.After taking medicine,I felt better. How fool I am!

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baohuai的英语不错，就是没有来过英语世界，BEIJING2008英语更好，而且乐于为人师，经常指导XDJM，偶代表板块另外两位美女斑竹表示感谢了。

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Keeping a diary in English is one of the effective ways to improve our English writing ability. Compared with other forms of writing, it is shorter and takes less time. It can help us to cultivate the habit of thinking in English. If we persist in this practice, gradually we'll learn how to express ourselves in English. In keeping a diary in English, we inevitably run up against a lot of difficulties .In the first place, it often happens that we have trouble finding appropriate words and phases to give expression to our mind. Secondly , there are many idiomatic ways of saying things in Chinese. And it is extremely hard for us to put them into English properly. Certainly, there are some other roadblocks we may come across in our keeping a diary in English. it is of great use to keep a diary in English for the development of our writing skills.

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Thank you zznn,

I know I have to introduce myself but I don'k know what I should.

name? being a student?a client of the agency?or others?

I'll modify it later. Thank you for your directions.

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Banzhu,

Could you please not set this topic up to the top? Thks.

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onlimy 说:

Banzhu,

Could you please not set this topic up to the top? Thks.

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why?it is a useful topic for us.

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onlimy 说:

Thank you zznn,

I know I have to introduce myself but I don'k know what I should.

name? being a student?a client of the agency?or others?

I'll modify it later. Thank you for your directions.

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you can just simply say I am xxxx,the 1st year student of Leeds university with the major of Environmental Engineering.Any way,I am not sure about it,0808080808080808,pls.comments.

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onlimy 说:

can I say:

Warming system is included in my rent and you are responsible to offer heating service for me. If you could not repair or replace it within one week, could you please introduce me a new accommodation and refund some discount of the rent of three weeks since heating system went wrong?

Is it polite? I think it is reasonable.

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一般讲I prefer the rent including heating and hot water. I will be responsible for electricity and other utilities. 这样AGENT就知你要什么样的房子了.

other utilities include gas, cable, phone, and Internet.
后面蓝色标出的话不合适也不必要,那是签LEASE时考虑的.

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zznn123456 说:

you can just simply say I am xxxx,the 1st year student of Leeds university with the major of Environmental Engineering.Any way,I am not sure about it,0808080808080808,pls.comments.

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可在右上方加上姓名,地址电话,如有申请号,加上号码,就和COVER LETTER 一样.

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31415926 说:

baohuai的英语不错，就是没有来过英语世界，BEIJING2008英语更好，而且乐于为人师，经常指导XDJM，偶代表板块另外两位美女斑竹表示感谢了。

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不用，我没小包忙，他在干吗？

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我发现一个现象，就是很多ＭＭ喜欢用长句，在写作时，除非你是ＡＤＶＡＮＣＥＤ级水平，否则最好用短句，简明扼要，用词准确，时态一致就行．

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The power of Banzhu is too great to say no.

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onlimy 说:

The power of Banzhu is too great to say no.

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I can't understand what is your meaning...

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Btw, I hope some day I can watch all Banzhus' PKing for your responsibility and power are equivalent . Hei hei.

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31415926 说:

不好意思，相同的主题，我合并了，两位LZ PK一下，越写越精彩！

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The power of Banzhu is too great for me to say no.

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onlimy 说:

Banzhu,

Could you please not set this topic up to the top? Thks.

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民主国家，it's up to you!

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Thank 314

I am so busy to come here over two days . I'll be back to continue my diary after I finish the work.

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onlimy 说:

Thank 314

I am so busy to come here over two days . I'll be back to continue my diary after I finish the work.

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Anytime you see fit.

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angelonduty 说:

Anytime you see fit.

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anytime you are convenient.

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I was feeling not good as I broken down the good habit and had not written diaries for almost one week.

So I descided I would double my diaries in the next week for expiation.

Today on my way home, I found there were full of flowers blossoming on Industry Road. I could not tell the name of the trees which reminded me of Locust Flower.

When I was a little child, there was a Locust Tree standing beside basketball field of the academe. With the coming of the spring, Locust Flowers were growing up. Boys climbed the tree to disjunction the branches and throw them down. Girls picked up the flowers from the branches. We often ate the flowers even without washing. Locust Flowers tasted a bit sweat and seemed clean enough. I loved this kind of food very much.

But today , when I saw these unkonwn flowers I did not have any desire to eat them at all. I don't know why/the reason (which is better?). Is it not clean? Am I not in hunger? Am I too tired to eat? Could anybody tell me?Maybe there is no answer.

btw, why is 槐树= Locust Tree?

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onlimy 说:

I was feeling not good as I broken down the good habit and had not written diaries for almost one week.

So I descided I would double my diaries in the next week for expiation.

Today on my way home, I found there were full of flowers blossoming on Industry Road. I could not tell the name of the trees which reminded me of Locust Flower.

When I was a little child, there was a Locust Tree standing beside basketball field of the academe. With the coming of the spring, Locust Flowers were growing up. Boys climbed the tree to disjunction the branches and throw them down. Girls picked up the flowers from the branches. We often ate the flowers even without washing. Locust Flowers tasted a bit sweat and seemed clean enough. I loved this kind of food very much.

But today , when I saw these unkonwn flowers I did not have any desire to eat them at all. I don't know why/the reason (which is better?). Is it not clean? Am I not in hunger? Am I too tired to eat? Could anybody tell me?Maybe there is no answer.

btw, why is 槐树= Locust Tree?

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Because you have too many leisure food to eat now and forget your favorite in the past which brough you a lot of pleasure.

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Maybe I am too old and numb to feel the world like a child.

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onlimy 说:

Maybe I am too old and numb to feel the world like a child.

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Maybe I am too old to gain the pleaure from simple things

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onlimy 说:

Maybe I am too old and numb to feel the world like a child.

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I think this sentence might be wrong, because it let us feel child cannot feel the change of the world sensitively either.
maybe it will be better if we change the sentence as "I am too old and numb to feel the change of the world,and never like a chlid."

Just my own thought, and hope experts give advice

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zznn123456 说:

Maybe I am too old to gain the pleaure from simple things

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呵呵,快手
btw,请问二位楼主MM能带我一个吗?

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April 14,2007 Saturday morning

Yesterday when I talked with my old classmate on QQ, he told me something really disappointed me a lot.

He said he had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other. He told me the exciting for having dinner with name-unknown young girl who is only 24 years old. He said he would go on with her and kept their names unknown forever. He asked me whether there was any unsafety to date with an not bad girl, if he did not tell his name, unit and address even the telephone number.

I told him it was not necessary to keep the identity as a secret if you supposed she was worthy to affiliate with. If she was not, why you spent time on her? It was safe for people in good character, with no any "other idea", to make friend each other . He said why he did not have other idea. He said he did have some other idea indeed however he knew he did not ought to have.

I don't know what a such thing is happening. Almost every man about 40 years old , who is free for life and business, has an intention to do something with young lady without effecting his family. I can understand and forgive the affection which is built by daily life without motive. I cannot agree with the story which is made by man's hunting novelty on purpose.

Am I innocent or idealist as he said? I was so desponded with what he was alike in current society while he had been pure boy in the past.

I also felt unhappy as he said there was no deep friendship between man and woman as my husband said before. He said they would become lover otherwise going fade. I really hope that we can keep deep friendship with some of men forever because there were some good men besides the husbands. I don't think it clever and longtime to be lover.

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thank both of you for correcting the sentence, I am going for breakfast now, see you later.

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IBT 说:

I think this sentence might be wrong, because it let us feel child cannot feel the change of the world sensitively either.
maybe it will be better if we change the sentence as "I am too old and numb to feel the change of the world,and never like a chlid."

Just my own thought, and hope experts give advice

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Firstly welcome to "my home""World of English"

My opinion is that "too...to" is a fixed phrase to express negative meanings,so it does not need connection word "and".

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Onlimy,hehe ,i like your name ,because it sounds like only me
About your punishment to yourself ,I feel it unadvisable. Since the improvement of writing cannot count on quantity but quality, we will gain more if we write and exchage our view and amend.

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zznn123456 说:

Firstly welcome to "my home""World of English"

My opinion is that "too...to" is a fixed phrase to express negative meanings,so it does not need connection word "and".

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I am a member too.
Let's continue
Zznn ,your "and" means "and numb" or "and never"
I think the latter can be removed

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IBT 说:

Onlimy,hehe ,i like your name ,because it sounds like only me
About your punishment to yourself ,I feel it unadvisable. Since the improvement of writing cannot count on quantity but quality, we will gain more if we write and exchage our view and amend.

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Thank you for your advice , focus more on the quality than quantity.

by the way, you are clever , the understanding of onlimy is right! I thought only me is too arrogant, so I changed it to onlimy.

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onlimy 说:

Thank you for your advice , focus more on the quality than quantity.

by the way, you are clever , the understanding of onlimy is right! I thought only me is too arrogant, so I changed it to onlimy.

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还没吃饭去呢,还是端着饭碗呢

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After thinking the question of "and" again, i feel Zznn is right.
But do you think it proper if i say " i am too old and too numb to feel the change of the world, never like a chlid."

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there is a question to ask both of you.

If there are two phrase attributive , how can I put them in order? just like the red color, I have no idea but putting an comma between them.

" It was safe for people in good character, with no any "other idea", to make friend each other ."

or use "and" instead of comma?

In addition, I think the attributive is too long to understand the whole sentence.

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IBT 说:

还没吃饭去呢,还是端着饭碗呢

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I have done it in a hurry.

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现在我要"不客气的"对这篇下手啦,请多多指教啊

Yesterday when I talked with my old classmate on QQ, he told me something really disappointed (disappointing)me a lot.

He said he had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other. He told me the exciting for having dinner with name-unknown( 有这种说法吗,只unknown一个词是不是可以表达意思了) young (形容词排序可否正确)girl who is(是否省略更好些) only 24 years old. He said he would go on with her and kept their names unknown forever(hehe, interesting). He asked me whether there was any unsafety(这个词我不是很熟悉,它的英文释义需要查查,你们觉得risk在这怎样) to (添加continue dating)date with an not bad girl , if he did not tell his name, unit(我觉得这应该是career) and address even the telephone number.
I told him it was not necessary to keep the identity as a secret if you thought she was worthy to affiliate with(讲解一下这个短语的意思). If she was not, why you spent time on her? It was safe for people in(是用这个介词吗) good character to make friend each other with no any "other idea". He said why he did not have other idea. He said he did have some other idea(s) indeed however he knew he did not ought to have.(前面这几句话没大看懂,句子之间需要连词)
I don't know what a such thing is happening. Almost every man about 40 years old , who is free for (这个短语是什么意思,of?)life and business, has an intention to do something with young lady without effecting his family. I can understand and forgive the affection which is built by daily life without motive(motivating?). I cannot agree with the story which is made by man's hunting novelty on purpose.

Am I innocent(naive?) or idealist(形容词和名词并列) as he said? I was so desponded with what he was alike (可否省掉?)in current society while he had been pure boy in the past.

呵呵，没改过文章，一通瞎写,头晕眼花,请指教

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onlimy 说:

there is a question to ask both of you.

If there are two phrase attributive , how can I put them in order? just like the red color, I have no idea but putting an comma between them.

" It was safe for people in good character, with no any "other idea", to make friend each other ."

or use "and" instead of comma?

In addition, I think the attributive is too long to understand the whole sentence.

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这问题还得问高手,他们人都哪去啦
是不是还那规则,如果两个之间应该用"and",三以上,前面用逗号最后用"and"?
关于多重定语修饰,顺序问题还得查查

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He said why he did not have other idea. He said he did have some other ideas indeed, however he knew he did not ought to have.
他说为什么他没有其他想法，他说它确实有想法但知道他不应该有。不知道该怎么组织。
I cannot help translating Chinese into English again.

disappointing,risk,continue dating,good!
learn from you!

Am I innocent or being idealist as he said?

in my understanding, innocent and naive are all the meaning of 天真的
but innocent has the meaning of 无知, that is 无知型的天真. right?

motive(motivating?) 动机，目的, is motive right?

yes, I should use free of to express the meaning of 不愁生活和事业

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by the way ,prize you with to compensate your hard work

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innocent是无辜的.特别指犯罪.

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一直都光顾玩啦
08竟然在这个时候来了，呵呵,真好

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Hamilton: I am 100 percent innocent
By Agence France Presse
This report filed September 21, 2004
Phonak's Tyler Hamilton, who won the Olympic time trial gold medal last month, said he was totally innocent of the charge of blood doping after it was revealed on Tuesday he had become the first athlete to test positive for it.


Click image to enlarge
by AFP (file photo)


Hamilton at the Vuelta


The 33-year-old faces a two year ban after testing positive after winning the Tour of Spain's eighth stage time trial on September 11 and he pulled out of the Tour six days later apparently due to stomach problems. Hamilton's Swiss Phonak team confirmed the positive result and news of the second sample is expected within 48 hours.

However Hamilton insisted he was innocent at a hastily assembled press conference at the town of Regensdorf near Zürich.

"This affair has been like a thunderbolt," admitted the American. "I am absolutely devastated to have to be here this evening as are my family, my friends and teammates. But I can assure you of one thing I am 100 percent innocent.

"I am not going to risk my life and that of my wife with a blood transfusion, there must have been some kind of mistake," he added.

Hamilton said that he would never dope and if he felt he had to he would prefer to retire.

"I am accused of taking someone else's blood, but anybody who knows me would accept that I would never do such a thing," he said. "I know what I put into my body and what I don't. Cycling is very important for me but not everything. If was to think I had to do something like that I would rather put my bike away."

Dick Pound, head of the World Anti-Doping Agency (WADA), declared himself satisfied with the news.

"If it stays positive, then it will the first ever case of this form of doping being detected," he said in Montreal where he was attending WADA's executive committee meeting.

Phonak director Alvaro Pino said he was confident about Hamilton's innocence. Live on Spanish television while driving a car during the 16th stage of the Tour of Spain, Pino said: "Last night (Monday), he (Hamilton) said 'you can sleep soundly.'"

"I believe him. He is an intelligent guy who would not take the risk of having a blood transfusion," Pino added. "The test result is not yet conclusive. I can't tell you any more."

The UCI has for the first time used a method to detect blood-doping which has been used in legal medicine for paternity tests. The tests were developed in Sydney and are now used by two accredited laboratories in Athens and Lausanne, Switzerland.

The test can identify different groups of red blood cells which thereby determine conclusively whether blood-doping has taken place.

Usually an athlete will withdraw blood before reintroducing it before an event to increase oxygen-carrying capacity to the muscles hence enhancing his performance.

Till now blood doping, suspected of being used in athletics for the last 30 years, was undetectable.

Hamilton has had an eventful, up-and-down year, injuring his back in a crash which led to his retirement during the 13th stage of the Tour de France in July but bounced back to win the time-trial in Athens.

Hamilton famously raced three weeks to finish fourth in the 2003 Tour de France after breaking his collarbone in the first stage.

Hamilton dominated the Tour of Romandy this year to such an extent he was considered among an elite group of riders as a possible Tour de France champion. However his Tour challenge faltered following a fall at Angers.

For Phonak, it was the second doping affair to hit them during the year following the positive test for blood-boosting drug EPO by Switzerland's Oscar Camenzind. Camenzind was axed by the team and he retired from the sport before being suspended by the Swiss Olympic committee for two years.

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IBT 说:

一直都光顾玩啦
08竟然在这个时候来了，呵呵,真好

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刚回家

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这样看来innocent是个挺重的词
那比如说，要是和朋友开玩笑的时候，说句类似＂我是清白的＂之类的话，可以用这个吗？
还有个小请教，就是想问问，０８知道什么好点的可以查到例句的网上词典吗
谢啦

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Beijing2008 说:

刚回家

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哦，我知道啦，一定是同事的欢送会吧，一定很 吧

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IBT 说:

现在我要"不客气的"对这篇下手啦,请多多指教啊

Yesterday when I talked with my old classmate on QQ, he told me something really disappointed (disappointing)me a lot.

He said he had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other. He told me the exciting for having dinner with name-unknown( 有这种说法吗,只unknown一个词是不是可以表达意思了) young (形容词排序可否正确)girl who is(是否省略更好些) only 24 years old. He said he would go on with her and kept their names unknown forever(hehe, interesting). He asked me whether there was any unsafety(这个词我不是很熟悉,它的英文释义需要查查,你们觉得risk在这怎样) to (添加continue dating)date with an not bad girl , if he did not tell his name, unit(我觉得这应该是career) and address even the telephone number.
I told him it was not necessary to keep the identity as a secret if you thought she was worthy to affiliate with(讲解一下这个短语的意思). If she was not, why you spent time on her? It was safe for people in(是用这个介词吗) good character to make friend each other with no any "other idea". He said why he did not have other idea. He said he did have some other idea(s) indeed however he knew he did not ought to have.(前面这几句话没大看懂,句子之间需要连词)
I don't know what a such thing is happening. Almost every man about 40 years old , who is free for (这个短语是什么意思,of?)life and business, has an intention to do something with young lady without effecting his family. I can understand and forgive the affection which is built by daily life without motive(motivating?). I cannot agree with the story which is made by man's hunting novelty on purpose.

Am I innocent(naive?) or idealist(形容词和名词并列) as he said? I was so desponded with what he was alike (可否省掉?)in current society while he had been pure boy in the past.

呵呵，没改过文章，一通瞎写,头晕眼花,请指教

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指出了一些问题.
文章每句都有问题.

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IBT 说:

这样看来innocent是个挺重的词
那比如说，要是和朋友开玩笑的时候，说句类似＂我是清白的＂之类的话，可以用这个吗？
还有个小请教，就是想问问，０８知道什么好点的可以查到例句的网上词典吗
谢啦

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我是清白的,对

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IBT 说:

这样看来innocent是个挺重的词
那比如说，要是和朋友开玩笑的时候，说句类似＂我是清白的＂之类的话，可以用这个吗？
还有个小请教，就是想问问，０８知道什么好点的可以查到例句的网上词典吗
谢啦

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原版电影里很多这样的对白啊

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IBT 说:

这样看来innocent是个挺重的词
那比如说，要是和朋友开玩笑的时候，说句类似＂我是清白的＂之类的话，可以用这个吗？
还有个小请教，就是想问问，０８知道什么好点的可以查到例句的网上词典吗
谢啦

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一般GOOGLE一下就有了.

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IBT 说:

这样看来innocent是个挺重的词
那比如说，要是和朋友开玩笑的时候，说句类似＂我是清白的＂之类的话，可以用这个吗？
还有个小请教，就是想问问，０８知道什么好点的可以查到例句的网上词典吗
谢啦

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I am 100 percent innocent.

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一般当别人CHARGE你什么坏的东西时用

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是，改起来挺麻烦的
而且我觉得改文章更累，因为几乎想把人家每句话都改成自己写的来得更快写些，但却不行，必须在尽量保持原貌的情况下改成更好的
更何况我这两把刷子，呵呵
onlyme还在呢，也不过来赶紧，呵呵

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Beijing2008 说:

一般当别人CHARGE你什么坏的东西时用

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学到一个好词，charge，这个词也用得太广了

还有一个就是我和onlyme都不太清楚的
motivate
我好象有隐约影响这个词是有那种生活的激情的意思吧
还是要换成exciting？或者stimulative？

太怕你走掉啦，因为都很晚啦，呵呵，赶快写，比较乱

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我是用google查了一下，但带例句的不多，甚至还不如金山：（
可我又不知道该用什么关键词可以查到带例句的，呵呵

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Yesterday when I talked with my old classmate on QQ, he told me something really disappointed (disappointing)me a lot.
从句和主句主语不一致

Yesterday, when I was chatting with one of my old classmates on QQ, I was very disappointed with his philosophy of life.

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老板加薪水给你就是motivate 你

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表扬你也是motivate

你自己也可SELF-MOTIVATION

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啊，one　of　，这个我还一直在考虑改不改呢，因为我记得好象如果说my old classmate 就是指自己就这一个classmate的意思，对吗？
不过我又觉得也许on　ＱＱ就真的只有这一个，所以没改

不过主句和从句主语不一致我不知道，从没注意过这个问题，自己也经常这样说：（

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不改了,太累了.改天吧

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IBT 说:

啊，one　of　，这个我还一直在考虑改不改呢，因为我记得好象如果说my old classmate 就是指自己就这一个classmate的意思，对吗？
不过我又觉得也许on　ＱＱ就真的只有这一个，所以没改

不过主句和从句主语不一致我不知道，从没注意过这个问题，自己也经常这样说：（

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这是第一句,谁是谁啊?也可在my old classmate后加个MR.XXX

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Beijing2008 说:

不改了,太累了.改天吧

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嗯，是太晚啦，早点休息吧

Beijing2008 说:

这是第一句,谁是谁啊?也可在my old classmate后加个MR.XXX

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嗯，明白

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He said he had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other

He was going to have a date with a girl on the Internet. And they didn't even exchange their real names.

不要用长句,说过很多遍了,特别是BEGINNER级水平地时候

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made an appointment 是去工作面试,看医生什么的约会.
情人约会DATE

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叙说时不要用he told,he said,全拿掉,那是口语化的东西,写作不能这样,就是口语也没必要,那是中国式口语翻译.写作不是翻译,这样写没有任何效果.看书看书看书!

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Beijing2008 说:

He said he had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other

He was going to have a date with a girl on the Internet. And they didn't even exchange their real names.

不要用长句,说过很多遍了,特别是BEGINNER级水平地时候

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学习，如果没有丰富的词汇和语法知识，很难写出好的长句．不过英语Ｇ，Ｔ考试作文都建议在文章里写几句漂亮的长句 ，还得学

另外，have　a　date
能否直接简练成date　a　girl？

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IBT 说:

学习，如果没有丰富的词汇和语法知识，很难写出好的长句．不过英语Ｇ，Ｔ考试作文都建议在文章里写几句漂亮的长句 ，还得学

另外，have　a　date
能否直接简练成date　a　girl？

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可以,如果是已约过了,就说
he dated a girl he met on the Internet.
好象作者后面说是约过了.

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Beijing2008 说:

叙说时不要用he told,he said,全拿掉,那是口语化的东西,写作不能这样,就是口语也没必要,那是中国式口语翻译.写作不是翻译,这样写没有任何效果.看书看书看书!

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０８真象个老师，而且是个严厉的老师

我这个深有体会，因为我总爱写I think ,：（

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IBT 说:

学习，如果没有丰富的词汇和语法知识，很难写出好的长句．不过英语Ｇ，Ｔ考试作文都建议在文章里写几句漂亮的长句 ，还得学

另外，have　a　date
能否直接简练成date　a　girl？

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是啊,写得漂亮才行.

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IBT 说:

０８真象个老师，而且是个严厉的老师

我这个深有体会，因为我总爱写I think ,：（

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西方老师最讨厌I THINK,你这样写零分,他们不喜欢THINK出来的东西.他们喜欢NUMBERS,EVIDENCES,BIBLIOGRAPHIES,CITATIONS,....

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tough rigid strict 哪个更好，说一个老师严厉
或者都不合适，另有它词？

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Beijing2008 说:

西方老师最讨厌I THINK,你这样写零分,他们不喜欢THINK出来的东西.他们喜欢NUMBERS,EVIDENCES,BIBLIOGRAPHIES,CITATIONS,....

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是，以后坚决文章里不出现这个词，即便说也得说　as my point of view

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IBT 说:

tough rigid strict 哪个更好，说一个老师严厉
或者都不合适，另有它词？

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看你从哪个角度了.我是quite strict

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Rigorous in the imposition of discipline:

e.g. a strict parent.

Exacting in enforcement, observance, or requirement; stringent:

e.g. strict standards.See Synonyms at severe

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He told me the exciting for having dinner with name-unknown( 有这种说法吗,只unknown一个词是不是可以表达意思了) young (形容词排序可否正确)girl who is(是否省略更好些) only 24 years old.

冠词呢?

什么叫UNKNOWN GIRL?没听说过.

He was excited to have a dinner with a young girl at age 24. He didn't want to know her name.倒知道年龄,真怪!

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对了，突然想起来，是不是０８你曾经建议过在网上找，我忘了那个词咋说了，好象是批判性写作的意思吧？

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He said he would go on with her and kept their names unknown forever(hehe, interesting). He asked me whether there was any unsafety(这个词我不是很熟悉,它的英文释义需要查查,你们觉得risk在这怎样) to (添加continue dating)date with an not bad girl , if he did not tell his name, unit(我觉得这应该是career) and address even the telephone number.

纯粹是把中文字翻成英文字还不确切.

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IBT 说:

对了，突然想起来，是不是０８你曾经建议过在网上找，我忘了那个词咋说了，好象是批判性写作的意思吧？

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effective 有效的

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Beijing2008 说:

He told me the exciting for having dinner with name-unknown( 有这种说法吗,只unknown一个词是不是可以表达意思了) young (形容词排序可否正确)girl who is(是否省略更好些) only 24 years old.

冠词呢?

什么叫UNKNOWN GIRL?没听说过.

He was excited to have a dinner with a young girl at age 24. He didn't want to know her name.倒知道年龄,真怪!

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又查了一下，呵呵，unknown和＂不知道名字＂完全不是一个概念
另外，又看了一下改后的句子，觉得可不可以这样　...a young girl,only 24 years old,有点强调年纪差别有些大

另外，网友年龄是重要的名字却是不重要的，呵呵

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对了，是effective，呵呵，我还查了，不过后来电脑染病毒重装就给忘了，现在一听你讲又给想起来啦，呵呵
我得再查查

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Beijing2008 说:

He said he would go on with her and kept their names unknown forever(hehe, interesting). He asked me whether there was any unsafety(这个词我不是很熟悉,它的英文释义需要查查,你们觉得risk在这怎样) to (添加continue dating)date with an not bad girl , if he did not tell his name, unit(我觉得这应该是career) and address even the telephone number.

纯粹是把中文字翻成英文字还不确切.

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He was hesitating if he should keep such a ridiculous relationship with the girl. However, he won't tell her any personal information such as name, work, address and even phone number. He wanted to know my opinions and comments.

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IBT 说:

又查了一下，呵呵，unknown和＂不知道名字＂完全不是一个概念
另外，又看了一下改后的句子，觉得可不可以这样　...a young girl,only 24 years old,有点强调年纪差别有些大

另外，网友年龄是重要的名字却是不重要的，呵呵

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a young girl under age 24.

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effective writing

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Beijing2008 说:

He was hesitating if he should keep such a ridiculous relationship with the girl. However, he won't tell her any personal information such as name, work, address and even phone number. He wanted to know my opinions and comments.

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哈哈，ridiculous，是０８你的主观想法，我倒是觉得这里应该换上＂暧昧＂，但不知道哪个合适

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IBT 说:

哈哈，ridiculous，是０８你的主观想法，我倒是觉得这里应该换上＂暧昧＂，但不知道哪个合适

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weird romantic relationship

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IBT 说:

哈哈，ridiculous，是０８你的主观想法，我倒是觉得这里应该换上＂暧昧＂，但不知道哪个合适

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having a personal relationship with the girl

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可我还是觉得，没有表达出男主人公的感受
他不会觉得weird，我觉得也不是单纯的personal relationship
呵呵，感觉本身就很微妙

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Ambiguous relations　我查的，字典给的解释，但不知道这个ambiguous是不是能确切表达这层含义

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男主人公的感受
就是要unhealthy sexual relationship!

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那不一定，他或许就是想重新享受那种恋爱的滋味

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IBT 说:

那不一定，他或许就是想重新享受那种恋爱的滋味

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他是谁?

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就是only谴责的对象：）

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IBT 说:

就是only谴责的对象：）

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所以要以ONLY的口气写,WEIRD,strange,bizarre,odd,ridiculous

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Beijing2008 说:

所以要以ONLY的口气写,WEIRD,strange,bizarre,odd,ridiculous

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哦，你这样一说我就明白了
真是啊，我真笨
是only在写文章，而且这个也不是她在编小说
明白了

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IBT,你在哪?
偶这里是临晨了.要睡了,明天再聊.

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快快休息吧，因为我问这问那又耽误了好久，呵呵
俺是夜猫子

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I'd like to say something at first.

I am lucky to meet Beijing2008 and all other people here. All of you particurlarly Beijing2008 are advanced in English and helpful to me.Thanks a lot.

I used to suppose that language was a random thing. People can speak whatever they like as long as readers can guess the approximate meaning.

Seeing what you were talking about, I found I was wrong. You are so serious at English. You comprehend the exact meaning of the word, be strict with grammar. I'll learn this kind of spirit from you.

I ever planed to take 2 months on English, then take Ielts exam. After studying over a month, I supposed to spend half of a year on it. But now, I think I should pay more attention to the basic English for I have not touched it for long time.

This afternoon I went to book store. I bought two books. One is grammar book and another is writing book. I'll read the books and continue writing diaries at the same time.

The another thing I have to say is about the classmate.

I don't have the right to criticize him. I just wrote down what he said and my feeling. In addition, he had been one of my classmates for seven years. I dislike any negative imagination for him. So please kindly do not use these kind of adjectives. They just had a dinner together. He only said he had some ideas. Actually we don't know what kind of the idea is, maybe sex,maybe love, maybe just the exciting feeling to date someone without getting the personal information.

I'll rewrite it later,then please give me further advices.

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onlimy 说:

April 14,2007 Saturday morning

Yesterday when I talked with my old classmate on QQ, he told me something--really make me disappointed me a lot.(what he said really made me disappointed so much)

He had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other. He told me the exciting for having dinner with name-unknown young girl who is only 24 years old. He said he would go on with her and kept their names unknown forever. He asked me whether there was any unsafety to date with an not bad girl, if he did not tell his name, unit and address even the telephone number. (He had made an appointment with one of his net friends without disclosing identities for both parties and was excited to have a dinner with a young 24-year old girl without knowing her name.He would like to keep this mysterious relationship forever wdb3: 地下党呀 ) but he didn't know whether it is safe or not for him to date with a not bad girl without informing her the details of his name,company,address and even telephone number)

I told him that it was not necessary to keep the identity as a secret if you supposed she was worthy to affiliate with. If she was not, why you spent time on her? It was safe for people in good character, with no any "other idea", to make friend each other . He said why he did not have other idea. He said he did have some other idea indeed however he knew he did not ought to have.

(My advice was that it was not necessary to keep the identity as a secret if he supposed that she was worthy to interact.If she was not,why did you spend time on her? It is safe for people in proper
felling and good motive to make freinds without "other ideas" .He argued why he could not have "other idea",moreover,he indeed had other idea even though he knew he should not enjoy such idea)

I don't know what a such thing is happening. Almost every man about 40 years old , who is free for life and business, has an intention to do something with young lady without effecting his family. I can understand and forgive the affection which is built by daily life without motive. I cannot agree with the story which is made by man's hunting novelty on purpose.(I don't understand why such things happends.Almost each of about 40 years old men
,who is free of family load and work pressure,has an intention to have something with yong lady without having impacts on his family.I can understand and forgive the affection cultivated during
work and study without any motive beforehand rather than hunted on purpose for the sake of novelty)


Am I innocent or idealist as he said?(这句没明白啥意思 ) I was so desponded with what he was alike in current society（at moment) while he had been (a)pure boy in the past.

I also felt unhappy as he said there was no deep friendship between man and woman as my husband said before. He said they would become lover otherwise going fade(otherwise such relationship will be withered). I really hope that we can keep deep friendship with some of men forever because there were(are) some good men besides the husbands. I don't think it clever and longtime to be lover.I don't think it is clever to be lover for persons who are admiring each other without being in protection of law )[/COLOR]

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by ZZNN revising

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zznn123456 说:

(I don't think it is clever to be lover for persons who are admiring each other without being in protection of law )

by ZZNN revising

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Beijing2008 说:

a young girl under age 24.

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a young 24-year old girl

女孩就是２４岁，ＵＮＤＥＲ就是不满２４了，ＲＩＧＨＴ？

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IBT 说:

Me 2

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THANKS

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onlimy 说:

by the way ,prize you with to compensate your hard work

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how about I?

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Beijing2008 说:

He said he had made an appointment with his net friend without knowing the name of each other

He was going to have a date with a girl on the Internet. And they didn't even exchange their real names.

不要用长句,说过很多遍了,特别是BEGINNER级水平地时候

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You are included of course

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Beijing2008 说:

叙说时不要用he told,he said,全拿掉,那是口语化的东西,写作不能这样,就是口语也没必要,那是中国式口语翻译.写作不是翻译,这样写没有任何效果.看书看书看书!

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did not read your comments before revising
check and correct them right now

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IBT 说:

Ambiguous relations　我查的，字典给的解释，但不知道这个ambiguous是不是能确切表达这层含义

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zz，only快去yangyang那读９００句

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IBT 说:

zz，only快去yangyang那读９００句

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too busy

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April 14,2007 Saturday morning,

Let me try to write it as it occured on other people.


I frequently chat with a middle aged man, an successful official in the local goverment by QQ on the internet.

Yesterday he told me his worries.

He got to know a young girl at 24 years old through the internet. They did not exchange the personal information yet. Even after having the dinner with her, he still did not want to tell her his name and telephone number. However, he had good feeling with her. So he asked me for my opinion.

"There won't be any risk if I continue meeting her,right?" he continued,"I won't let her know anything about me".

I could not understand them. If they were real friends, why did they have to keep their identity as a secret? If not, why they met each other?

" It is natural to let your fiend know your identity as usual." I said, "Communicating with isomerism is no harm to your family providing that both of you were in good personality and without any other unexpected intentions" .

"why don't I have intention?" He said, "I do have intention, however I do not ought to."

Just then I knew what he was worring about. He was wondering whether to take adventure with her. I can not give him any opinion then.

As a man about 40 years old , he is free of life and business. He wants to do something as some other men. But he is a good husband so he is hesitated.

"Why don't you keep friendship with her? Then you can get along with her without doing harm to your family." I suggested.

"There was no deep friendship between man and woman. To be lover or to be stranger is the only choice." he argued.

I really hope that there is another choice he can choose.

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zznn123456 说:

how about I?

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onlimy 说:

April 14,2007 Saturday morning,

Let me try to write it as it occured on other people.


I frequently chat with a middle aged man, an successful official in the local goverment by QQ on the internet.

Yesterday he told me his worries.

He got to know a young girl at 24 years old through the internet. They did not exchange the personal information yet. Even after having the dinner with her, he still did not want to tell her his name and telephone number. However, he had good feeling with her. So he asked me for my opinion.

"There won't be any risk if I continue meeting her,right?" he continued,"I won't let her know anything about me".

I could not understand them. If they were real friends, why did they have to keep their identity as a secret? If not, why they met each other?

" It is natural to let your fiend know your identity as usual." I said, "Communicating with isomerism is no harm to your family providing that both of you were in good personality and without any other unexpected intentions" .

"why don't I have intention?" He said, "I do have intention, however I do not ought to."

Just then I knew what he was worring about. He was wondering whether to take adventure with her. I can not give him any opinion then.

As a man about 40 years old , he is free of life and business. He wants to do something as some other men. But he is a good husband so he is hesitated.

"Why don't you keep friendship with her? Then you can get along with her without doing harm to your family." I suggested.

"There was no deep friendship between man and woman. To be lover or to be stranger is the only choice." he argued.

I really hope that there is another choice he can choose.

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没仔细读,但感觉和前面大不同,这篇总的感觉好多了.

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April 14,2007 Saturday morning,

Let me try to write it as it occured on other people.


I frequently chat with a middle aged man, an successful official in the local goverment by QQ on the internet.

Yesterday he told me his worries.

He got to know a young girl at 24 years old through the internet. They did not exchange the personal information yet. Even after having the dinner with her, he still (一般不用与否定)did not want to tell her his name and telephone number. However, he had (可用现在时,过去时是以前有好感,现在没了)good feeling with her. So he asked me for my opinion.

"There won't be any risk if I continue meeting her,right?" he continued,"I won't let her know anything about me".

I could not understand both of them. If they were real friends, why did they have to keep their identity (用词不当identity一般指性别如gender identity,如同性恋,或其他社会标签如社会地位等) general personal information (名字,地址等)as a secret? If not, why they met (只是叙述故事用现在时) each other?

" It is natural to let your fiend know your identity as usual." I said, "Communicating(勾通,交流,一般指工作勾通) making a friend with isomerism is no harm to your family providing that both of you were in good personality and without any other unexpected intentions" (红字部分用词不确切).

请注意,用直接引用对话那么对话用词就要口语化,难道你说话也用书面用语?

"why don't I have some special purpose intention?" He said, "I do. have intention (多余), however, I do not ought to."

Just then I knew suddenly realized what he was worring about. He was wondering whether to take adventure with her. I can not give him any opinion then.

As a man about 40 years old , he is successful in his life and business free of life and business(他游手好闲啥也不干?). He wants to do something as some other men (I don't understand). But he is a good husband so he is hesitated.(语法上没啥错,但没文化背景没法让人理解)

"Why don't you keep some kind of general connection friendship(在美加很多场合FRIEND就是有性关系,所以很少向人介绍这是我的FRIEND) with her? Then you can get along with her without doing harm to your family." I suggested(你挺会suggest呵呵).

"There was no deep friendship between man and woman. Either To be lover or to be stranger is the only choice(多余)." he argued.

I really hope that there is the third another(either ..or 就是两个了) choice he can pick. choose(一句话中不要有两个同样的词).

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学习。。。。。

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I frequently chat with a middle aged man, an successful official in the local goverment by QQ on the internet.

Yesterday he told me his worries.

He got to know a young girl at 24 years old through the internet. They did not exchange the personal information yet. Even after having the dinner with her, he did not want to tell her his name and telephone number. However, he has good feeling with her. So he was asking/asked me for my opinion.

"There won't be any risk if I continue meeting her,right?" he continued,"I won't let her know anything about me".

I can not understand both of them. If they are real friends, why do they have to keep their general personal information as a secret? If not, why they meet each other?

" It's natural to let your friend know your information as usual." I said, "Making a friend with lady is no harm to your family as long as both of you are good and without any other attempts"

现在算口语化了么？其实我不太清楚口语和书面用语的区分，以前学英语的时候都没区分

"why don't I have some special purpose?" He said, "I do. however, I do not ought to."

Just then I suddenly realized what he was worring about. He is wondering whether to take adventure with her. I can not give him any opinion then. (这段时态对么，有些是“昨天“发生的动作，有些是我的看法和一直存在的问题。)

As a man about 40 years old , he is successful in his life and business. He wants to have a girlfriend as some succedful middle-aged men. But he is a good husband. He is unwilling to hurt his wife ,or to have any negative influence to his official position.So he is hesitated.

"Why don't you keep some kind of general connection with her? Then you can get along with her without doing harm to your family." I suggested.

"There was no closer general connection between man and woman. Either To be lover or to be stranger." he argued.

I really hope that there is the third choice he can pick.

general connection,应该只是一般认识的关系，类似熟人acquaintance，如果friend是带有sex的，那么比熟人近但又没sex的叫什么？比如谈得来的有共鸣的朋友，死党（很好的玩伴，没把对方当异性），红颜知己（喜欢但不爱）

stranger是陌生人，其实我是想表达关系变淡的意思，就是认识彼此但不来往了（这种关系不算陌生人吧）

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are these right in red color?

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和still意思一样但能用在否定句中的是什么？我觉得yet是“还,至今"的意思,我想表达"仍然,还是"的意思,however,nevertheless虽然有"仍然"的意思,但也有"虽然,但是"的意思.

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onlimy 说:

I frequently chat with a middle aged man, an successful official in the local goverment by QQ on the internet.

Yesterday he told me his worries.

He got to know a young girl at 24 years old through the internet. They did not exchange the personal information yet. Even after having the dinner with her, he did not want to tell her his name and telephone number. However, he has good feeling with her. So he was asking/asked me for my opinion.

"There won't be any risk if I continue meeting her,right?" he continued,"I won't let her know anything about me".

I can not understand both of them. If they are real friends, why do they have to keep their general personal information as a secret? If not, why they meet each other?

" It's natural to let your friend know your information as usual." I said, "Making a friend with lady is no harm to your family as long as both of you are good and without any other attempts"

现在算口语化了么？其实我不太清楚口语和书面用语的区分，以前学英语的时候都没区分

"why don't I have some special purpose?" He said, "I do. however, I do not ought to."

Just then I suddenly realized what he was worring about. He is wondering whether to take adventure with her. I can not give him any opinion then. (这段时态对么，有些是“昨天“发生的动作，有些是我的看法和一直存在的问题。)

As a man about 40 years old , he is successful in his life and business. He wants to have a girlfriend as some succedful middle-aged men. But he is a good husband. He is unwilling to hurt his wife ,or to have any negative influence to his official position.So he is hesitated.

"Why don't you keep some kind of general connection with her? Then you can get along with her without doing harm to your family." I suggested.

"There was no closer general connection between man and woman. Either To be lover or to be stranger." he argued.

I really hope that there is the third choice he can pick.

general connection,应该只是一般认识的关系，类似熟人acquaintance，如果friend是带有sex的，那么比熟人近但又没sex的叫什么？比如谈得来的有共鸣的朋友，死党（很好的玩伴，没把对方当异性），红颜知己（喜欢但不爱）

stranger是陌生人，其实我是想表达关系变淡的意思，就是认识彼此但不来往了（这种关系不算陌生人吧）

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红颜知己是已经爱上对方了

关于这些关系的词,还是等2008 吧

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Just then I suddenly realized what he was worring about. He is wondering whether to take adventure with her. I can not give him any opinion then.

你用then这些词时态就要用过去时.

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onlimy 说:

和still意思一样但能用在否定句中的是什么？我觉得yet是“还,至今"的意思,我想表达"仍然,还是"的意思,however,nevertheless虽然有"仍然"的意思,但也有"虽然,但是"的意思.

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yet.

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下午回来，再来学习２００８的＂批示＂

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As a man about 40 years old , he is successful in his life and business. He wants to have a girlfriend as some succedful middle-aged men. But he is a good husband. He is unwilling to hurt his wife ,or to have any negative influence to on his official position.So he is hesitated.

这一段时态对.

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"There was no closer general connection between man and woman. Either To be lover or to be stranger." he argued.

这里可用friendship

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zznn123456 说:

红颜知己是已经爱上对方了

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爱上了是情人
红颜知己还是知己啊，只不过是女知己而已

My dear teacher Beijing 2008, how do you think about these relationships?

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onlimy 说:

爱上了是情人
红颜知己还是知己啊，只不过是女知己而已

My dear teacher Beijing 2008, how do you think about these relationships?

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我不知道你们要说啥.因为我没从头看.搞得我没头没脑了!

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这个男的是a married man who has affairs.

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Extramarital Affairs


Who's at Risk

Those who are happily married should know that marital happiness does not eliminate the possibility of an affair. Those who are even mildly unhappy should take heed - affairs are commonplace, easy and devastating. If you are unhappy with your marriage, it is far better to work to resolve the marriage problems or end the marriage before starting a new relationship. Affairs do not solve problems.

The Kinsey Report found that the first time people were asked if they had been unfaithful 30% admitted they had. When they were questioned more thoroughly, another 30% confessed to extramarital sex, bringing the total to 60%, indicating a reluctance to admit to infidelity even for a scientific survey. While it's not clear the exact percentage of marriages affected by infidelity, it appears the percentage of people under 60 who have affairs is 50 - 60% for men and 40 - 50% for women, with the survey focusing on a middle and upper-income group.

Statistics suggest that men and women with more resources have greater control over their time, energy and money. They also have more sexual freedom.

Who has affairs?

Men and women who feel their physical and emotional needs are not being met well in their marriage have affairs more frequently than those who believe their needs are being satisfied in their marriage.

Opportunity, education and control over time make a person more prone to having extramarital affairs. People who are accountable for their time to either their spouse, employers or families are the least likely to have extramarital affairs. Independence and the birth control have given wives the opportunity to more sexually active outside their marriage - and when given the chance, women have affairs as readily as men.

The option of choosing open marriage as a way of preventing divorce has not been successful. More than half of these open marriages ended in divorce. Open marriages are not widespread. Studies indicate that fewer than 15% of couples are currently in marriages where they agree that it is acceptable to pursue sex outside their marriage. Most partners deceive their spouse rather than negotiate an open marriage.

Swinging is the term used to describe co-marital sex involving both the husband and wife together with others. About 5% of married couples have been involved in swinging at some time. The swingers surveyed were as satisfied with their jobs, friends, health, income and education as nonswingers. Swingers were more happy with their sex life and with life in general than nonswingers. Women who participated in swinging said they were satisfied with this arrangement, although their husband generally initiated it.

Where?

The woman's home is the first choice as a place for lovers to rendezvous. The second most frequent location for an affair is the man's home. Hotels were used as a primary meeting place by only 8% of those surveyed. Other places for an affair include the home of a friend, a boat, camper office or the park.

Affairs last a couple of years

Affairs go through transitions over time. They may begin as romantic, sexual or emotional relationships and may become intimate friendships. Affairs that become friendships can last decades or a lifetime. Regardless of the strength of desire, most affairs dissolve over time when the feelings soften and the complexity of the affair is emotionally and physically draining.

Multiple affairs

People who have affairs are likely to have more than one, especially men. Two-thirds of the men surveyed who had affairs had more than one. Women averaged between one and three affairs. About 25% of men and 15% of women who have affairs have four or more.

Multiple sex affairs may be a symptom of deep emotional pain and dysfunction.

More men have affairs

Several studies show that between 70% and 80% of affluent men have extramarital sex sometime during their married life. The extramarital alliances include sex with prostitutes as well as lifetime lovers.

Men who work 8 a.m. to 5 p.m. and go directly home after work may simply not have the discretionary time for an affair. Birth control has given some men the belief that they can have sex without the worry of an unwanted pregnancy.

Wives often erroneously believe that their husbands could not be having an affair because "he just doesn't have time." Many men have an explanation for their time away from home that allows them ample time for affairs. Realistically, affairs don't require large blocks of time. Men who want to have affairs will find the time. These men believe that their desire for multiple sex partners is natural and normal for them but not for their wives.

Divorce rate higher among people who have affairs

Spouses who did not have affairs had the lowest rate of divorce, according to Annette Lawson's study of 500 British subjects. Women who had multiple affairs, especially if they started early in the marriage had the highest rate of divorce. People who have affairs do put their marriage at risk even though many profess that the affair is about themselves or helps their marriage. The evidence does not support the idea that affairs stabilize marriages. For some the desire for a new mate is compelling - and seemingly irresistible. It is also very risky!

While both men and women engage in extramarital sex in nearly equal numbers, women have more requirements before they engage in intercourse. A study at the University of Hawaii by Elaine Hatfield found that men are more willing to have sex than to have an emotional relationship even if it is only a date. In a survey of marital happiness, nearly 75% of happily married men admitted to a desire for extramarital intercourse while only 27% of women acknowledged that desire.

Men and women have different beliefs and attitudes about sex. Three-quarters of women who have affairs are involved for emotional reasons while only half of the men consider themselves motivated (to some degree) by emotion.

In summary it appears "women give sex to get love and men give love to get sex."

A review of history makes it clear that infidelity has been the norm in the behavior of married people and has not changed in modern society. None of the men surveyed who had affairs during the first couple of years of marriage remained faithful later in their married life. The only significant difference between our ancestors and us is that birth control has allowed women to have affairs without becoming pregnant.

Men and women both opt for multiple sex partners if they have the chance. However, the obvious motivation for men's affairs is very different than for women.

There is overwhelming evidence that men desire and have casual sex simply for the pleasure of sex. Men admit that they profess more love and caring than they really feel as a way of engaging women in intercourse. Nearly all women report they have at some time been led to believe a man cared more for them than he did as a way to persuade them to have sex. When women have casual sex it is usually a pathway to emotional intimacy. For many women, it is a backup plan because she is feeling uncertain about her marriage.

Men and women are different in primary reasons they have affairs but the needs men and women have for sex and for love overlap. Both men and women long for acceptance and appreciation; to be understood, enjoyed and loved. The drives that push men and women into affairs are complex and longstanding but they are no longer a mystery.

When Men Have Love Affairs Rather Than Sex Affairs

Early in marriage men seek sex affairs rather than love affairs. The primary motivation is physical pleasure, challenge or experience. As time goes on, a higher percentage of men become involved in love affairs, where they experience an emotional as well as a sexual bond. They want to talk to someone who understands them, who accepts them and who appreciates them for who they are and what they have accomplished.

When Women Have Love Affairs Rather Than Sex Affairs

The longer a woman is married, the more likely she is to have a love affair. Women have love affairs to meet emotional needs. Loneliness is the feeling that many women believe motivated them to have an affair.

Women choose sex affairs for fun, sexual experience and the opportunity to experiment. Occasionally women choose sex affairs for revenge and out of anger and fear.

Affairs meet both physiological and psychological needs. They can add thrills, adventure and excitement to life. The needs that affairs meet in women are different from those met in men. Knowing what an affair is and is not can save disappointment, heartache and even disaster.

The type of affair you are involved in is defined by the needs it meets. Sex affairs are for sexual and sensual pleasure; they are seldom long-term and they do not become love affairs.

Love affairs, such as loving affairs and bridge affairs, can become long-term friendships. In-love affairs are the most powerful and life-altering. The feelings are nearly overwhelming. In-love affairs end in tremendous pain. Despite their depth, in-love feelings change.

What To Expect From an Affair

Affairs meet emotional and physical needs. Pain occurs when they end, and they dissipate in an average of two years. Men and women both report that they consider the affair to be a good experience, although women are less likely than men to want to have another.

Expect the affair to be intense, passionate and, perhaps, loving. Don't expect it to become a happy, long-term marriage. It doesn't turn out that way.

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onlimy 说:

爱上了是情人
红颜知己还是知己啊，只不过是女知己而已

My dear teacher Beijing 2008, how do you think about these relationships?

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我不知道你们要说啥.因为我没从头看.搞得我没头没脑了!

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俺也看了半天，木懂，没敢说， 呵呵

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affairs 绯闻,暧昧关系

Affairs meet emotional and physical needs
Affairs meet both physiological and psychological needs

Sex affairs are for sexual and sensual pleasure;
Love affairs, such as loving affairs and bridge affairs, can become long-term friendships

请读我上面贴的文章

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I'm totally convinted one way or the other by this sentence ~"women give sex to get love and men give love to get sex."

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benkok 说:

I'm totally convinted one way or the other by this sentence ~"women give sex to get love and men give love to get sex."

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看来BENKOK深有体会啊,说不定也是having a affair

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Divorce rate higher among people who have affairs

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People who have affairs do put their marriage at risk even though many profess that the affair is about themselves or helps their marriage. The evidence does not support the idea that affairs stabilize marriages. For some the desire for a new mate is compelling - and seemingly irresistible. It is also very risky!

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这篇文章有很多词汇LZ可以用,用这些词汇重写你的文章那就上了一个档次
如Extramarital Affairs,happily married ,marital happiness ,possibility of an affair,starting a new relationship,physical and emotional needs, swingers; romantic, sexual or emotional relationships;pathway to emotional intimacy;loving affairs and bridge affairs; long-term friendships;intense, passionate and, perhaps, loving

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Extramarital Affairs婚外情,婚外恋.

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认真学习老师提供的词汇和文章！谢谢指点。

一会贴个听来的小对话。

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The attitudes towards love and sex in man's and women's eyes are extremely defferent.

Male are quite interested in any attractive femal even they have a happy marriage. They feel successful happiness in hunting after female. They enjoy the large charge in affair as well. They can not conceal their desire for extramarital sex even before their wives.

Here is a short dialog between a married couple when they were on a holiday in a hotel.

I heard it from my colleague yesterday.

There was just a phone call. Speaker was a femal sex worker. She asked whether (sex) service was needed here.

The wife then spoke to her husband with understanding smile, "You can do what you want to do. I'd like to look out for you, there won't be any risk from police."

The husband answered quickly"Great,Why not! I love to! I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me".

The wife got angry and glared at him. The husband just now got to understand the real meaning of his wife. He explained himself quickly:"I just spoke nothing more. "

Heihei, That is man.

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onlimy 说:

The attitudes towards love and sex in man's and women's eyes are extremely defferent.

Male are quite interested in any attractive femal even they have a happy marriage. They feel successful happiness in hunting after female. They enjoy the large charge in affair as well. They can not conceal their desire for extramarital sex even before their wives.

Here is a short dialog between a married couple when they were on a holiday in a hotel.

I heard it from my colleague yesterday.

There was just a phone call. Speaker was a femal sex worker. She asked whether (sex) service was needed here.

The wife then spoke to her husband with understanding smile, "You can do what you want to do. I'd like to look out for you, there won't be any risk from police."

The husband answered quickly"Great,Why not! I love to! I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me".

The wife got angry and glared at him. The husband just now got to understand the real meaning of his wife. He explained himself quickly:"I just spoke nothing more. "

Heihei, That is man.

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Only&Zznn MM,在这个破加拿大，每天在家呆着，俺真是写不出日记来，所以就新开了个帖，写议论文，呵呵，请恁俩捧场哦
这，我还是一如既往要来的

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IBT 说:

Only&Zznn MM,在这个破加拿大，每天在家呆着，俺真是写不出日记来，所以就新开了个帖，写议论文，呵呵，请恁俩捧场哦
这，我还是一如既往要来的

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议论什么呢?

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onlimy 说:

The attitudes towards love and sex in man's and women's eyes are extremely defferent(different).

Male are(不知道这里应该用复数还是单数) quite interested in any attractive femal（female） even they have(she has had) a happy marriage. They feel successful happiness in hunting after(这个短语我查了一下是“探求“的意思，不知道换成chasing如何) female（这个时可数还是不可数呢，待查）. They enjoy the large charge (这个表达不理解，讲解一下)in affair （需不需要冠词？）as well. They can not conceal their desire（s） for extramarital sex even before their wives(这句话和前面有什么关系，需要展开，是想说他们太兴奋了还是因为女人很敏感呢).

Here is a short dialog between a married couple when they were on a（不知道此处有没有“a”） holiday in a hotel.

I heard it from my colleague yesterday.

There was just a phone call. Speaker was a femal sex worker（不知道是不是这样说）. She asked whether (sex) service（可数不？） was needed here.

The wife then spoke to her husband with understanding smile, "You can do what you want to do. I'd like to look out for you（这个不懂，帮讲解）, there won't be any risk from police."

The husband answered quickly"Great,Why not! I love to（it?）! I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me"(此句需讲解).

The wife got angry and glared at him. The husband just now got to understand the real meaning of his wife. He explained himself （不需要）quickly:"I just spoke nothing more. "

Heihei, That is man.

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俺觉得Only你简直像坐着火箭一样进步啊

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Beijing2008 说:

议论什么呢?

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专门议题
有关男人和女人的eyes on ...

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IBT 说:

俺觉得Only你简直像坐着火箭一样进步啊

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偶也这样认为,进步神速呀

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male 和 female可以用单数或复数，后者表示各类雄性，所以我用复数形式了，嘿嘿
they have a happy marriage，是说那些男人有幸福婚姻，不是说找有夫之妇。
在金山词霸里 large charge是刺激快感（倾向放电那种刺激）的意思。

They can not conceal their desire（s） for extramarital sex even before their wives。他们甚至在他们妻子面前也无法隐藏他们对婚外性的渴望。

我不清楚在一些无数量意义的场合需要不定冠词不，比如泛指的service需要 a service么？

look out应该是注意吧，比如叫谁小心看着，不要打翻什么东西，我想这里来表达：“我帮你看着”的意思不知道可以不

I love to ,应该是I love to do的简写吧，我看电影里对话这么用。

I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me有你帮我把风我会很放心。


看来我写的还是很不clear,请大家帮我改改看看如何clear.

To be clear in meaning is the most important thing I should take over first.

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A male is always quite interested in any attractive female even he has (or has had) a happy marriage. Men feel successful and happy in chasing the female. They enjoy the pleasures from having a affair. They can not conceal their desires for extramarital sex even in front of their wives.

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If I could not make any progress in English at all, I would feel so sorry to my teachers, beijing2008,zznn, ibt,etc.

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There was just a phone call. The speaker was a female sex worker. She asked whether (sex) service was needed there.

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there won't be any trouble from police."

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onlimy 说:

male 和 female可以用单数或复数，后者表示各类雄性，所以我用复数形式了，嘿嘿(明白啦，也可以表示一个，也可以表示一类：)
they have a happy marriage（但是那么多男人不能只有一个婚姻，俺以前也老这样说：），是说那些男人有幸福婚姻，不是说找有夫之妇。
在金山词霸里 large charge是刺激快感（倾向放电那种刺激）的意思（这个收获大，呵呵）。

They can not conceal their desire（s） for extramarital sex even before their wives。他们甚至在他们妻子面前也无法隐藏他们对婚外性的渴望（这个简直忒恐怖啦，整个一美女与野兽啊 ）。

我不清楚在一些无数量意义的场合需要不定冠词不，比如泛指的service需要 a service（俺也不知道它可数不，还没来得及查呢）么？

look out应该是注意吧，比如叫谁小心看着，不要打翻什么东西，我想这里来表达：“我帮你看着”的意思不知道可以不

I love to ,应该是I love to do的简写吧，我看电影里对话这么用（明百鸟）。

I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me有你帮我把风我会很放心。（才发现这句写得真棒）


看来我写的还是很不clear,请大家帮我改改看看如何clear.

To be clear in meaning is the first important thing I should take over.

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（我的一点感觉是不要轻易用自己不熟悉的词，但这样也同时使文章黯淡无光，所以得多学多看，俺自己也是光说不练的主，呵呵 ）

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I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me

My heart is still with you while you watch the door for me.

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Beijing2008 说:

A male is always quite interested in any attractive female even he has (or has had) a happy marriage. Men feel successful and happy(Zznn原来一定是想表达“成功的快感“，还有更贴的说法没) in chasing the female. They enjoy the pleasures（得记住） from having a affair. They can not conceal their desires for extramarital sex even in front of（这个不知道为什么before不行，或者是不是不如in front of 合适） their wives.

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Beijing2008 说:

There was just a phone call. The speaker was a female sex worker. She asked whether (sex) service was needed there.

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这个真是小处不可随便啊，晓习ing

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There is overwhelming evidence that men desire and have casual sex simply for the pleasure of sex.

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Beijing2008 说:

There is overwhelming evidence that men desire and have casual sex simply for the pleasure of sex.

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所以才有了那么多不幸的婚姻

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I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me
嘿,没看你中文解释,我理解为:
My heart is still with you while you watch the door for me.你帮我把门时我的心还是想着你的

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Beijing2008 说:

I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me
嘿,没看你中文解释,我理解为:
My heart is still with you while you watch the door for me.你帮我把门时我的心还是想着你的

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这样的男人简直,简直,

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有你帮我把风我会很放心。I'll set my heart at rest with your keeping watch for me这样讲肯定不对.

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可简单讲That's great. I feel totally safe if you would watch the door for me.

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I will be carefree with your watch out可以吗？

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watching out

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IBT 说:

I will be carefree with your watch out可以吗？

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性开放的老外也没这么无耻吧?

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onlimy 说:

If I could not make any progress in English at all, I would feel so sorry to my teachers, beijing2008,zznn, ibt,etc.

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do not mention that,I have a shame felling to hear about it.

2008,ibt,noly,all of you are my teachers,I will post my first essay in canadameet later,I will appreciate it very much i f you can give some comments without hesitation,thank you!

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一天不来都不行,需要补课了,还有一页没看完,这里真是"强化"呀,比正规的INTENSIVE COURSE 还厉害,不敢怠慢

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immediately替代其中一个quickly,避免重复
She asked for a chance to offer sex service for that man in the room.会比原来的写法好么？

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Beijing2008 说:

看来BENKOK深有体会啊,说不定也是having a affair

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Love is innocent

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benkok 说:

Love is innocent

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看了你是活学活用啊.

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onlimy 说:

immediately替代其中一个quickly,避免重复
She asked for a chance to offer sex service for that man in the room.会比原来的写法好么？

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没有原句好.

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IBT 说:

I will be carefree with your watch out可以吗？

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Beijing2008 说:

性开放的老外也没这么无耻吧?

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我 啊，此“可以吗”非彼“可以吗”
我

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April 17,2007

My daughter's life in the near future

My daughter is going to go to junior middle school in the next half year. I am wondering which school she should choose. The public school or the private school?

I attended a meeting at the public school last week and got(was informed of,哪个更好？) some descriptions(introductions,informations,?) about the education situation(procedure?) in that school. If my daughter is going to go to this school after several months, she will spend her next three years in this way:

At fisrt, my daughter, together with all the entrants, is going to take a exam in the begining of July although the result of exam is useless for her. Then she will be classed in a key class as the school has promised last week. All the students will have to take a fiften day's course then go to military training for about ten days in August.

When the semester starts formally, she is requested to be at school from 7:30 am to 12:00am and from 13:30pm to 17:30pm. She cannot go to wash and sleep until she finishes her homework at about 10:00pm as most of the students (do?). Teachers will give them a test every two months besides the every unit exams. If she dropped the score, the teacher would inform us at once.

When she is at third grade of junior middle school, she have to spend her whole Saturday at school for remediation. All junior schools give lessons on Saturday except Sanmu Private school.

Sanmu Private school is the only junior school which is not completely controlled by tests as well. But Sanm Private school will not enrol its students until the end of June. The difficult to enter this school is extremely enormous. Only the students who have got some awards or have taken Olympiad lessons in their primary school can go to this school. My daughter has none of these two. However, my daughter has the ability to make progress year by year as she has done in primary school. I'm afraid that if my daughter can not be accepted by Sanmu, she will perhaps miss the promise of being registered in the key class of the public school.

Sorry, I have used lots of long sentences again.

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My daughter's life in near future

My daughter is going to go to junior middle school (可以这么说但在CANADA是secondary school) in the next half year(in the autumn this year,after summer this year). I am wondering which school she will choose(根据内容是你帮他选should go). ：The public school or the private school?（不能单独成句，要用前面用：,THE是特指某个学校）

I attended a meeting an orientation at the one public school last week and got some informations(没复数） about the education situation （systems) in that the school. If my daughter is going to go to this the school after in several months, she will spend her next three years within the system that the school presented in the orientation. in this way as they have introduced.

All the new students including my daughter is are going to take a exam an entrance examin at the begining of July although the result of exam is no useless for her(?不懂，although it is not a problem for her to take an exam). Then she will be classed in a key class as the school has promised last week(She will be placed in an advanced class for the students are categoried based on their past performances in the primary schools). All the students will have to take a fiften day's a special fifteen-day course then go to have amilitary training for about ten days in August.

When After the semester starts, it is mandatory for students to she is requested reuiqred to be stay at school from 7:30 am to 12:00am and from 13:30pm to 17:30pm. She cannot go to She is not allowed to go to have a bath wash and go ot sleep until she finishes her homework at about around 10:00pm. The teachers will give them the students a test an exam every two months plus a quiz for each chapter. besides the every unit exams.

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a quiz小测验

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When she is at third grade （grade 中学三年级应是九年级了）of junior middle school, Starting from the third year, she have has to spend her the full day of whole Saturday at school for extra studiesremediation. All other junior schools give lessons have classes on Saturday except Sanmu Private school.

Sanmu Private school is the only junior school which is not completely controlled by tests as well不懂？. But(拿掉BUT，我最恨BUT，这是中国人的习惯，什么时候都出来一个BUT） Sanm Private school will not enrol its students accept new student until the end of June. The difficult It is very difficult for a student to be accepted by this school. to enter this school is extremely enormous. Only the students who have got some received national, provincial and municipal awards or have taken Olympiad competition lessons in their the primary school can go to are qualified to study at this school. My daughter is not qualified according to this criteriahas none of these two. However, I believe my daughter has the ability to make a progress year by year as she has done demonstrated in the primary school. I'm afraid that if my daughter can not be accepted by Sanmu, she will perhaps miss the promise of being registered in the key class of the public school.
Sorry, I have used lots of long sentences again.

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最后一句不懂I'm afraid that if my daughter can not be accepted by Sanmu, she will perhaps miss the promise of being registered in the key class of the public school.

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Charter Schools - Orientation

The Division of Charter Schools at the Texas Education Agency hosts a two-day charter school orientation program twice a year, in room 1-104 of the William B. Travis Building at 1701 N. Congress Avenue in Austin. The program is usually offered in the summer and in the fall and consists of presentations by many agency divisions. Administrators of new charter schools are required to attend an orientation program before starting school. Administrators from existing charter schools who are new or who have not recently attended an orientation session are strongly encouraged to attend. Staff members from existing charter schools also are welcome, as are ESC staff and other interested parties. There is no charge for the orientation.

If you have any questions about orientation, please contact the Division of Charter Schools at 512.463.9575.

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what's the meaning of Charter here?

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onlimy 说:

what's the meaning of Charter here?

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美国和加拿大没教育局这种机构,学校与学校是通过某种形式联成一个团体或组织,联和会等.Charter是宪章,就是赋于成员某种权利的文件.

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这里是at the Texas Education Agency成员学校

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A charter is a document bestowing certain rights on a town, city, university, land or institution; sometimes used as a loan of money. The Canadian Charter of Rights and Freedoms is a bill of rights. The term derives from a root word meaning "paper".

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Canadian Charter of Rights 加拿大人权宪章

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My daughter's life in near future

My daughter is going to go to secondary school in the autumn this year. I am wondering which school she should go :Y Public school or Samu Private school?

I attended an orientation at Y Public school last week and got some information about the education systems in the school. If my daughter is going to go to the school in several months, she will spend her next three years within the system that the school presented in the orientation.

All the new students including my daughter are going to take an entrance examin at the begining of July( At fisrt, my daughter, together with all the entrants, is going to take an entrance exam at the begining of July哪个更好 ). The school will classify the students based on the scores in the exam. However, they promised that my daughter would be placed in one of the four advanced classes whatever scores she would got.They also promised that for other 145 students who were excellent in primary school. The overall amount of classes will be eleven. All the students will have to take a special fifteen-day course then have a military training for about ten days in August.

After the semester starts, it is mandatory for students to stay at school from 7:30 am to 12:00am and from 13:30pm to 17:30pm. She is not allowed to have a bath wash and go to sleep until she finishes her homework around 10:00pm. The teachers will give the students an exam every two months plus a quiz for each chapter. The teacher would inform us as soon as she lost her usual score.

Starting from the third year, she has to spend the full day of Saturday at school for extra studies. All other junior schools have classes on Saturday except Samu Private school.

Samu Private school is the only second school where the students have not completely been as alike as force-feeding ducks. Unfortunately,it is very difficult for a student to be accepted by this school. Only the students who have received national, provincial and municipal awards or have taken Olympiad competition lessons in the primary school are qualified to study at this school. My daughter is not qualified according to this criteriahas. However, I believe my daughter has the ability to make a progress year by year as she has demonstrated in the primary school. How can I convince Samu Private school of that? My friends all suggested me to look for relations to enter Samu Private school through/by the back door.

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All the new students including my daughter are going to take an entrance examin at the begining of July( At fisrt, my daughter, together with all the entrants, is going to take an entrance exam at the begining of July哪个更好 ).
All the new students must take an entrance exam at the beginning of July.

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words in blue color were revised by teacher beijing2008. I will remember it. I am not sure those sentences in red color.

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The school will class the students based on the scores in the exam

The school will classify (categorize) the students into advanced class and general class based on the scores they get in the exam.

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However, they promised that my daughter would be placed in one of the four advanced classes whatever scores she would get.你有关系.

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我以前贴过teaching styles 的有四种

Just as people have individual learning styles, teachers have teaching styles that works best for them. It is important to be aware of your preferences when creating and delivering online instruction.

One way in which teaching styles can be categorized is as:


formal authority
demonstrator or personal model
facilitator
delegator
Do you know what type you are?

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添鸭子型,英文叫Formal Authority

Teachers who have a formal authority teaching style tend to focus on content. This style is generally teacher-centred, where the teacher feels responsible for providing and controlling the flow of the content and the student is expected to receive the content.

One type of statement made by an instructor with this teaching style is "I am the flashlight for my students, I illuminate the content and materials so that my students can see the importance of the material and appreciate the discipline."

Teachers with this teaching style are not as concerned with building relationships with their students nor is it as important that their students form relationships with other students. This type of teacher doesn't usually require much student participation in class. "Sage on the stage" model.

Click on the following link for more information about Instructional Design as it relates to the Formal Authority.

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这个考试严格意义上不是入学考试，现在国内初中是划片的，都可以上片内学校，这个考试只是在入学之前为分班用，也可以叫entrance exam么？片内初中为了留住好学生，就暗地分重点班并提前承诺进重点班。

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走后门不能用back door,

用connection network.

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onlimy 说:

这个考试严格意义上不是入学考试，现在国内初中是划片的，都可以上片内学校，这个考试只是在入学之前为分班用，也可以叫entrance exam么？片内初中为了留住好学生，就暗地分重点班并提前承诺进重点班。

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可以讲entrance exam,这和加拿大是一样的.都可以上片内学校.但也可考好的中学.进校后也考试,但小学成绩好就进ADVANCED CLASS,我儿子就是进了ADVANCED CLASS,还问我要20元做奖励

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Beijing2008 说:

我以前贴过teaching styles 的有四种

Just as people have individual learning styles, teachers have teaching styles that works best for them. It is important to be aware of your preferences when creating and delivering online instruction.

One way in which teaching styles can be categorized is as:


formal authority
demonstrator or personal model
facilitator
delegator
Do you know what type you are?

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Can you post the explaination for these four kinds of teaching style as Formal Authority you have posted? I don't know what is the meaning(are....s?) if I merely read the names.

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http://members.shaw.ca/mdde615/tchstyles.htm

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Demonstrator or Personal Model

Teachers who have a demonstrator or personal model teaching style tend to run teacher-centred classes with an emphasis on demonstration and modeling. This type of teacher acts as a role model by demonstrating skills and processes and then as a coach/guide in helping students develop and apply these skills and knowledge.

A teacher with this type of teaching style might comment: "I show my students how to properly do a task or work through a problem and then I'll help them master the task or problem solution. It's important that my students can independently solve similar problems by using and adapting demonstrated methods."

Instructors with this teaching style are interested in encouraging student participation and adapting their presentation to include various learning styles. Students are expected to take some responsibility for learning what they need to know and for asking for help when they don't understand something.

Click on the following link for more information about Instructional Design as it relates to the Demonstrator or Personal Model teaching style.

Facilitator

Teachers who have a facilitator model teaching style tend to focus on activities. This teaching style emphasizes student-centered learning and there is much more responsibility placed on the students to take the initiative for meeting the demands of various learning tasks.

This type of teaching style works best for students who are comfortable with independent learning and who can actively participate and collaborate with other students.

Teachers typically design group activities which necessitate active learning, student-to-student collaboration and problem solving. This type of teacher will often try to design learning situations and activities that require student processing and application of course content in creative and original ways.

Click on the following link for more information about Instructional Design as it relates to the Facilitator teaching style.

Delegator

Teachers who have a delegator teaching style tend to place much control and responsibility for learning on individuals or groups of students.

This type of teacher will often give students a choice designing and implementing their own complex learning projects and will act in a consultative role.

Students are often asked to work independently or in groups and must be able to maintain motivation and focus for complex projects. Students working in this type of setting learn more than just course specific topics as they also must be able to effectively work in group situations and manage various interpersonal roles.

Click on the following link for more information about Instructional Design as it relates to the Delegator teaching style.

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I'll study the description of learning style and teaching style in this website carefully.Thanks!

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Beijing2008 说:

可以讲entrance exam,这和加拿大是一样的.都可以上片内学校.但也可考好的中学.进校后也考试,但小学成绩好就进ADVANCED CLASS,我儿子就是进了ADVANCED CLASS,还问我要20元做奖励

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厉害的妈妈，厉害的儿子！

How many years have you been living in Canada? How old did you acquire the two Canadian master degrees.

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onlimy 说:

厉害的妈妈，厉害的儿子！

我想问一下，你们去加拿大几年了，你是多少岁的时候拿了两个加拿大硕士？

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only 你咋知道08是妈妈？

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onlimy 说:

厉害的妈妈，厉害的儿子！

How many years have you been living in Canada? How old did you acquire the two Canadian master degrees.

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How many years have you been in Canada?

How long did it take you to get two Master's degrees?

2008,对吗？

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onlimy 说:

厉害的妈妈，厉害的儿子！

将门虎子嘛。

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IBT 说:

only 你咋知道08是妈妈？

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听话听音，感觉出来的。应该没错吧

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zznn123456 说:

How many years have you been in Canada?

How long did it take you to get two Master's degrees?

2008,对吗？

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我不关心是用多长时间拿到，我关心是多少岁拿到文凭的。因为我知道2008四年半就拿了两个硕士文凭！

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08是爸爸.三十出头多一点来留学的,四年多一点读了二个学位.

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Beijing2008 说:

08是爸爸.

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啊我还写了that is man 的帖子

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Beijing2008 说:

08是爸爸.三十出头多一点来留学的,四年多一点读了二个学位.

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推倒 过程如下

因为：三十出头多一点，―― 一点若=一年
又： 四年多一点，
所以：读了二个学位共花5年时间

俺的数学学得很好啊 自己一个，赫赫

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onlimy 说:

啊我还写了that is man 的帖子

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哪有，俺咋没见？

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IBT 说:

推倒 过程如下

因为：三十出头多一点，―― 一点若=一年
又： 四年多一点，
所以：读了二个学位共花5年时间

俺的数学学得很好啊 自己一个，赫赫

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四年另三个月.

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BJ2008 earned 2 degrees less than 4.5 years could be consider tough and only smart student could do that. Should he the one and only man making a history in JiaYuan

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benkok 说:

BJ2008 earned 2 degrees less than 4.5 years could be consider tough and only smart student could do that. Should he the one and only man making a history in JiaYuan

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呵,我算笨的,和中国不一样,这里有的人一年就完成一和MASTER DEGREE, 我因为一个是论文,要花很长时间写,花了一年上课,一年多写论文,100页,一个是COURSE,暑期没课不得不上两年.

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这里PHD要花很长时间,很多人五年也完不成,所以PHD很难读,和中国不一样.

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benkok 说:

BJ2008 earned 2 degrees less than 4.5 years could be consider tough and only smart student could do that. Should he the one and only man making a history in JiaYuan

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Yes

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only 咋没来？

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April 18,2007

A boy, a little man

I rushed into the elevator this morning as usual. I am used to catching school regular bus on time.

When the elevator passed through the floor 4th, a boy came in with a plastic bag in his hand. There were some fruits and canteen in the bag.

"Do you have lunch in school?" I asked.
"Yes", he answered.

I was surprised because his school is not far away from home. His grandmother could cook for him at home. I was wondering why he had to have lunch at school.

He said subsequently, "My grandma are too tired to send and receive (接送？)me every noon."

"Why don't you go to school by yourself?" I questioned him directly.

"I want to,but my mother think it dangerous. She is afraid perhaps there are accidents."

He is a student in the fifth grade of ** primary school. All the other students in our apartments have started to go to school soley since they were in the third grade. His father is a boss of a factory. The family is afraid that he would(?) be abducted if he is alone. So he goes to school in the morning and comes back home in the dark all by his father's car. Teacher will care for students and guanrantee the safety of students in school at noon.

I don't know when the parents will let the boy, a man in the future, fly by himself.

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April 18,2007

A boy, a little man(真好,还有题目)

I rushed into the elevator this morning as usual. I am used to catching school regular(regular可以去掉，school bus就可以了） bus on time.

When the elevator passed through the floor 4th, a boy came in with a plastic bag in his hand. There were some fruits and canteen（是食堂的意思，用a box of meal,表示可以吗？）in the bag.

"Do you have lunch in school?" I asked.
"Yes", he answered.

I was surprised because（that) his school is not far away from home.and hHis grandmother could cook for him at home. I was wondering why he had to have lunch at school.

He said subsequently, "My grandma are too tired to send and receive (接送？)me every noon."(accompany me back and forth to school)

"Why don't you go to school by yourself?" I questioned( ask)him directly.

"I want to,but my mother think it dangerous. She is afraid perhaps there are accidents."(of )

He is a student in the fifth grade of ** primary school. All the other students in our apartments have started to go to school soley since they were in the third grade(这句话说的是一种现象不能用完成时go to school alone from the third grade).( His father is a boss of a factory. The family is afraid that he would(?) be abducted(be possible to be kidnapped) if he is alone. So he goes to school in the morning and comes back home in the dark(in the evening or in the afternoon) all(去掉） by his father's car. Teacher will care for students and guanrantee the safety of students in school at noon.((老师责任重大呀！）

I don't know when the parents will let the boy, a man in the future, fly by himself.（could set their hearts at rest to let the boy go alone)

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谢谢zznn,最近比较烦，为小孩择校的事情。
看好的三牧又举棋不定了，因为与三牧挂钩的一中初中部又恢复招生了，势必原来一中的老师将回到一中初中部，三牧与一中关系将渐行渐远，而且三牧校长据说是爱收红包的人（有家长说他会暗示），实在与想象的好学校“先做人，再做学问“有一定距离。

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He is a student in the fifth grade of ** primary school. All the other students in our apartments have started to go to school soley since they were in the third grade(这句话说的是一种现象不能用完成时go to school alone from the third grade).( His father is a boss of a factory. The family is afraid that he would(?) be abducted(be possible to be kidnapped) if he is alone. So he goes to school in the morning and comes back home in the dark(in the evening or in the afternoon) all(去掉） by his father's car. Teacher will care for students and guanrantee the safety of students in school at noon.((老师责任重大呀！）



He is in the fifth grade at ** elementary school. Although all the other students above 3rd grade in our building start to go to the school without the parents' escort, he is still being accompanied to the school. His father is the boss of a factory. His family is worried about his safety and fears that he could be kidnapped if he goes to the school alone. So his family sends him to the school by car in the morning and picks him up to take him back to home in the evening. The parents don’t need to worry about their children in the school for the teachers are responsible for their safety.

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Beijing2008 说:

He is a student in the fifth grade of ** primary school. All the other students in our apartments have started to go to school soley since they were in the third grade(这句话说的是一种现象不能用完成时go to school alone from the third grade).( His father is a boss of a factory. The family is afraid that he would(?) be abducted(be possible to be kidnapped) if he is alone. So he goes to school in the morning and comes back home in the dark(in the evening or in the afternoon) all(去掉） by his father's car. Teacher will care for students and guanrantee the safety of students in school at noon.((老师责任重大呀！）



He is in the fifth grade at ** elementary school. Although all the other students above 3rd grade in our building start to go to the school without the parents' escort, he is still being accompanied to the school. His father is the boss of a factory. His family is worried about his safety and fears that he could be kidnapped if he goes to the school alone. So his family sends him to the school by car in the morning and picks him up to take him back to home in the evening. The parents don’t need to worry about their children in the school for the teachers are responsible for their safety.

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zznn123456 说:

April 18,2007

He said subsequently.
"I want to,but my mother think(feels) it dangerous.

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Is the word "subsequently" used appropriately here?

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angelonduty 说:

Is the word "subsequently" used appropriately here?

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continuousy?

think is Ok, just think(s).

think/believe/suppose/guess ------can express same meaning in oral English

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I was just in doubt.

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I agree with you subsequently is a little bit strange

how do you think about "continuously" can be used here appropriately?

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April 30, 2007


Tomorrow is the International Labour Day. We will be on holiday from May 1 to May 7. In return, we had to work at the weekend. Government think long holiday can stimulate economy, especialy sightseeing industry.

I dislike being tired working for seven days in order to have a longer holiday. It sounds like that people only can start eating after no eating (going hungry,which is better) for two days; people only can wash themselves after no washing(going dirty,which is better) for two days; people only can go to sleep after no sleeping (keeping awake,which is better) for two days……..

I dislike to sightsee on holiday. On last International Labour Day, I went to Taimu Mountain with my family, together with other two families of my old classmates. To our surprise, Taimu Mountain was standing(was being standed?不要用被动吧) full of people despite not being an hot sight point. We could hardly move our feet. At last we gave up and wasted our tickets.

I dislike to go shopping on holiday. Shops always promote sales and attact almost all women go for shopping on holiday, most of them are accompanied by their husbands or boyfriends . They are crazy to grab clothes and put on themselves even if no spare dressing room. No good service are availabe in such busy situation (condition, which is better?).

I think it reasonable to cancel the long holiday system. If government give us three days for holiday, we just have holiday for three days.

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Is there anyone who is willing to criticise my writing?

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As much as I would like to, onlimy, I will have to wait until this weekend.

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But I'd like to offer my advice here:
First, please substitue at lease two of the word "dislike" with its equivalent in order to vivify your writing;
A further problem, try to reorganize the last part, it's perfectly suitable to be written in a subjunctive way.

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I prefer that government should cancel the long holiday system. If government gave us three days for holiday, we would not exchange two days of weekend any more.

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Writing Task 1

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task

You have recently moved into a new flat. Unfortunately, you lost some money the other day, and cannot afford to pay next month's rent when it is due.

Write a letter to the landlord explaining the situation and that you will pay as soon as your parents send you the money. Also mention that there are some problems with the flat.

You should write at least 150 words
You do Not need to wirte your address or the landlord's address.

Start the letter as follows:

Dear landlord,

This is writing to inform you that I am not able to the next month's rent which is due to next Monday.

When I was taking the bus last weekend, I lost my wallet which all my assets were carried in. That means I had no any penny at all . I had to borrow a little of money to avoid going hungry --- Now the only food I can afford is bread. There is really no extra dollar for the rent.

I have written to my parents to notice them about my unfortunate situation. I trust that they will send me money as soon as possible. Then, I will pay you the rent at once whenever I receive the money. I guess it should take one week. I am very sorry if it brings you any inconvenience.

However, there are some problems in this flat. First, the lights in the living room were broken and can not be turned on. My legs often hit the chairs owing to the darkness. Second, the washing machine can not run well. Therefore I have to wash my clothes and bedsheet all by my hands. It is painful to immerge my hands in such cold water while the temperature of water is almost -10 degree.

I am grateful if you could kindly do me a favour to wait for the rent. I would like to thank you in advance if you could have a look to the light and washing machine as well .

Your faithfully
Jane
May,14

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onlimy 说:

Writing Task 1

Dear landlord(when you are writing to him, you should have known his surname, just put it here, instead),

This is writing to inform(you are supposed to explain your current situation, "inform" feels quite inadequate here) you that I am not able to the next month's rent which is due to next Monday.

When I was taking the bus last weekend, I lost my wallet which all my assets were carried in. That means I had no any penny at all . I had to borrow a little of money to avoid going hungry --- Now the only food I can afford is bread. There is really no extra dollar for the rent.(Write in a more mature way, such as you had your wallet stolen, as you can imagine the mess, all my currency and other important things are lost. Say it in one word, just explain how things happened and what the consequences are now.)

I have written to my parents to notice them about my unfortunate situation. I trust that they will send me money as soon as possible. Then, I will pay you the rent at once whenever I receive the money. I guess it should take one week. I am very sorry if it brings you any inconvenience. (Tell him what measures you have taken to show your attitude and effort. Such as what you mentioned, saught support from your family, better offer an alternative way such as you were to take part time job, etc. )

However, there are some problems in this flat. First, the lights in the living room were broken and can not be turned on. My legs often hit the chairs owing to the darkness. Second, the washing machine can not run well. Therefore I have to wash my clothes and bedsheet all by my hands. It is painful to immerge my hands in such cold water while the temperature of water is almost -10 degree(Further problems are irrelevant to this matter, what you should do is to persuade the landlord).

I am grateful if you could kindly do me a favour to wait for the rent. I would like to thank you in advance if you could have a look to the light and washing machine as well .

Your faithfully
Jane
May,14

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Better no more than 170 words. Otherwise it takes too much of your time, and more chance to expose mistakes.

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Writing Task 1
Your friend has recently come to visit you and after leaving, dropped his or her mobile phone in your home. Writing to your friend.
1. You should say something to your friend.
2. Tell him or her where you found the phone.
3. How will you solve this matter?

Who wanna try?

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onlimy 说:

Writing Task 1

I am grateful if you could kindly do me a favour to wait for the rent. I would like to thank you in advance if you could have a look to the light and washing machine as well .

Your faithfully
Jane
May,14

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Polite ending is a little bit long and one sentence is Ok.I see you stated two things,but as angel said that the repair of light and washing machine is not related to the task you have to finish mentioned in the subject,if doing so will deviate the theme.

By the way,the date should be put in the right of head if you want to state it ,but as I know ,it does not need to write date in ielts test.

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zznn123456 说:

Polite ending is a little bit long and one sentence is Ok.I see you stated two things,but as angel said that the repair of light and washing machine is not related to the task you have to finish mentioned in the subject,if doing so will deviate the theme.

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Well said!

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I made a mistake that the task includes mentioning other problems in the flat,sorry only

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angel,see the task again

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I was too careless!

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me too

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Thank angel and zznn. I'll modify it and try to do your assignment later

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It's not an assignment, just a writing task 1 of the latest test. It indicates a trend that ielts writing for General Training seems more tangible. It is said that previous writings were prevailed by lodging a complaint. You should, therefore, have to be much proficient with that kind, but also keep an eye on seeking accommodations or answering a job advertisement, I suppose.

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This is writing to ask for paying the rent a week later because I am not able to send you the next month's rent which is due to next Monday.

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Writing Task 1
Your friend has recently come to visit you and after leaving, dropped his or her mobile phone in your home. Writing to your friend.
1. You should say something to your friend.
2. Tell him or her where you found the phone.
3. How will you solve this matter?

Hi David,

How are all things going on these two days? I am very happy that we have had a good time together. It is so lucky to meet again after 20 years separation.

I still remember the song you sang in my home. It sounds great! You should be a singer star instead a teacher. Your wife were so good at cooking and so kind to cook for us. Thank to her,we had a delicious dinner which was real southern foods style. Please conduct my great thanks her.

---countinued

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Looking forward to reading more.

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my writting is so terrible that I don't know how to improve it

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蒙特利尔的憧憬 说:

my writting is so terrible that I don't know how to improve it

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You need lots and lots practice.

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Writing Task 1
Your friend has recently come to visit you and after leaving, dropped his or her mobile phone in your home. Writing to your friend.
1. You should say something to your friend.
2. Tell him or her where you found the phone.
3. How will you solve this matter?


Hi David,

How is about your flight to home? I am very happy having had a good time together. It is so lucky for us to meet again after 20 years separation.

I was so delighted that we could review our past life together. In addtion, your wife were so kind to cook for us. Thanks to her,we had a delicious dinner.Please convey my great thanks to her.

However, when I came back home from the airport, to my surprise, I saw your mobile phone lying on the table with the photos we had taken yesterday. Glancing at the watch, I realized that I couldn't catch up with you even if I had rushed to airport at once.

Missing phone will give you much inconvenience. Need I upload the data from cellphone, then send it to you by email ? Next month my colleague might go to London in plan. If the schedule is certain, I'd like to ask him bringing the mobile phone for you. Or, maybe I have to send the mobile phone you by Express.

Please tell me what I can do for you. I'd like to do anything you want. I am looking forward to your reply.

Your friendly
John

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First, please keep it short!
It nearly reaches 300 words.

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Yes.

I've cut it down in original post. I have no idea about how many words I have typed in. thanks

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In writing tast 1, you are required to finish a letter in no less than 150 words. Try to be accustomed with 160-170 words. Just to make yourself less in a hurry and save time for proof reading.

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Please tell me where mistakes are in the shortened post ,thanks. I like red or blue color all over the page.

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onlimy 说:

Writing Task 1

You are advised to spend a maximum of 20 minutes on this task

You have recently moved into a new flat. Unfortunately, you lost some money the other day, and cannot afford to pay next month's rent when it is due.

Write a letter to the landlord explaining the situation and that you will pay as soon as your parents send you the money. Also mention that there are some problems with the flat.

You should write at least 150 words
You do Not need to wirte your address or the landlord's address.

Start the letter as follows:

Dear landlord,

This is writing to inform you that I am not able to the next month's rent which is due to next Monday.

When I was taking the bus last weekend, I lost my wallet which all my assets were carried in. That means I had no any penny at all . I had to borrow a little of money to avoid going hungry --- Now the only food I can afford is bread. There is really no extra dollar for the rent.

I have written to my parents to notice them about my unfortunate situation. I trust that they will send me money as soon as possible. Then, I will pay you the rent at once whenever I receive the money. I guess it should take one week. I am very sorry if it brings you any inconvenience.

However, there are some problems in this flat. First, the lights in the living room were broken and can not be turned on. My legs often hit the chairs owing to the darkness. Second, the washing machine can not run well. Therefore I have to wash my clothes and bedsheet all by my hands. It is painful to immerge my hands in such cold water while the temperature of water is almost -10 degree.

I am grateful if you could kindly do me a favour to wait for the rent. I would like to thank you in advance if you could have a look to the light and washing machine as well .

Your faithfully
Jane
May,14

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谁出的题,丢了钱包还有银行帐号吧,付支票也行啊.所以?钱包不算什么好借口,要写银行帐号被黑了.

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帅呆了，beijing,终于又看到你了，你一定要常来指点我啊，等我回来送你篇礼物。

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今天是周未.天下雨很冷.只能呆在家.

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A Special gift to Beijing2008

I've been missing you for weeks. In my heart, you are the best,professional and loved English teacher that I've ever met.

First, you are so diligent. In days past, I could see your words whenever I came here. I was motivated to make more diaries because you,my teacher, were waiting for my new writing to criticise.

Second, you are so patient with me. Some times I supposed my English level would have disgusted you and made you given me up. But you didn't. This enforced me to work hard to do better one time than the last(一次比一次，这次比上次，怎么表达？).

Third, you are strict with English. You know the accurate (precise?)using of English so well that every time you can point out so much errors in my writing. Your criticism is direct, definite and effective. Therefore, I can understand why it is wrong and how to revise it quickly.

I will learn from you the attitude of doing everything professionally and seriously to achieve perfect result.

I'd like to say that I cannot stand any more without your help. Please don't discard me again. I remember a sentence that I have an appointment with an angel. You are the angel, I am the angel. Please.

Hope to see the words with red and blue color all over the page very soon.

Best wishes to you and your family. ^_^

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by the way,我可以说银行账户里没余款，透支利息很高吗？或是刚到这里还没来及开户，身份证在钱包一起丢了，没办法开户，哪个更合理一些呢。

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从zznn那里借来个题目（本人水平不够，不敢在那献丑）：
Some people think fashion is good but others not.
Do you agree or disagree this opinion?
下午来做。

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Some people think fashion is good but others not.
Do you agree or disagree this opinion?


Some people think fashion is good but others not. In general, I think fashion is good if he or she can afford.

Fashion means modernization.The opposite is tradition. In modern society, we prefer to be dressed in fashion because none of us is willing to be out of date. If we dress ourself out of date, it will be supposed that our heads would have been out of date as well. Meanwhile,Traditional clothes are not suitable for modernised people any more. Could you imagine people dressed in Changpaomaguato drive a moto?

There are many good things that fashion can bring to people.

First,fashion can make people more beautiful and attractive. Everybody loves beauty. People who looks beautiful will get more help as well. Dressed in fashion, girls become the most wonderful scenes which will not only delight themselves, but aslo bright others.

Second, fashion means being well and tastefully dressed. We have positive impression about the people dressed in fashion. We often suppose that they should be in good manner or well educated just by first sight, and then give up our deffense. Thus, As for fashioned persons, it is easy for them to make friends.

to be continued

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onlimy 说:

A Special gift to Beijing2008

I've been missing you for weeks. In my heart, you are the best,professional and loved English teacher that I've ever met.

First, you are so diligent. In days past, I could see your words whenever I came here. I was motivated to make more diaries because you,my teacher, were waiting for my new writing to criticise.

Second, you are so patient with me. Some times I supposed my English level would have disgusted you and made you given me up. But you didn't. This enforced me to work hard to do better one time than the last(一次比一次，这次比上次，怎么表达？).

Third, you are strict with English. You know the accurate (precise?)using of English so well that every time you can point out so much errors in my writing. Your criticism is direct, definite and effective. Therefore, I can understand why it is wrong and how to revise it quickly.

I will learn from you the attitude of doing everything professionally and seriously to achieve perfect result.

I'd like to say that I cannot stand any more without your help. Please don't discard me again. I remember a sentence that I have an appointment with an angel. You are the angel, I am the angel. Please.

Hope to see the words with red and blue color all over the page very soon.

Best wishes to you and your family. ^_^

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I am so impressed by your diligency. If Beijing2008, the teacher of us all, had got free time in his hand and happened to read this writing, he would have been grateful for your heartwarming words.

I'd like to make some comment here, if you don't mind.
"Firstly", "secondly" and "thirdly" and so forth are their common use when you manage to express things from different aspects.

"一次比一次，这次比上次，怎么表达？" better and better each day, I suppose.

Stick to your goal and you will reach where you are supposed to be.

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Thank you for your reply. Otherwise it seems that I were whispering to myself.

By the way, Could you please tell me what is the difference between "first,second,third......" and "firstly,secondly,thirdly......" ? Thanks.

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onlimy 说:

what is the difference between "first,second,third......" or "firstly,secondly,thirdly......" ?

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One difference is that you should put "the" before first,sencond,and third,while firstly ,secondly,thirdly are used without "the" ahead. Another is firstly is adv.and first can be worked as adv.adj.and n.

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能这么不避晦的把日记用英文的形式写出来并公开，本身就胆识过人了。
佩服。

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sorry, i shouldn't sent the massage in Chinese.

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Welcome new friend and thank you for your praise. Nothing is more important than improving my English. I have to throw shyness away.

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I totally agree with you there, onlimy.

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onlimy 说:

Welcome new friend and thank you for your praise. Nothing is more important than improving my English. I have to throw shyness away.

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enjoy learning here and brush aside embarrassment in order to make a great progress in the end

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zznn123456 说:

Enjoy learning here and brush aside embarrassment in order to make a great progress in the end

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Nice said!

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May 24th,2007

I received the File Number of my application yesterday.

When I came back home yesterday afternoon, I went to the mailbox under my house building. Picking out my key, I whispered to myself:'My God, please don't make me disapointed!'. Then, I plugged the key into the lock and turned on. I put out my arm into the box and my hand touched an envelope.It was unlike any advertisement or bill, I thought. When I dragged it out and had a glance at the cover, I found that it was printed in English! With the great hope, I had a good look at these English words.'Consulate General of Canada' was on the left top of the cover! 'Yeah!I've got it!' I was so delighted that I rushed into the elevator and was too impatient to wait telling my mother this good news.

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GX

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I am coming back. Sorry it has been long time not to write anything. However I did not give up studying English even in those days. Now that everything has come to good results, I should resume my English writing at once. Hohoooo......

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I am going to join a class taught by an Australian English teacher next semester. I've listened for two weeks and he is a nice, serious and handsome man .Hehe.

Never give up English study, every one!

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Dirka dirka

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onlimy 说:

I am going to join a class taught by an Australian English teacher next semester. I've listened for two weeks and he is a nice, serious and handsome man .Hehe.

Never give up English study, every one!

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I AGREE.

NEVER STOP USING ENGLISH,PLAY UP!

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onlimy 说:

I am coming back. Sorry it has been long time not to write anything. However I did not give up studying English even in those days. Now that everything has come to good results, I should resume my English writing at once. Hohoooo......

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WE HAVE WAITED FOR A LONG TIME.HAHA

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Sorry. Nobody came here since beijing2008 left English World. I indeed feel so lonely that I'm studying English under the net.

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onlimy 说:

Sorry. Nobody came here since beijing2008 left English World. I indeed feel so lonely that I'm studying English under the net.

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觉得这句话仿佛这样说合适些：I feel so lonely that I almost cannot continue studying english on the net.
on the net or under the net ，我也不知道有什么区别了，呵呵

另外，其实大家谁不觉得是这样呢
可是08的新工作更忙了，而且他也说还有很多要继续学习的，所以可能也没有那么多精力来这边了。我们也应该体谅他了。

而大家呢，都觉得自己没有那么权威，怕给你纠正半天都纠正错了，，所以冷清了下来

其实only你别灰心，自己写也一样可以进步的，但是需要经常查查字典查查google，把每个关键词的用法搞清楚，特别是英文的释义。

共同进步：）

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好习惯啊