先给出题目,要求对给出的题目(一个存在多种立场的是非问题)提出自己的观点(可保留性支持,保留性反对,全面支持,全面反对或者干脆骑墙, ),并提供论据支持自己的立场。
题目1:The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience.
俺的第一篇,欢迎大家拍砖(俺先准备铁锅,别砸漏就行,回头做饭还得用呢),同时更欢迎大家参与,PK(也给俺一个拍砖机会:)
补充:俺这篇是保留性支持。
豁出去啦,啥也不管,俺这就贴啦
Books and experience are the two main resources that we can gain knowledge from, but which one can bring us the depth of knowledge richer and broader? Maybe someone prefer direct experience, while, On the whole, i will choose books. Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want through looking up in books, the sum of experience from people preceding, than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals a book, especially a professional book, teaches us an certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, just by direct experience only can we get is the just point from what we did. For example, even like our education, if we learn botany from the text book, we can know from the appearance of plants to the inner fabric; because experts in this period have research them throughlly. unfortunately, from our own direct experience maybe we can get just the shallow acquaintance because we have not complex equipments and advanced researching methods like those scientists do to help us get more knowledge.
Then, the same thing happens in the breadth we gain knowledge from books and experience. It is exactly as people always say: everyone's time and energy are limited, so it is impossible that one person can have the whole experience in every field. To the contray, a book just like extending your life, because the people preceding you have done what your need to do for you and you do nothing but look up the book and take in mind. I dare not imagine if we get knowledge not from books but only from direct experience all the way, then maybe now the humanbeing is still at the paleolithic age; because everyone's life spent on learning the rudimental knowledge from his own direct experience, but not standing on the shoulder of Giants.
Admittedly, always depending on books sometimes is also limited; Because society is always developing, and only learning from the book in which the knowledge is all confirmed without finding new things from your own experience will stop this developing. However, comparing the knowledge in books to one's experience, whether in depth or in breadth, the latter can not be at an advantageous position. In other words, the depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from dierct experience.
多谢各位兄弟姐妹父老乡亲捧场,深 深 鞠躬:)
Direct experience generally denotes experience gained through immediate sense perception. Many philosophical systems hold that knowledge or skills gained through direct experience cannot be fully put into words.
You cannot grasp it; Nor can you get rid of it. In not being able to get it, you get it. When you speak, it is silent; When you are silent, it speaks(这话真棒,透着禅机).
总得来讲你写的很好,英文写作就是主题明确,然后是用EVIDENCES来SUPPORT你的观点.只是有些拼写和大小写TYPO等小小错.
经过北美学校训练就是不一样.
Maybe someone prefer direct experience, while, On the whole, i will choose books. 大小写,
这个太傻了,我刚刚又仔细看了一下,也真够晕的,呵呵总得来讲你写的很好,英文写作就是主题明确,然后是用EVIDENCES来SUPPORT你的观点.只是有些拼写和大小写TYPO等小小错.
经过北美学校训练就是不一样.(俺还没经过学校训练,不过在你的评语里学了很多,再次谢谢)
Maybe someone prefer direct experience, while, On the whole, i will choose books. 大小写,(光把o改小写对吗?我对这种很多逗号的复句的标点不会用,都按汉语来的 )
最好是有三个段落来支持你的观点,那就更好了(我总犯这个毛病就是找观点前两个还行,死活想不起第三个,呵呵)
得到08的保留性肯定 ,我分外高兴写得不错!
By definition, tacit knowledge is knowledge that people carry in their minds and is, therefore, difficult to access. Often, people are not aware of the knowledge they possess or how it can be valuable to others. Tacit knowledge is considered more valuable because it provides context for people, places, ideas, and experiences. Effective transfer of tacit knowledge generally requires extensive personal contact and trust.
Tacit knowledge is not easily shared. One of Polanyi's famous aphorisms is: "We know more than we can tell." Tacit knowledge consists often of habits and culture that we do not recognize in ourselves. In the field of knowledge management the concept of tacit knowledge refers to a knowledge which is only known by an individual and that is difficult to communicate to the rest of an organization. Knowledge that is easy to communicate is called explicit knowledge. The process of transforming tacit knowledge into explicit knowledge is known as codification or articulation.
[edit] Properties of tacit knowledge
The tacit aspects of knowledge are those that cannot be codified, but can only be transmitted via training or gained through personal experience. Alternatively, tacit knowledge can be understood to be knowledge that is embedded in a culture (for instance a regional culture, organizational culture or social culture) and is difficult to share with people not embedded in that culture. Tacit knowledge has been described as "know-how" (as opposed to "know-what" [facts], "know-why" [science] and "know-who" [networking]) . It involves learning and skill but not in a way that can be written down. The knowledge of how to ride a bike is an example: one cannot learn to ride a bike by reading a textbook, it takes personal experimentation and practice to gain the necessary skills.
Tacit knowledge has been found to be a crucial input to the innovation process. A society’s ability to innovate depends on its level of tacit knowledge of how to innovate. Polanyi suggested that scientific inquiry could not be reduced to facts, and that the search for new and novel research problems requires tacit knowledge about how to approach an unknown. Futher writers have suggested that most laboratory practices, practices that are vital to the successful reproduction of a scientific experiment, are tacit (Collins, 2001). Ikujiro Nonaka and Hirotaka Takeuchi's book The Knowledge Creating Company (1995) brought the concept of tacit knowledge into the realm of corporate innovation. In it, they suggest that Japanese companies are more innovative because they are able to successfully collectivize individual tacit knowledge to the firm. The two researchers give the example of the first Japanese bread maker, whose development was impossible until the engineers interned themselves to one of Japan's leading bakers. During their internship, they were able to learn the tacit movements required to knead dough, and then transfer this knowledge back to the company.
An example of the problems of tacit knowledge is the Bessemer process ? Bessemer sold a patent to his advanced steel making process and was sued by the purchasers who couldn't get it to work ? in the end Bessemer set up his own steel company which became one of the largest in the world and changed the face of steel making.
Tacit knowledge may seem a simple idea but its implications are large and far reaching. If important knowledge is tacit, then it cannot be effectively spread through an organization. This means that useful knowledge will not be able to reach those who need it without direct, face-to-face contact. It also means that training newcomers in an organization becomes more time consuming, because they must be given time to learn on their own while doing, which reduces overall efficiency. In order to collectivize and spread tacit knowledge, organizations must invest greatly in the human capital of its members.
这倒是,这就是所谓的手感吧tacit knowledge比如名大厨做菜,是不是他写出菜谱后你照着做就做得和名厨一样了?
啊,真没想到,图书馆专业还有这个方向那knowledge management很时髦的,是图书馆专业的一个方向.我也写过类似的文章.但没保存,找不到了.
我感觉天上地下了,是地低下我没空写东西,今年只有现在是休假了,等去了YALE,太忙了.要写也是写升职用的,肯定要和同事合写,然后去哪专业会议或刊物发表.
放心吧,08是个热心人儿,即便雪也会给暖融了的哪里,我的意思就是要借助于老外的英文.我还没底自个儿写了发表.
今天刚买了车票,准备月底坐大巴从MONTREAL去NEW HAVEN.但愿别下雪.
啊,不认真读帖,我真Maybe someone prefers direct experience, however, I will choose books.
恩,很期待这高帽给带的.
哈哈, 我准备去看它二十篇Issue,备战好了再来.
俺现在连中文的Issue都有年头没沾边了.
先给出题目,要求对给出的题目(一个存在多种立场的是非问题)提出自己的观点(可保留性支持,保留性反对,全面支持,全面反对或者干脆骑墙, ),并提供论据支持自己的立场。
题目1:The depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from direct experience.
俺的第一篇,欢迎大家拍砖(俺先准备铁锅,别砸漏就行,回头做饭还得用呢),同时更欢迎大家参与,PK(也给俺一个拍砖机会:)
补充:俺这篇是保留性支持。
豁出去啦,啥也不管,俺这就贴啦
Books and experience are the two main resources that we can gain knowledge from, but which one can bring us the depth of knowledge richer and broader? Maybe someone prefer direct experience, while, On the whole, i will choose books. Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want through looking up in books, the sum of experience from people preceding, than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals a book, especially a professional book, teaches us an certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, just by direct experience only can we get is the just point from what we did. For example, even like our education, if we learn botany from the text book, we can know from the appearance of plants to the inner fabric; because experts in this period have research them throughlly. unfortunately, from our own direct experience maybe we can get just the shallow acquaintance because we have not complex equipments and advanced researching methods like those scientists do to help us get more knowledge.
Then, the same thing happens in the breadth we gain knowledge from books and experience. It is exactly as people always say: everyone's time and energy are limited, so it is impossible that one person can have the whole experience in every field. To the contray, a book just like extending your life, because the people preceding you have done what your need to do for you and you do nothing but look up the book and take in mind. I dare not imagine if we get knowledge not from books but only from direct experience all the way, then maybe now the humanbeing is still at the paleolithic age; because everyone's life spent on learning the rudimental knowledge from his own direct experience, but not standing on the shoulder of Giants.
Admittedly, always depending on books sometimes is also limited; Because society is always developing, and only learning from the book in which the knowledge is all confirmed without finding new things from your own experience will stop this developing. However, comparing the knowledge in books to one's experience, whether in depth or in breadth, the latter can not be at an advantageous position. In other words, the depth of knowledge to be gained from books is much richer and broader than what can be learned from dierct experience.
多谢各位兄弟姐妹父老乡亲捧场,深 深 鞠躬:)
这高帽给带的.
哈哈, 我准备去看它二十篇Issue,备战好了再来.
俺现在连中文的Issue都有年头没沾边了.
写得真棒啊, 极了,词汇丰富俺的第一篇,欢迎大家拍砖(俺先准备铁锅,砸吧 ,看来不破斧沉锅不行了,同时更欢迎大家参与,不敢PK,就是想学习,也给俺一个进步机会)经过下午的构思,晚上把以前的作业,笔记翻出来,熟悉一下结构,(2年前的,我这人笔记一向潦草,写完自己都不认识,因为记的时候根本就没想再看,只是对老师的尊重,以为自己当时都记住了 ),好不容易"拼"出一篇.
补充:俺这篇是保留性支持。豁出去啦,啥也不管,俺这就贴啦,还是有点害怕 题目内容请参照LZ的(形式是中立)(偶IELTS老师以前说EXAMINER 喜欢 SAMPLES,(绝对正确)所以列举了很多,不知道对不?)
Obtaining knowledge directly from practical experience has become more of an option (给讲解一下)for people these days due to limited time .However,whlie(while?用了however和while 两个连词) getting the useful resources from books may be the mainstream in the future.Two approaches have distinct advantages(句尾加这个会不会好些respectively),and the choice is more a matter of personal preference.
On the one hand, firstly,it (has been proved)proves true that riching knowledge straight from experience would save a lot of time,for example,some computer problems related to the “office operation system” may be solved in a few minutes under the supervision of your skillful colleagues instead of spending a few hours on checking the professional books ,and perhaps later you will fail to tackle it.In addtion,
learning from actual cases is an effective way to widen your horizon,for example,the best way to understand a strange country’s culture and traditons is to go there personally rather than (to) study plenty of travel books at home which may result in misunderstandings as different authors hold differents(different) views.Also, undoubtedly, as a team player, you are not noly requested to master the academic knowledge,but also the interpersonal skills ,(需要逗号吗)which is(are) crucial for your employment opportunities, have to be learned and managed through practices.(这个句子是不是谓语多了?)
On the other hand, some people are inclined (学习:) to enrich their knowledge from books,especially for children and old men.for example,due to the sake of safety(活学活用啊) , in some schools chlildren under 10 years old are forbidden to go out for excursion, they have to know the colourful insects and various plants from books replacing with observing them carfully in the outskirts.Compared with young people,the old men are less to acquire knowledge on purpose,therefore they prefer to gain the information they need by reading books in a peaceful pace rather than(to需要吗) put themselves into a real active life.Moreover,books are enjoying(讲解一下) a wider application to serve as a major study media to deepen and broaden people’s knowledge,
which does not need a special time,special place and a typical teacher ,thus some people have formed a good habit of readindg whenever or wherever they are available . Last but not least, ,all advanced technologies are written in words before applying them into practice.
In short, from which channel your absorbing the ample and wide knowledge is not important,the key is that you are able to enjoy the process of acquirement.
从来没写过这么长,因为IELTS要求250个字,当时练习的时候都没超过280个,够字数就OK了,但看LZ写那么多,不敢怠慢,第一次写超过300字,大汗!
这个the human capital of its memebers 该怎么理解呢Tacit knowledge may seem a simple idea but its implications are large and far reaching. If important knowledge is tacit, then it cannot be effectively spread through an organization. This means that useful knowledge will not be able to reach those who need it without direct, face-to-face contact. It also means that training newcomers in an organization becomes more time consuming, because they must be given time to learn on their own while doing, which reduces overall efficiency. In order to collectivize and spread tacit knowledge, organizations must invest greatly in the human capital of its members.
支持一下,太好了
这个和toefl185题里面的第4题很相近阿
It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books."
Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books.
In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?
可惜我还没写这篇呢
找到了,去年写过的,贴出来,纪念我第一次半途而废的考托
是当时的第三次作业,后来看觉得逻辑结构不好,表达不清晰,嘿嘿
Since born in this world, people are on the way of acquiring information and getting knowledge. People always try their best to gain much more information, especially by experiences and books. They are very helpful for people to become smarter. But which source, experiences or books, is more important? It is really hard to determine.
Before mastering the skills of reading and writing, people learn mainly by their own experiences. For example, a child may observe everything in their sight and imitate(imitating) what others do. He will soon get the information so as to keep him away from dangerous and comfortless situation. The first touch with fire perhaps frightened him, and this experience is so impressing and first-hand that he remembered not to approach to fire. Experiences always impress people most.
No one can deny people benefit from experiences, but in my opinion books really teach people more. In such an information-booming society, people can not learn anything just by their own experiences. It is said reading a good book is just like talking with a great people, and people can know what others think, live or do by reading books. For instance, I can not have a chance to talk with Newton face to face, but I can know his ideas and thoughts from his books. Meanwhile, books can broaden people’s eyes and take them into another world. A travel book can make me get a knowledge of the local customs, famous sites, history, and so on, which maybe partly compensate(需要加s吗) the regret that I could not have a visit to the place.
Especially in this modern developing age, people learn more from books than from experiences. Although experiences can teach people first-hand and impressing knowledge, people benefit more from reading books. It is difficult to get information by oneself. To be much more adaptable to the fast speed development, people would learn not only from their own experiences, but from other’s by reading books. As an old Chinese saying, “It is helpful to read a book”(开卷有益:), It is rather important for us to gain knowledge by reading books.
这个真是很难啊,我想举的例子都太不international啦中国人写文章喜欢讲原理,从原理谈原理,从理论到理论,这是通病,我以前写的文学批评文章老师的评语就是"从理论到理论"所以花了很多功夫,只得B+,后来改了风格,就能得A,A-了.
需要解释The process of transforming tacit knowledge into explicit knowledge is known as codification or articulation.
[edit] Properties of tacit knowledge
The tacit aspects of knowledge are those that cannot be codified, but can only be transmitted via training or gained through personal experience. Alternatively, tacit knowledge can be understood to be knowledge that is embedded in a culture (for instance a regional culture, organizational culture or social culture) and is difficult to share with people not embedded in that culture.
An example of the problems of tacit knowledge is the Bessemer process ? Bessemer sold a patent to his advanced steel making process and was sued by the purchasers who couldn't get it to work (codification不成功?)? in the end Bessemer set up his own steel company which became one of the largest in the world and changed the face of steel making.
On the one hand, firstly,it has been proved true that riching ? knowledge straight from experience would save a lot of time,for example,some computer problems related to the “office operation system” may be solved in a few minutes under the supervision of your skillful colleagues instead of spending a few hours on checking the professional books ,and perhaps later you will fail to tackle it.
她们都去睡觉觉了,俺先替谢过啦On the one hand, firstly,it has been proved true that riching ? (enriching)knowledge straight(为啥不能用这个?难道这个直接只是距离上的吗?换成directly?) from experience would save a lot of time,for example,some computer problems related to the “office operation system(这个不是操作系统吗 )” may be solved in a few minutes under the supervision(assist?) of your skillful(改成skilled可以吗) colleagues instead of spending a few hours on checking the professional :(这个不知道了) books ,and perhaps later you will fail to tackle it.
I see这些不是很确切,
"Office software", "Office tools","Office Management System"但没什么office operation system
under the supervision of your skillful colleagues
用with the help of your experienced colleagues更恰当因为你强调经验
几分种也SUPERVISION一下吗?
the professional books 用 production manuals
tacit knowledge 只能意会不能言传, 必须learn on their own while doing;但是可以codify的,但这样的codification may seem a simple idea but its implications are large and far reaching.比如把厨师的经验编成菜谱加上操作步骤.
是的,和TACIT KNOWLEDGE相应的是EXPLICIT KNOWLEDGEtacit knowledge 只能意会不能言传, 必须learn on their own while doing;但是可以codify的,但这样的codification may seem a simple idea but its implications are large and far reaching.
这些不是很确切,
"Office software", "Office tools","Office Management System"但没什么office operation system
under the supervision of your skillful colleagues
用with the help of your experienced colleagues更恰当因为你强调经验
几分种也SUPERVISION一下吗?
the professional books 用 production manuals
上面两篇"紫竹林" 和"ZZNN123456"写的文章,结构都不错.写作基本框架不错,只是在支持观点的时侯,要用更多的数据,比如百分比,调查结果,引用别人的研究,引用名言等就更精彩,另外注意个别字的用法.
中国人写文章喜欢讲原理,从原理谈原理,从理论到理论,这是通病,我以前写的文学批评文章老师的评语就是"从理论到理论"所以花了很多功夫,只得B+,后来改了风格,就能得A,A-了.
getting the useful resources from books may be the mainstream in the future.
Probably from digital resources.哈哈.
原句很好的,我只是讲将来的趋势是DIGITAL RESOURCES.getting the useful resources from books may still be one of mainstreams in the future. 可以吗?
上面两篇"紫竹林" 和"ZZNN123456"写的文章,结构都不错.写作基本框架不错,只是在支持观点的时侯,要用更多的数据,比如百分比,调查结果,引用别人的研究,引用名言等就更精彩,另外注意个别字的用法.
因为俺不会难词 ,哈哈1.国内的老师也只能教结构了
2.引用别人的数据,调查结果,一定要真实可靠,否则我自己都不敢看,国内做调查的很少,引用名言可以试试.
3. 说起这事,我就生气,这里老师要求VARIETY,可以写skillful ,他却说sophyscated(还忘了咋写,但发音好像对),单词能用难的,就不用简单的,这样才能拿高分,有时查字典用一些莫名其妙的词,写完自己都不认识
可是看了你贴的关于extramarrital affairs,那么复杂的关系,都是用最简单的单词,写的很清楚,明了 ,以后再写就应该朝这方面发展,还有IBT,写的也流畅,也没用啥"难"词
我觉得还是叫“剩下”(我新提升的)好,哈哈,俺叫你“总是”,呵呵Obtaining knowledge directly from practical experience has become more of an option (给讲解一下)(已经成为大部分人的选择,相当于become more popular)for people these days due to limited time .However,whlie(while?用了however和while 两个连词)(这里应该去掉一个) getting the useful resources from books may be the mainstream in the future.Two approaches have distinct advantages(句尾加这个会不会好些respectively ),and the choice is more a matter of personal preference.
On the one hand, firstly,it (has been proved)proves true that riching knowledge straight from experience would save a lot of time,for example,some computer problems related to the “office operation system” may be solved in a few minutes under the supervision of your skillful colleagues instead of spending a few hours on checking the professional books ,and perhaps later you will fail to tackle it.In addtion,
learning from actual cases is an effective way to widen your horizon,for example,the best way to understand a strange country’s culture and traditons is to go there personally rather than (to)(可以省略吧?) study plenty of travel books at home which may result in misunderstandings as different authors hold differents(different) views.Also, undoubtedly, as a team player, you are not noly requested to master the academic knowledge,but also the interpersonal skills ,(需要逗号吗)(no)which is(are)(right) crucial for your employment opportunities, have to be learned and managed through practices.(这个句子是不是谓语多了?)(这里想表达WHICH引导一个并列的定语从句 ,好像不行,这样可以吗?which are crucial for your empoyment opportunities and these techniques have to be learned and managed through practices)
On the other hand, some people are inclined (学习:)(想用ENRICH代替STUDY,总想到替换没想到准确性) to enrich their knowledge from books,especially for children and old men.for example,due to the sake of safety(活学活用啊) , in some schools chlildren under 10 years old are forbidden to go out for excursion, they have to know the colourful insects and various plants from books replacing with observing them carfully in the outskirts.Compared with young people,the old men are less to acquire knowledge on purpose,therefore they prefer to gain the information they need by reading books in a peaceful pace rather than(to需要吗)(不需要) put themselves into a real active life.Moreover,books are enjoying(讲解一下)(enjoying a wider application,也是become popular 的意思) a wider application to serve as a major study media to deepen and broaden people’s knowledge,
which does not need a special time,special place and a typical teacher ,thus some people have formed a good habit of readindg whenever or wherever they are available . Last but not least, ,all advanced technologies are written in words before applying them into practice.
In short, from which channel your absorbing the ample and wide knowledge is not important,the key is that you are able to enjoy the process of acquirement.
dear my IBT teacher ,再次感谢
哇噻,我从小也喜欢语文,不过上了大学却学了理,就再没跟语文见过面啦我本来就不会写作文,假期留的作文都是偶前男友给偶突击写的
他考大学语文单科,全校第一
题目2
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
先说不好意思,自己还没写呢,呵呵
俺的能量实在有限,写完一篇就感觉“鞠躬尽瘁,死而后已”了,:(
大家有空就先写啊
俺先借鉴:)
1.国内的老师也只能教结构了
2.引用别人的数据,调查结果,一定要真实可靠,否则我自己都不敢看,国内做调查的很少,引用名言可以试试.
3. 说起这事,我就生气,这里老师要求VARIETY,可以写skillful ,他却说sophyscated(还忘了咋写,但发音好像对),单词能用难的,就不用简单的,这样才能拿高分,有时查字典用一些莫名其妙的词,写完自己都不认识
可是看了你贴的关于extramarrital affairs,那么复杂的关系,都是用最简单的单词,写的很清楚,明了 ,以后再写就应该朝这方面发展,还有IBT,写的也流畅,也没用啥"难"词
题目2
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
The speaker maintains it is more benefitial that students study the same national curriculm before they go to college than the different courses determined by different parts. Nowadays,I concede that many countries unify the courses in junior and senior schools, whereas I donot consider doing like this is helpful for students and disagree with the statement either. As my point of view, schools in different parts should have right to determine which academic courses to offer.
To begin with, I donnot think the same national courses are necessary. Maybe some people will oppose it and assert that only estabishing the uniform standard, can the quality of education be ensured. Contrarily, a school will take it's reputation seriously; even there is no restriction about curriculum, the governor of the school will also choose the most crucial courses. Though we have not the same national curriculum, we have the same principle about how to cultivate a qualified person; and according this the school will choose advisably. Confessedly, any school will not discard an acknowledged important couse, for instance math, Language; because they do not want their students uncompetitive in the society, furthermore, they know the quality of students is the life of the school. In conclusion, the same national courses extremely is needless.
Secondly, if schools in different parts have no freedom to determine which academic courses to offer, many problems would be caused. Because many coutries have not only one nation, such as China which has 56 different nations, and many of them have
their own languages and ,even, characters; it is impossible to accept all of them into the same national curriculum, while rejecting them is also unjust for the nations. Especially some distinct regional culture, if we do not transfer it, it will be lost. In this situation, the best solution is admitting schools choose the academic courses according to their needs.
Finally, everyone knows schools are not factories which produce robots, consequently they do not need the same academic courses as factories need fixed program and sembling line. Insteadly, every school should offer the most suitable curriculum to facilitate students' growing up. Not only the need of education but the need of students should be taken into account in the process of deciding a curriculum. Via catering this need, schools can also form their own features to develop themselves.
The analyse above has demonstrated that for a country allowing schools to determine their academic courses is much more appropriate. Of course, choosing same national curriculm may also have a few advantages, for example, the school are more simple to managed and the qualities of shools are easier to compare; but through the effective supervision of relevant departments, different shools enact different courses will do things better.
好, 呵呵,心照不宣的借口一周写一篇好吗?因为还有其他TZ写的还没来的及贴,我还要改一下,再贴上来 ,我们要重质 ,当然也重量了
可怜的zz,一定被我的可恶的错误搞得头晕脑涨了I 老师 马上拜读
我又暖水瓶你怕不?偶咋敢对老师下手呢 ,偶啥都不怕,就是怕老师(佩服有水平的老师 )
很喜欢NN写的长句子哦.优点多多!
给点儿小的建议,愿与NN讨论.
Obtaining knowledge directly from practical experience has become more of an option for people these days due to limited time .However,getting the useful resources from books may be the mainstream in the future.Two approaches(建议在two前面加these或者those,这样比较符合英语的表达习惯) have distinct advantages respectively,and the choice is more a matter of personal preference.
On the one hand, firstly,it has been proved true that developing knowledge from experience might save a plenty of time,for (我觉得这里是笔误吧,要写句号哦),example, with the help of your experienced colleagues ,some computer problems related to the office tools may be solved within a few minutes instead of spending hours on checking the maintenance manuals ,and perhaps at last you fail to tackle it.(这句话,我觉得要重新来写了. instead of这个介词词组转折得其实很好,但是它可以支配的宾语在语法上只能到manuals为止,但这个句子明显是在语意上是想管到后面and引导的从句.所以这个句子的结构要重新来安排哦.)In addtion,learning from actual cases is an effective way to widen your horizon,for example,the best way to get to know a strange country’s culture and traditons is to go there personally rather than study a lot of travel books at home which(一定要在前面加逗号,这句话必须是非限定性定语从句,不是可加可不加的那种) may result in misunderstandings as different authors hold differents views.Also, undoubtedly, as a team player, you are not only requested to master the academic knowledge,but also the interpersonal skills which are crucial for your employment opportunities and these techniques have to be studied and managed throughout practices.
On the other hand, some people are likely inclined to expand and deepen their knowledge from books,especially for children and old people.for example,due to the sake of safety, in some schools chlildren under 10 years old are forbidden to go out for excursion, they have to know the colourful insects and various plants from books replacing with observing them carfully in the outskirts.Compared with young people,the old men are less to acquire knowledge on purpose,therefore they prefer to gain the information they need by reading books in a peaceful pace and are reluctant to put themselves into a real active life.Moreover,books are enjoying a wider application to serve as a major media to open people’s minds,as reading
is not necessary to need (不合习惯)a special time and a special place,the increasing number of people(加了the主语不再是people而是number) have formed a good habit to read whenever or wherever they are available . Last but not least, all advanced technologies are written in words before applying them into practice.
In short, from which channel your absorbing the ample and wide knowledge is not important,the key is that you are able to enjoy the process of acquirement,consequently most people consider it childish to seek study for its own sake.(第三段开头有2个,最后一段有2个标点的错,我想是笔误,呵呵,是我鸡婆啦)
([FONT=宋体]最后一句是看了这里的一个帖子说,希腊人认为了娱乐而娱乐是很幼稚的,我COPY[FONT=宋体]了一下,为了学习而学习是幼稚的,还是强调[/FONT]enjoyable,[FONT=宋体]行吗?[/FONT])
很喜欢NN写的长句子哦.优点多多!
给点儿小的建议,愿与NN讨论.
Obtaining knowledge directly from practical experience has become more of an option for people these days due to limited time .However,getting the useful resources from books may be the mainstream in the future.Two approaches(建议在two前面加these或者those,这样比较符合英语的表达习惯) have distinct advantages respectively,and the choice is more a matter of personal preference.
On the one hand, firstly,it has been proved true that developing knowledge from experience might save a plenty of time,for (我觉得这里是笔误吧,要写句号哦),example, with the help of your experienced colleagues ,some computer problems related to the office tools may be solved within a few minutes instead of spending hours on checking the maintenance manuals ,and perhaps at last you fail to tackle it.(这句话,我觉得要重新来写了. instead of这个介词词组转折得其实很好,但是它可以支配的宾语在语法上只能到manuals为止,但这个句子明显是在语意上是想管到后面and引导的从句.所以这个句子的结构要重新来安排哦.)In addtion,learning from actual cases is an effective way to widen your horizon,for example,the best way to get to know a strange country’s culture and traditons is to go there personally rather than study a lot of travel books at home which(一定要在前面加逗号,这句话必须是非限定性定语从句,不是可加可不加的那种) may result in misunderstandings as different authors hold differents views.Also, undoubtedly, as a team player, you are not only requested to master the academic knowledge,but also the interpersonal skills which are crucial for your employment opportunities and these techniques have to be studied and managed throughout practices.
On the other hand, some people are likely inclined to expand and deepen their knowledge from books,especially for children and old people.for example,due to the sake of safety, in some schools chlildren under 10 years old are forbidden to go out for excursion, they have to know the colourful insects and various plants from books replacing with observing them carfully in the outskirts.Compared with young people,the old men are less to acquire knowledge on purpose,therefore they prefer to gain the information they need by reading books in a peaceful pace and are reluctant to put themselves into a real active life.Moreover,books are enjoying a wider application to serve as a major media to open people’s minds,as reading
is not necessary to need (不合习惯)a special time and a special place,the increasing number of people(加了the主语不再是people而是number) have formed a good habit to read whenever or wherever they are available . Last but not least, all advanced technologies are written in words before applying them into practice.
In short, from which channel your absorbing the ample and wide knowledge is not important,the key is that you are able to enjoy the process of acquirement,consequently most people consider it childish to seek study for its own sake.(第三段开头有2个,最后一段有2个标点的错,我想是笔误,呵呵,是我鸡婆啦)
([FONT=宋体]最后一句是看了这里的一个帖子说,希腊人认为了娱乐而娱乐是很幼稚的,我COPY[FONT=宋体]了一下,为了学习而学习是幼稚的,还是强调enjoyable,[FONT=宋体]行吗?)
可反复修改,定了再改都行:)OK,谢谢I老师,偶看明白了,看不明白也不敢说,反正犯错误,老师及时纠正就好了
偶提议:最终定稿,在每篇EASSY发表后一个月内,因为要给其他TZ一定的时间来批改,自己也可以在这期间反省,发现不足,及时修改,可以吗?具体多长时间,还请老师定吧.
Last but not least(?), all explicit knowledge about thecutting-edges of sciences and technologies are written in words precisely and formally articulated prior to transfering the research results of sciences and technologies into production.before applying them into practice.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals a book, especially a professional book, teaches us an(a) certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, just by direct experience only can we get is the just point from what we did. For example, even like our education(全去掉), if we learn botany science(明白了) from the text book, we can know from the appearance of plants to the inner fabric; because experts in this period?(俺想写field,咋不知道怎么写成这个了,呵呵,短练) have research(ed) them throughlly. u(U)nfortunately, from our own direct experience maybe we can get just the shallow(或许应该用superficial?) acquaintance because we have not complex no sophisticated (枉我还看了前面这个词的介绍)equipments and advanced researching methods like(这个还迷糊,不懂?) those scientists do to help us get more knowledge.
记得看书上写过,写作文的时候最好别用这些狗皮膏药词汇,什么get,make,之类的贴那儿都成。另外不要只用get一个动词.
彻底晕~,回到我奶奶的阶段了superficial acquaintance 那叫迷信.a superficial acquaintance with Eastern religions
感觉就一个字:fluentUnfortunately, from our own direct observations we can only get some general information, for example, data on the growth trends of the plants, since we have no sophisticated equipments and advanced research methods as scientists do.
记得看书上写过,写作文的时候最好别用这些狗皮膏药词汇,什么get,make,之类的贴那儿都成。
嗯,gain obtain acquire win achieve attain
目标:扩大词汇,不但认识还得会用
那是起步阶段.
斑竹美眉各路大虾:
这个帖子的思路的内容都很好,我给置顶了.
我回帖不多,但每篇都在吃力地看,费劲地学.
谢谢各位!
题目2
"A nation should require all its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college rather than allow schools in different parts of the nation to determine which academic courses to offer."
(红色为已更改处,蓝色表示不解,盼望大家指点)
The speaker that maintains it is more beneficial that all students study the same national curriculum before they go to college than (这还用加什么动词吗)the different courses determined by different schools. Nowadays, I concede that many countries unify(这个词可以吗) the courses in junior and senior schools(有更好的说法吗), whereas I do not consider doing like this is helpful for students and disagree with the statement either. As my point of view, schools in different parts should have rights(忘了复数) to determine which academic courses to offer.
.
嗯,我试试第二段不能用什么I think....这个很弱,你能根据我写的第一段再重写后面吗?
假定你做了一个Research,你是用survey的方法做的研究,采了多少样本,做了什么的questionaire.然后你得出一个什么结论.
各路大虾:
这个帖子的思路的内容都很好,我给置顶了.
我回帖不多,但每篇都在吃力地看,费劲地学.
谢谢各位!
On the one hand, firstly,it has been proved true that developing gaining knowledge from through experience might save a plenty of time. For example, with the help of your拿掉 experienced colleagues ,you may solve (这里要用主语,因为是你从中获得知识)some computer problems related to the office tools may be solved within a few minutes, while you may take longer time in checking with the operation manuals. instead of spending hours on checking the maintenance manuals with the failure in the end(这句话,我觉得要重新来写了. instead of这个介词词组转折得其实很好,但是它可以支配的宾语在语法上只能到manuals为止,但这个句子明显是在语意上是想管到后面and引导的从句.所以这个句子的结构要重新来安排哦.)
In addtion,Secondly(用了FIRSTLY,这里最好用Secondly), learning from actual practical cases is an effective way to widen your horizonknowledge (主题词不要随便换),. fFor example,the best way to get to know a strange foreign country’s culture and traditons is to go there personally rather than to study a lot of various travel books at home., You might have which may result in misunderstandings as different authors hold differents different views.
Also, undoubtedly, as a team player, you are not only requested to master the academic knowledge,but also the interpersonal skills which are crucial for your employment opportunities and these techniques have to be studied and managed throughout practices.
这个例子不恰当,你讲TEAM WORK,和academic knowledge关系不大,和interpersonal skills 有关系,但是是两种东西.
On the other hand, some people, especially children and old people, are likely inclined to expand and deepen obtain (书面语能用一个单词的不用两个或词组) their knowledge from books,especially for children and old people.for example,due to the sake of safety, in some schools, chlildren under age 10 years old are forbidden to go out for excursion, they have have got to know the various colourful insects and various plants from reading books replacing with rather than throughobserving them carfully outside in the outskirts.
现在你写作的框架还可以,但你的问题是组句和用词,以及选恰当的例子.另外连结词也要注意.
可爱的Zz我5点20就起来写你的第二篇题目了
心里总在想,不努力太对不起大家了
现在起来第一件事就是看各位老师的修改
没有人告诉你写长句显示你的水平,除非中国的老师和X东方.
我在MCGILL的老师都是告诉我尽量用简单的句子和词汇把问题说清楚.因为写作的目的首先是让人懂,其次再追求其它方面的东西.
Compared with young people, senior people are less to acquire knowledge on purpose.Therefore they prefer to gain the information by reading books at their own pace. and are reluctant to put themselves into a real active life不懂?
我现在困的要命,头晕乎乎,就是不想睡,整个一亢奋
说老人不太愿意到实际生活中学经验,因为他们PACE慢,宁可自己在家里看书
Moreover,books are enjoying a wider application to serve as a major media to open people’s minds and also reading is regarded as a leisure activity by some people who have formed a reading habit in their spare time.
不懂.books 怎么are enjoying ?不要把不同的东西并列.
Last but not least(?), all explicit knowledge about thecutting-edges of sciences and technologies are written in words precisely and formally articulated prior to transfering the research results of sciences and technologies into production.before applying them into practice.
嗯,早点休息吧 ,下面还有任务批改偶的作业呢
In short, from which channel 因为是结语要重述一下你讲的两个方面your absorbing the ample and wide knowledge is not important,the key is that you are able to enjoy the process of acquirement,
consequently most people consider it childish to seek study for its own sake.
和中文不一样,要用句号.
In conclusion, individuals may take different ways to acquire knowledge, as this essay discussed, either from books or from practical experience. However, most people choose the way to gain knowledge from reading books.
结尾是重述主题.不要找希奇古怪的结尾.和中文不一样.
team work 也需要专业知识,对吗?
interpersonal skills 也是知识,从实践中学的知识是多方面的,是吗?
这个中西方理解不一样skill 和knowledge不一样是两类东西
给你看个广告吧:
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那也是people enjoy reading book....我想说READING BOOKS,现在也是人们的一种消遣娱乐方式了,寓学与乐中,行吗?
引用:
作者: Beijing2008
On the one hand, firstly,it has been proved true that developing gaining knowledge from through experience might save a plenty of time. For example, with the help of your拿掉 experienced colleagues ,you may solve (这里要用主语,因为是你从中获得知识)some computer problems related to the office tools may be solved within a few minutes, while you may take longer time in checking with the operation manuals. instead of spending hours on checking the maintenance manuals with the failure in the end(这句话,我觉得要重新来写了. instead of这个介词词组转折得其实很好,但是它可以支配的宾语在语法上只能到manuals为止,但这个句子明显是在语意上是想管到后面and引导的从句.所以这个句子的结构要重新来安排哦.)
我还是想表达虽然花费很长时间,但最后还是失败了,后面加一个并列:
.....manuals and fail to tackle it in the end.可以吗?
For example, with the help of the experienced colleagues ,you may solve some computer problems related to the office tools within a few minutes, while you may fail to fix them although you take longer time in checking with the operation manuals alone by yourself.
"Books and experience(这两个并列欠考虑) are the two main resources that(必须用which,由后面的from所决定,理由就不用我讲了吧) we can gain knowledge from, but which one can bring(用词欠妥) us the depth of knowledge richer and broader? Maybe someone prefers direct experience, however,(标点问题,不知道以后还要不要继续挑) I will choose books. Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want through looking up in(词组用法错误,要不补宾语,要不换词组/词) books, the sum of experience from people preceding,(和前后的词组都不构成并列的结构关系,需要重写,并且用词也不地道) than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals( 建议此处加上that,文体正式又好断句)a book, especially a professional book, teaches usa certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, just by direct experience only(语意重复,去掉一个或者后移) can we get is the just(用词单调) point from what we did. (以上这句话,从on the contrary开始,发回重写, 中间的主语从句中还缺主语呢.结构混乱哦.) For example, even like our education, if we learn botany science from the text book, we can know from the appearance of plants to the inner fabric; because experts in this period ?have research them throughlly. unfortunately, from our own direct experience maybe we can get just the shallow acquaintance because we have not complex no sophisticated equipments and advanced researching methods like those scientists do to help us get more knowledge.
你写的较好没大错.除了一些大小写标点个别词汇"
大人,我冤啊因为你题目起的就不妥,要说two valid methods of gaining knowledge
就好写多了.请马甲给你把改过的写一下.
嗯,明了你可该成主动..People gain knowledge from the two recources. One is from... the other is from...
Recently the issue whether to provide the identical curriculum for the children in the different areas of the nation(假定是中国吧) prior to their going to the higer education institutions is widely discussed .Some people hold an opinion that receiving the same academic courses is helpful for the students to build up their confidence to compete with peers,but the others disgree with it.My advice is that it is a wise choice for both students and schools to study the same national curriculum.
这么多定冠词讲的是哪?特别是第一句,没有什么THE
To start with,the quality of teching and learning must be always the central to the school.Undoubtedly,there are many imbalance among schools such as staff quality, students resources,financial situations and ectan imbalance of resources and performance among schools.,while how to diminish these differences is a great subject to be faced by the school authorities .One of the solutions may provide the same academic courses,thus teachers from the areas with insufficiency teaching resources are possible to contact the latest study materials & equipments via trainning throughout the country,which is an effective way to improve the teaching quality,as a result,school reputations are enhanced.(这个长句完全是为了长而长)
Overall,the government and school management should take the most of current resources to boost the option of offering the same academic courses in schools, thus the goal of each student may come into truth.
那么以前没统一没一个学生的GOAL come into truth?总的来讲,你写的很好,个别词用的不当,注意冠词用法,但不要为了写长句而写长句.还有象最后一句不是很恰当.
Secondly,current higher education recruitment system which has a universal test every summer for selecting qualified students to enter the colleges and universities contritutes to this request.Nowadays,both schools and parents are under control of ?那就是很适应了?this scheme and have to call for the demand of offering the same curriculum.For example,English language test is compulsory in the recruitment,so even the children from the farest countryside have to take this test,how can they prepare it,if they do not have a chance to touch it,so the supply of the same courses is fair to every child of the natiion. (又是一个人为长句)
Finally,affording the curriculum equally may contributes to other positive outcomes,such as fostering the sense of the competition and cooperation.Admittedlly,with the advent of the era of knowledge-based economy,the ability of competitiveness and the team work spirit badly needed secure the teenagers to have more opportunities to struggle for their future careers.On the basis of the same teaching schedule,peer pressure can be a positive force which can motivate and challenge the students to do their best and with the help of internet, students can discuss and debate with their fellows around the country to reach an agreement in the end,which can help each other a lot to result in the cooperation spirit increased greatly.
这一段是中国特色,中国教育真是个灾难,从小无寻找知识的乐趣而只有生活的压力.
小Z千万别在这样叫我啦,求您啦I 老师好!
EVERYTHING IS UNDER CONTROL就是一切很正常
both schools and parents are subjected to this scheme. 受制于...
如Teenagers are subjected to peer pressure
To start with,the quality of teching and learning must be always the central to the school
Schools focus on teaching quality and learning quality.
affording the curriculum equally may contributes to other positive outcomes,such as fostering the sense of the competition and
有点象法国德国英文.
A (The) national curriculum will make a unique contribution to communications, competitions, and cooperation among students and teachers from different schools and different areas.
起这么早?
回IBT
回213楼的马甲mm
Books and direct experience(不记得在哪本书里读过的了,但是确实记得从书本学的东西被叫作“间接经验”。所以原来题目中的直接经验要搬过来,不可以省去) are the two main resources which we can gain knowledge from, but which one can bring(bring后面可以加us和 depth of knowledge做宾语,但是再也没有能力去管辖宾补了,并且那两个形容词用来形容depth 也不合适,比较简单的改法就是去掉这2个形容词。复杂的话,这句话建议推翻重写。把insight这个词用进去,再写写看?) us the depth of knowledge richer and broader? Maybe someone prefers direct experience. However,(建议回去查一下however在表示转折的时候的词性哦,不要看见别人用两个逗号夹住它就自己学着乱用。它表示转折的时候,在句首要大写。或者前面是分号,则小写,但决不可以是逗号。如果你写I, however, will choose books.就非常好。) I will choose books. Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want from books, which are the sum of experience from people preceding, than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals that a book, especially a professional book, teaches us certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, by direct experience only can we get is the just point from what we did. (----以上这句话,从on the contrary开始,发回重写, 中间的主语从句中还缺主语呢.----我是想用了only 在句首是不是后面就要倒装?----倒装不是问题,问题是can和is两个动词的出现不妥,你自己先试着改改哦,嘿,别偷懒)
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回213楼的马甲mm
Books and direct experience(不记得在哪本书里读过的了,但是确实记得从书本学的东西被叫作“间接经验”。所以原来题目中的直接经验要搬过来,不可以省去) are the two main resources which we can gain knowledge from, but which one can bring(bring后面可以加us和 depth of knowledge做宾语,但是再也没有能力去管辖宾补了,比较简单的改法就是去掉这2个形容词。复杂的话,这句话建议推翻重写。把insight这个词用进去,再写写看?) us the depth of knowledge richer and broader? Maybe someone prefers direct experience. However,(建议回去查一下however在表示转折的时候的词性哦,不要看见别人用两个逗号夹住它就自己学着乱用。它表示转折的时候,在句首要大写。或者前面是分号,则小写,但决不可以是逗号。如果你写I, however, will choose books.就非常好。) I will choose books. Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want from books, which are the sum of experience from people preceding, than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals that a book, especially a professional book, teaches us certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, by direct experience only can we get is the just point from what we did. (----以上这句话,从on the contrary开始,发回重写, 中间的主语从句中还缺主语呢.----我是想用了only 在句首是不是后面就要倒装?----倒装不是问题,问题是can和is两个动词的出现不妥,你自己先试着改改哦,嘿,别偷懒)
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我又写了一遍,但这次这个写法是我从来没试过的,一统胡编乱造
不过是经过查资料做功课才写出来的
呵呵
欢迎大家指正
我怎么越贴越心虚啦,哈哈
不行,壮起鼠胆,
人还是先闪:)
Some research reveals that it is more beneficial for students and schools that state primary and secondary schools should have a national curriculum than the schools set their own curriculums. At the present, many countries such as England, Wales and Northern Ireland have introduced a national curriculum at primary and secondary school level. However, based on my research, a national curriculum has caused some negative impacts on the students and schools. My point is that all schools including both state and independent schools should have their own rights to set their own curriculums.
My survey sample consists of 20 schoolmasters and 50 teachers who are all from primary and secondary schools across England, 50 parents of the pupils studying the national curriculum now, and 10 scientists of education. A total of 126 surveys were returned completely, yielding an overall rate of 97% for the all surveys. The questionnaire focuses on the responder's opinion to the degree of the satisfaction with current national curriculum and the its effect after performed 6 years.
Analysis to the result of surveys shows there is a high degree of consensus (92%) among the responders that it is a disaster waiting to happen, even a mass murder, that only a single authoritative curriculum is studied by over 2 million school students in England. More importantly, the curriculum cannot remain static; because the world is changing with each passing day, accordingly, what people need to know renovate very often. Whether the change of society or the change of the schooling itself, the curriculum should response quickly and correspondingly. A schoolmaster, Howard Johnson, said: “everyone wants to set goals and targets and then succeed them, we, the school also want." Further more, if the school has freedom to choose courses, they can teach students more flexibly. For example the teacher can add the knowledge of geology into history, but not artificially divide them.
In addition, nearly nine in ten (89%) responders say they agree the same national curriculum distort the study experience of students. The aim of education in primary and secondary schools is teaching pupils how to learn and cultivate their interest in learning. Unfortunately, the national curriculum merely emphasizes on the knowledge in the textbook. Teachers find more and more students usually absent from class; even coming they still often are abstracted. Out of question, the humdrum courses should be replaced by something more creative and more challenging. Moreover, because of the dissatisfaction with the same national curriculum, a significant number of the parents preferred their children educated at home; in this case they could assist them arrange the learning plan more personally and more effectively.
In sum, this survey indicates the current national curriculum is not suited to the growing of students in primary and secondary schools. Instead, the school should be given more room to choose courses which inspires, challenges and will help young people to be prepared for the future. Just as Hannah Jones, director of NCSL's SLICT program says: "Education flourishes if it successfully adapts to the demands and needs of the time.
呵呵, 小Zz你看看这段是谁写的:)不认真看贴,打ppSome research reveals that it is more beneficial for(both) students and schools that state primary and secondary schools should have a national curriculum than the schools set their own curriculums. At the present, many countries such as England, Wales and Northern Ireland have introduced a national curriculum at primary and secondary school level. However, based on my research,(providing) a national curriculum has caused some negative impacts on the students and schools. My point is that all schools including both state and independent schools should have their own rights to set their own curriculums.(should be authorized to offer their own academica courses)(题目给了curriculum 和academic
courses 就要替换用对吗?)
呵呵,这个好:)My survey sample (去掉)consists of 20 schoolmasters and 50 teachers who are all from primary and secondary schools across England, 50 parents (families)of the pupils studying the national curriculum now, and 10 scientists of education. A total of 126 surveys were returned completely, yielding an overall rate of 97% for the all surveys. The questionnaire focuses on the responder's opinion to the degree of the satisfaction with current national curriculum and the its effect after performed 6 years.
My point is that all schools including both state and independent schools should have their own rights to set their own curriculums.(should be authorized to offer their own academica courses)(题目给了curriculum 和academic
courses 就要替换用对吗?)
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写得不错哦!
Books and direct experience are the two main resources which we can gain knowledge from, but which one can broaden our sight more? (改的好很多哦!加油!如果是我,我可能会这么写:but which one can help us to have an insight into the knowledge?) Maybe someone prefers direct experience. I, however, will choose books(还是这个感觉好). Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want from books, which are the sum of experience from people preceding, than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals that a book, especially a professional book, teaches us certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, by direct experience the point from what we did is only what we get. on the contrary, from the direct experience, what we did is only what we can get. (如果是我,在不改变你的原意的情况下,我可能会这么写:on the contrary, by direct experience, the only knowledge we can acquire is merely from what we did. )
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写得不错哦!
Books and direct experience are the two main resources which we can gain knowledge from, but which one can broaden our sight more? (改的好很多哦!加油!如果是我,我可能会这么写:but which one can help us to have an insight into the knowledge?) Maybe someone prefers direct experience. I, however, will choose books(还是这个感觉好). Not only in depth but also in breadth can we get more what we want from books, which are the sum of experience from people preceding, than learning from direct experience.
First of all, comparing the difference of the depth we learn from these two ways reveals that a book, especially a professional book, teaches us certain knowledge systemically and from a level to a higher level; on the contrary, by direct experience the point from what we did is only what we get. on the contrary, from the direct experience, what we didis only what we can get. (如果是我,在不改变你的原意的情况下,我可能会这么写:on the contrary, by direct experience, the only knowledge we can acquire is merely from what we did. )
2,survey 的对象是人,但如果consist , 由什么组成的,就不能了吧?1.偶看错了,是家长
2.因为你survey 的不就是人吗?
刚才把以前的作业翻出来,理了一下思路,改了改,现在胆子越来越大了
过几天都敢把小学的作业往上贴了 ,各位老师快出手吧,偶先跑了
题目:some people think it is good for children to be brought up in the city than in the countryside.Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.write at least 250 words
It is said that personal characters result in one’s fate,therefore something always intrigues us how the character is formed?Personally I think that the places in which people grow up will exert a vital impact on shaping one’s characters.
On one hand,the children living in the city are easy (to)approach to advanced technologies and good education which may widen their horizon,thus they will acquire more opportunities for the career in the futuer.Also,the city can provide better health system and schools(感觉这也应该指出是城里的学校?) offer various extra curicculum activities,these help will be conducive to children’s physical and mental health in their formative years.Nevertheless,subject to the furious competitions in big cities,parents spend less time with their kids,(连词?)they let them enjoy PC games and TV programs to keep them quiet,which is definitely not good for children without parents accompanying.
Moreover,under parental laxity and excessive permissiveness(permission?),some children are becoming too proud and arrogant to master interpersonal skills, so it is difficult for them to become a team player.
On the other hand,the children growing up in the countryside are likely to cultivate the sense of independence,for example,they have to learn how to make both(and?) ends meet(给我讲讲这个短语) due to the financial stain.At the same time, the children from rural areas are relatively simple and naive and easy to obtain the content . However,due to the shortage of being well educated, the rival's abilites will be decreased ,therefore it is hard for them to get higher positions offered.
In short, adimittedly the growth environment is one of the most import factors for man’s success, however,how far he can go depends on his efforts in the future.
开题讲人的性格的形成和地域有关,而最后一段讲成长环境对人将来是否成功有影响.风马牛了!
becoming too proud and arrogant to master
这里我认为proud and arrogant 重复了,用其中一个单词就行了.
其实题目是
some people think it is good for children to be brought up in the city than in the countryside.Do you agree or disagree with this opinion
所以你不必上来就限定在how the character is formed?
放开写GOOD or not good就更好写了.
只是个人意见,你们不要太迷信我,我很多时候也搞不定的!
On the other hand,the children growing up in the countryside are likely to cultivate thea sense of independence,for example,they have to learn how to make both ends?(这里不明白指什么?) meet due to the financial stainstrain?.
是想表达,乡村出来的孩子因为财政状况不好,必须学会量入为出"make both ends meet" 是以前学的一固定搭配,就是"收支平衡"的意思,不知道对不对?
financial strain
是想表达,乡村出来的孩子因为财政状况不好,必须学会量入为出"make both ends meet" 是以前学的一固定搭配,就是"收支平衡"的意思,不知道对不对?
financial strain
[Q] From Robert Priddy, Norway: “Is the origin of the expression to make ends meet known?”
[A] Not really. It’s old enough that it has centuries ago become an idiom, a turn of phrase that we don’t usually stop to think about at all, though we understand immediately that to make ends meet is to have enough money to live on. The oldest example I can find is from Thomas Fuller’s The History of the Worthies of England of about 1661: “Worldly wealth he cared not for, desiring only to make both ends meet; and as for that little that lapped over he gave it to pious uses”, but the fact that Fuller is making a little joke using it suggests he already knew of it as a set phrase.
Where it comes from is hard to be sure about. It’s often said that it’s from bookkeeping, in which the total at the bottom (“end”) of the column of income must at least match that at the bottom of the expenditure column if one is not to be living beyond one’s income (think of Mr Micawber’s advice to the young David Copperfield). The phrase is also known in the form to make both ends of the year meet, which might strengthen that connection if we think of the usual end-of-year accounting, except that that form isn’t the original one and wasn’t recorded until Tobias Smollett used it in Roderick Random in 1748.
Several subscribers have told me that their understanding of the phrase was that it came from tailoring or dressmaking, in which the amount of cloth available might only just be sufficient to allow the garment to wrap completely around the body and so make the ends meet. Thomas Fuller implies something of the sort in the quotation above. A subscriber whom I know only as Ludwik says there is a similar saying in Polish, zwiazac koniec z koncem (“to tie up one end with the other”); it evokes the image of a belt or similar item that likewise one had to hope would be long enough for its purpose. It suggests the phrase may contain a similar idea to another idiom, to have enough to go round, which comes from the hope that one has enough food for everyone at table. It might be that language writers have taken the associations of the phrase with money too literally in arguing that it’s connected with bookkeeping.
其实题目是
some people think it is good for children to be brought up in the city than in the countryside.Do you agree or disagree with this opinion
所以你不必上来就限定在how the character is formed?
放开写GOOD or not good就更好写了.
我是不敢在这写了,但是真好看,认真学习
等有时间,给所有这贴子的老师加SW
呵呵呵呵
多谢zz的点评,呵呵
匆匆忙忙写的,还没看呢
我的冠词一向用得很混乱,
不过那个里面的the city是和the countryside对应的
than要比较的是相同的成分,不过如果加that of也不太合适吧,我不知道直接使用介词结构的比较是不是可以
其他的我再看看阿
多谢
今天在guardian上看到中国大学考试是Chinese university entrance examination,偶以前自己造的是 higer education recruitment system ,综合各位老师的意见 ,重新修改了关于是否提供统一课程的那篇,力争做到简洁明了
请各位老师批评指正
Recently the issue whether to provide identical curriculum for children in different areas of the nation prior to their going to universities and colleges is widely discussed .
Some people hold an opinion that receiving the same academic courses is helpful for students to build up their confidence to compete with their? peers,but others disagree with it.In my point of view,it is a wise choice for both students and schools to be involved in the same national curriculum.
To begin with,schools always focus on the quality of teaching and learning.However,there is an imbalance of resources and performance among them, how to diminish these differences is a great subject(主题吗?不知道这个词是不是需要斟酌?) to be faced by school authorities .One of the solutions may be to offer the same national curriculum ,thus teachers from poor areas with the limited teaching resources have access to the latest study materials and reference books as well as to taking part in the same trainning programms with others,which(指programms吧) have been proved the effective ways to improve the teaching quality,and schools' reputations have been(will be ?) enhanced as a result.
Secondly,current Chinese university entrance examination which is held every summer leads to this demand,the example (这两句之间有什么关联词没?)for this demand is that English language test,one of compulsory testing subjects in the examination,even for the children from mountainouse areas, has to be taken ,however the question is how they can prepare it,if they have not English lessons in schools,so only can the same academic courses arrangement in different areas of the nation meets with this demand.
Finally,providing the same academic courses is beneficial to forster( foster?)the sense of competition and cooperation among peers .Admittedlly,with the rapid development of economy ,the ability of competitiveness(competition?) and spirit of team work secure the teenagers to struggle for their bright future.Based on the same teaching materials,the peer pressure is regarded as a positive force which can motivate and challenge the students to do their best,also,with the help of internet, students discuss and debate with their fellows to deal with courses problems in order to reach an agreement in the end,such activities help students to learn how to cooperate with others,which plays an undoubted part throughout life.(throughout their lives?不知道需不需要)
Overall,school authorities should take into account this issue carefully and do their best to boost the option (?)of the same national curriculum offered in different parts of the nation,which enables each child to be treated equally.
满足需求,直接就可以说meet this demand吧Secondly,current Chinese university entrance examination which is held every summer leads to this demand,the example (这两句之间有什么关联词没?)for this demand is that English language test,one of compulsory testing subjects in the examination,even for the children from mountainouse areas, has to be taken ,however the question is how they can prepare it,if they have not English lessons in schools,so only can the same academic courses arrangement in different areas of the nation meets with this demand.
1.....this demand.For example,English language test is one of compulsory testing subjects for students including the children from mountainouse areas. rignt?
2.meet with 不是固定搭配满足的意思吗?
我觉得写得非常好啊为了让08回来和各位老师不失望,在原来作业的基础上偶又"炮制"了两篇
,有才老师快来
题目:
People in the modern world are enjoying greater wealth but they are not as fit and active as they were in the past.
What are the reasons? Suggest some measures to solve this problem
It is safe to say that people are becoming less fit and active at moment, which is to do with changes in the way we live our lives,now I woud like to describe some factores related to this inactivity and measures which would reverse this imbalance.The soar of private cars contributes to reducing uses of public transportation because you can drive a car between office and home rather than walk to the bus station to take a bus.Meanwhile you are used to drive a car to the supermarket,just a few minutes walk away from home. In addition, jobs have become more sedentary,telephone,fax machine could be set nearby with the touch(one arm ?) distance if you like,let along the computer which always clings to you all the time.Also, there is more entertainment that is basically sitting inside,for example,downloading the latest films and favorite music in Internet is becoming a popular pastime not noly among teengers but also among adults at expenses of outdoor activities. However,the potato coach tendency will result in the rising obesity, diabetes and heart diseases,the cost for treatment of these disease will goes up as a result for individuals.
Changes to the environment need to be tackled, such as the provision of more and better swimming pools and other sports facilities ,more physical activities held by communities ,especailly family events are welcome,which are conducive to form a good habit of doing exercises for children.Moreover,all adults should aim to take 30 minutes of moderate physical activity on five days a week at least. It can be enjoyable, cheap and easy to fit into everyday life. Walking, swimming and jogging are great examples. Finally,ballroom dancing offer both an activity and the possibility of socialising for people on a regular basis.
In conclusion, some people would like to find an excuse for inactivity,but if they can devote more time to(这个好) sport than to computer games or other Internet entertainment,they will be becoming more healthy and happy.
真的,我真跳不出啊,再挑就是鸡蛋里的骨头了,难啊
要不夜宵就来点这个,呵呵
对了,想起来啦,俺不会说法语,一丁点也不会,呵呵
都说法语是最美丽的语言,可俺听着,恩,怪难听的
hoho
这就是阳春白雪和下里巴人吧
亲爱的Zz , 我现在才看到你刚刚给我写的话,刚刚都一直沉浸在歌里了,嗬嗬,好久没这样听歌了
看了你写的话,我也很感慨
是啊
我们大家一起努力,这个帖子竟然这么多页了
尤其到后来尽是你在坚持,真的想想这些心里都很感动
英语版的每个人,或许还有很多来看过但没有留下痕迹得大家
希望每个人都在贴子里找到了自己想要的
或者在我们不断的改改写写中,多多少少有些许收获吧
但是现在08走了,不知道什么时候还会再来
尽管告诉自己还要写但却觉得很难
其实仔细想想支撑这个贴子的应该是这位难得的老师吧
今天有时间,把作文写了,呵呵
算是对自己有个交待,要不然总是拖拖拉拉的
感觉论据不充分,
好像前后还算一致,反正就是说什么都要在countryside长大
It is no doubt that parents always have the anxiety to create a better living environment for their offspring. However, the agreement, whether living in the city is much more beneficial than in the countryside for children’s growth, has far from been reached. Given the chance to return to the childhood, I would make the choice to be brought up in the countryside rather than in the city.
First of all, living in the countryside gives children more chances to be close to the nature. I believe the nature is the best teacher for a child, and children’s curiosity and desire for knowledge may be arose by catching sight of the variety of natural creatures. Seeing the bird flying in the sky, the butterfly standing in a flower, or a daisy swinging in the wind, children may be curious and turn to parents or books to find the answer(to what??). The precious first-hand experiences could be gained in the childhood, which are helpful to form their commonsense.
Another reason is that children will have the character of openness and braveness when living in the countryside. The wild field provides a wider playground for children, and they would play games, and do other interesting things. In the playing, children have to learn how to get well along with other partners without the help from the mature. Meanwhile, they will be brave enough to overcome the difficulties, sometimes a river or a hillside. With these features, I think they can do better for the coming problems.
I prefer living in the countryside to enjoy a close to nature life and the time with other children running in the wild. Although someone would list the advantages of living in the city, such as a high-level studying condition and other advanced man-made tools, living in the countryside is more attractive and beneficial for a child(绝对化). Please give me a chance to enjoy the nature and have a free childhood.(这文章又不是写给上帝他老人家的,呵呵,结尾再换个写法是不是更好?)
因为急着要出门,抱歉只大略读了一下竹林的这篇文章,标记了几个地方.没时间给出修改建议.竹林也自己再想想看,我会再来读这文章的.希望到时候我们交流一下下.
一篇好的文章,往往至少要在以下几个方面出色: 1.content. 2.organization. 3.diction. 4.sentence structures and varieties.
NN的这篇文章,尤其要注意的是句子的结构. 长句驾御得不好,就不如短句了. 再从全文的结构来看,大体的框架是没有问题的. 就像要求的那样,写现象、原因和解决方法就好了. 但是千万注意不要手懒, 该分段的时候要分段,不要把前两部分写在一起.感觉很混乱. 坏了全文的结构.
再看内容,原因分析的部分.大体是写了私家车增加、工作方式的改变、电脑的使用和室内娱乐几点. 这几个原因写得彼此之间杂糅和交叉比较严重(尤其是2. 3. 4) .在内容上, 一点连着另一点,仿佛是在写一个例子又仿佛是写了几个例子. 建议再想想别的原因,或者重新写写这几个原因.一方面清晰,一方面也增加你文章的说服力.
再看最后一段. 明明前面写了好多的原因,结果在这里却只提了电脑\因特网这一个原因.这使得你的最后一段和全文失去了呼应. 必须要改.
说这么多NN的文章的问题,其实NN的文章是写得很不错的,优点很多! 夸她的话俺就先不写了吧? 俺总觉得夸自己的朋友是很肉麻的事情.
[/quote]真心敬佩勤奋的NN. 呵呵,俺又来捣乱啦----来掐一把!
题目:
People in the modern world are enjoying greater wealth but they are not as fit and active as they were in the past.
What are the reasons? Suggest some measures to solve this problem
It is safe to say that people are becoming less fit and active at moment(词组使用错误), which( 肯定代替的不是前面moment 这个词,但是如果代前面一句话的话,就逻辑混乱了,究竟代的是主句还是从句呢,晕哦) is to do with changes in the way we live our lives,now I woud like to describe some factores related to this inactivity and some measures which would reverse this imbalance.
Nowadays people are becoming less fit and active,which is to do with changes of our lifestyles.The followings I would like to discuss some reasons linked to physical inactivity rise and measures that would reverse this imbalance.
(第一段改动很大)
The soar of private cars contributes to reducing uses of public transportation because you can drive a car between office and home rather than walk to the bus station to take a bus.Meanwhile you are used to drive a car to the supermarket,just a few minutes walk away from home.
The soar of private cars contributes to reducing uses of public transportation because you can drive a car between office and home rather than walk to the bus station to take a bus.Meanwhile you are used to drive(driving) a car to the supermarket,just a few minutes walk away from home.
In addition, jobs have become more sedentary, (逗号连句子,NN这个问题你要多多注意哦,不是一次了哦)telephone,fax machine could be set nearby with the touch(one arm ?) distance if you like,let along the computer which always clings to you all the time.Also, there is more entertainment that is basically sitting inside,for example,(前后两句话分别都有谓语,不能这么点标点的哦)downloading the latest films and favorite music in Internet is becoming a popular pastime not noly among teengers but also among adults at expenses of outdoor activities.
In addition, jobs have become more sedentary,(.) ([FONT=宋体]逗号连句子[/FONT],NN[FONT=宋体]这个问题你要多多注意哦[/FONT],[FONT=宋体]不是一次了哦[/FONT])(T)telephone,fax machine could be set nearby with the touch(one arm ?) distance if you like,let along the computer which always clings to you all the time(you are sitting in front of to deal with daily work all the time).Also, there is(?) more entertainment that is basically sitting inside,(.)(F)for example,([FONT=宋体]前后两句话分别都有谓语[/FONT],[FONT=宋体]不能这么点标点的哦[/FONT])downloading the latest films and favorite music in Internet is(are )becoming a([FONT=宋体]前面用[/FONT]are [FONT=宋体]这里就不能用[/FONT]a [FONT=宋体]了?去掉?[/FONT]) popular pastime not noly (only)among teengers but also among adults at expenses of outdoor activities.
is 为啥不行?
However,the potato coach tendency will result in the rising obesity, diabetes and heart diseases , () the cost for treatment of these disease will goes up as a result for individuals.
treatment of these diseases will goes up(will be increased) as a result for individuals.
Obviously,the potato coach (decline of activity)tendency will result in the rising (of)obesity, diabetes and heart diseases ,(.) ()(T) the cost for
Changes to the environment need to be tackled,(词不达意哦,建议考虑一下重写) such as the provision of more and better swimming pools and other sports facilities ,more physical activities held by communities ,especailly family events are welcome,(和前面的几个名词性成分不并列,和前面的那个完整的句子逻辑混乱,又接个定语从句,乱)which are conducive to form a good habit of doing exercises for children.Moreover,all adults should aim to take 30 minutes of moderate physical activity on five days a week at least. It can be enjoyable, cheap and easy to fit into everyday life. Walking, swimming and jogging are great examples. Finally,ballroom dancing offerboth an activity and the possibility of socialising for people on a regular basis.
Changes to the environment need to be tackled,([FONT=宋体]词不达意哦[/FONT],[FONT=宋体]建议考虑一下重写[/FONT]) Wherease these above mentioned diseases could have been avoided if people enjoyed a more active lifestyle.The government and local community should make this a much higher profile issue[FONT=宋体],[/FONT]such as the provision of more and better swimming pools and other sports facilities ,more physical activities,especially family events held by communities ,especailly family events are welcome,([FONT=宋体]和前面的几个名词性成分不并列[/FONT],[FONT=宋体]和前面的那个完整的句子逻辑混乱[/FONT],[FONT=宋体]又接个定语从句[/FONT],[FONT=宋体]乱[/FONT])which are conducive to form a good habit of doing exercises for children.Moreover,all adults should aim to take 30 minutes of moderate physical activity on five days a week at least. It can be enjoyable, cheap and easy to fit into everyday life. Walking, swimming and jogging are great examples. Finally,ballroom dancing offer(offers)both an activity and the possibility of socialising for people on a regular basis.
In conclusion, some people would like to find a excuse for inactivity,but if they can devote more time to sport than to computer games or other Internet entertainment,they will be becoming more healthy and happy.
时装和名牌不是一回事,我觉得FASHION主要是和传统比.
谢谢08老师,老师留作业的时候说这个题目太大了,因为当时要求写250字左右,就说,你们就从时装来写对时尚的认识 ,08老师从这方面你帮偶看看
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Undoubtedly( ,?)independence shall contribute a lot to their success in job market.
Undoubtedly,后面要不要加,谢谢!
这个是要加的.像什么fortunately,unfortunately之类的,这样统摄全句的副词提前是要加逗号的.
我上面说的是连接句子的几种情况----句间问题. 至于句中逗号,原则就是看某个词是否是在它本来的位置,如果被移位了,往往要有逗号标记. 还有别的情况,由于句中逗号出错的概率要低一些,我没特意思考过规律哦.
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