第一编 写作常用句型

一、原因结构句型


1. There are for the in…



2. There are several reasons for my



3. Why … ? Finally / Perhaps the



is…


4. The for … are .




5. A number of factors could the .




6. Another is…




7. … also the .


8. the is…




9. Among the most by people for…, one should be




10. The in…



11. One may the back to…




12. One may trace the back to…



13. … is not



14. But it doesn’t the why… / of…



15. You may …, But the for the go far deeper.


16. The fault is with who…


17. Factor / We may look into every / The leading cause except the real one.


18. It is no to the reason for this


which involves many / several factors

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二、描写图表句型


1. the ...




2. The that…


3. From the given in the , we can that…




4. The of … ,


of last year.


5. The , compared with…




6. The is of 1990.




7. The was X percent, than of the 1998 total.





8. By comparison with 1990, it






9. It has


10. It accounts for 15 percent of the total.



11. By 1998,





12. A has B



13. A has the same of as…





14. … there





in .





15. The number of…





16. There March,







17. that is the rate in history.



18. The remained




19. The reached

20. The figure 90 percent, the highest level ever recorded since 1960

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三、分析结构句型
1. First, … Second … Worse still…


2. It may a of problems




3. It will on …



4. It may a in…




5. This will some consequences




6. There are a number of …




7. The has not been to …



8. The result it …


9. Just if …



10. show(s) that …


11. is …

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四、比较结构句型

1. Personally, I’m …



2. is that…



3. both and



4. The advantages of B A



5. The effect of is heightened by another advantage B enjoys




6. A’s advantages when B’s advantages are



7. When the advantages and disadvantages of … are carefully compared, the most striking

is



8. Although A with B in … a/the advantage of…, it can’t compete…

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五、评论文的结构句型

1. Whether it has more advantages one thing is certain: …



2. The great with the is that …



3. … that …



4. You may that…, but…



5. There is no that…



6. A good is…


7. I doubt whether the argument bear .



8. to I argue…




9. Although the is that …,



A that…


10. Although there is a tendency to think that…

11. They may be right about…, but they seem to fail to



12. as are these arguments, they appear

when… is taken into consideration account.

13. The with the is…



14. There is an element of truth in the but they ignore a deeper and more

fact/reason that…


15. What these people fail to understand is that…
Take…for example,
For example, …
Suppose that…

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六、常用于开头的句型：
1.对立法：
When asked about…, most people say
When it comes to…, some people think
There is a public debate today
Now, it is widely believed
Many of us believe that
To the general public
Now a lot of people feel
In reaction to the idea, some people say
… is a common way of…, but is it a wise one
these days we often hear about
we are often shown these days
2.现象法：
Recently the phenomenon has aroused wide concern
Recently the problem has been brought into focus
Many nations have been faced with the problem
One of the searching questions facing our world is
One of the biggest issues many people talk about is
Now most dangerous for our society is
Inflation is another bitter truth we have to face now
An acute shortage of…is now under way
Here and there across the country
Now in many big cities
With the rapid development of
Nowadays there is a growing tendency
In recent few years there is a sudden increase
Any visitor to this city would be surprised
Whenever you see…, you cannot help

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3.观点法：
Nothing is more dangerous than
Nowhere in history has the issue been more visible
It is time we exploded the myth
Perhaps we should rethink the idea
Now people are beginning to realize
Now there is a growing awareness
We might marvel at the progress
4.引用法：
One of the great early writers said
“Knowledge is power.” Such is the remark of
“…” That’s how one official complained
“…” The same idea is voiced by
“…” How often we hear such words like those
5.比较法：
For years it had been viewed as…But now
People used to think… But things are different
Several years ago, people…Now
After a good many years of efforts…, people begin
It is a traditional way to… But now the pendulum
Throughout our lives
In recent years, there is a steady shift
6.故事法：
Last Sunday I… The story is not rare
Once in a street, … The problem has drawn public attention
I have a friend who…Such a dilemma we often meet
Once upon a time…The story still has a realistic significance
A factory worker who…
7.问题法：
Should…? Opinions vary greatly
What do you think…?
Why…? Many people pose the question like this
Why?… of all the complaints

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七、常用于结尾的句型：
1.结论性：
From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion
The evidence upon all sides points to
In summary, it is important
In conclusion, I would like to say
The real lesson to be learnt
2.后果性：
We must search for a quick action, because if
Obviously, if we ignore the problem, it is likely
Any person who ignores the warning would
We need to take a second look at…, otherwise
3.号召性：
It might be time to take the warning
It is time that we urged an end to
It is necessary that steps should be taken
There is no doubt that attention must be paid
Obviously…If we are to…, it is essential
4.建议性：
It is hoped that efforts be made
In short, we should
What we need is
It is high time… Here are a few examples
While it cannot be solved immediately, still there are ways
Awareness of the problem is the first step
If we are to succeed as a people

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5.方向性：
Many solutions are being offered here
There is no easy method, but…might be helpful
No easy method is at hand, but…might be the first step
One’s first reaction to such suggestions
What will happen to…? One thing is certain
To…is not an easy job, and it requires a different outlook
It is clear that the task demands great efforts
We have done…But we will achieve more if
True, there may be questions we can not answer
The great challenge today is
We may have a long way to go before
There is no better time to start than
It remains to be seen whether
6.意义性：
Following these methods may not.., but the pay-off might be worth the effort
Certainly,…but it will
The importance cannot be overemphasized
Anyhow it has a far-reaching influence
To participate in…is an experience…
The problem is something no one can avoid
We are now entering a new era which calls for
Anyhow, whether it is good or not, one thing is certain
7.引言性：
“….”
Edison is right in saying
A long time ago, a great man said
…, says a great man
If we want to achieve our success
I agree with the writer
As Lincoln once remarked
8.提问性：
if we consider…, is it
Can anyone really doubt
9.故事性：
Years ago, I heard a story

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八、原因结果句型：
1.基本原因：
There are many reasons for
Why…? For one thing
It is no easy job to advance the reasons
It is fairly easy to identify the reason
The answer to this problem involves many factors
The reasons are varied. They include
Thanks to
The increase mainly stems from the fact
…partly because…, partly because
…not because…, but because
…not come from…, but from
One may attribute the change to
One tends to view the trend as a response to
One may trace this problem back to
That’s the reason why
A number of factors could account for the success
A number of factors, both individual and social, affect
These factors, coupled with the growth of…, lead to
Many factors weigh heavily for
The factors that contribute to…include
2.另一原因：
Among the most important reasons cited by people is
One of the most popular reasons is
Part of the explanation is
This is due to several factors
Another important reason is
Also playing a part is
…is also responsible for the change
of course, the growth is not the sole reason for
some people suggest that the fault is…
we may look into every possible reason except
it is only the surface explanation for
we may blame…, but the causes go far deeper

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3.后果影响
There are a number of effects
The effects is evident
It will exert a profound influence
It may cause a sweeping change
The influence has not been confined to
It leaves some serious consequences
It may give rise to a host of problems
The immediate result it produces is
…is the net result

九、比较对照句型

1.两者比较：
The advantages far outweigh the disadvantages
Although A enjoys a distinct advantage
There are several advantages
The effect of comparison is heightened by
When the advantages and disadvantages are weighed
A means nothing when…is mentioned
Indeed, A carries much weight when compared with
Serious as the problem may be, it pales into insignificance
A may be…but it suffers from the disadvantages
For all the disadvantages, it has its compensating advantages
Obviously, it has both negative effects and positive effects
There are advantages and disadvantages
Like anything else, it has its faults
However, it is not without weaknesses
But is it all good? when considering the drawbacks
Nothing can equal
Nothing is more…than
…more… than is possible to
…more…than would
…is more…than

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2.两者相同：
A is not…any more than
A is no less. Than B is
Just as A…, so B
The same is true of
Like…
A is as much as B
A and B have several things in common
A bears some resemblances to B
A…B…
A…So/Nor is B
… is like…
3.两者不同：
While on the one hand
A…, whereas B
A and B differ in several ways
Both…, but they differ in
What A views…, B may see
But the same cannot be applied to
In the past, …But now it is no longer

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十、批评驳斥句型：
1.直接驳斥：
Although…, I doubt whether the argument bears much analysis
Although the popular belief is…, a study indicates
Although the inclination is laudable, one may wonder
Although it is widely felt…, it is unlikely
Many people…, but this claim may be doubted
Most of us have been under the illusion
People tend to think… .There is no more reason to believe… than there is to think that
They may be right in asserting
In all the debate over…, one fact is overlooked
It is true…, but one point is being left out
It is true that…, but this is not to say
You may say… . It probably will
Some people suggest… . But what these people fail to understand is
Some people say… . But this doesn’t hold
There is an element of truth…, but
A close examination would reveal how
Closer scrutiny shows the claim may not be merited by
At first thought, it may seem…, but one second thoughts
Logical as these arguments
For all the claim, it is a common knowledge
As opposed to…, facts challenge the opinion
It is a common belief
We have been brought up to believe
People tend to cling to the idea
They argue that…, and that
Some people argue that… . But the opposite is usually the case
Some people assume that… . Quite the contrary
There are those who hold that… . And on the other hand, …
People object to the idea
2.批评分析：
To claim that… is far from being proved
To suggest…is exactly as if you
Such proposals are an assault on the value
If one advocates…, it is no good being disturbed
It makes no sense to argue for…, but object to
Them main problem with this view is
The obvious flaw in the idea is
Too much emphasis placed on…may overlook
In many cases, public dissatisfaction is unfair
What a foolish idea
The absurdity is obvious here
It is wrong to think
It is ironic that
It would be absurd to believe
There is no reason to believe
But the argument simply doesn’t hold
an opinion desirable but short-sighted
The statement rests on the assumption
It is a good thing to… . But is it
They are not wrong to put emphasis on…, but
It is all very well to criticize…, but
It is generally believed that
It is wise… . But it is probably less wise
It would be reasonable… . Yet I’m not so sure
It is one thing to insist…, it is quite another

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十一、推理分析句型：
1.分析判断：
It seems quite likely
There is every chance that
It is clear that
It seems natural
It is more accurate to say
It is pretty certain
Fortunately it is often the case
It is urgently necessary to note
It is…that really matters
What surprises us most is
It is horrifying to find
There is no denying
The plain fact is that
The problem is that
No wonder that
It should come as a surprise to learn
Perhaps it is rightly said that
Of course, it would be an error to suggest
On the face of it, it sounds ridiculous. Yet it is true
We may find much to be said for
We can…, but we may never
… is measured more by…than by
To do…is not…, but rather
It does not…but
Historically, our society has taken a dim view of
In fact, … is not the bad thing it is often held to be
This is not to say that… That would be silly
Don’t get the idea that
Little is said about
Along with the awareness…comes
It is not that I don’t wish
…, so the arguments go
there are three kinds
2.推理论说：
If this is the case, we may
This may be true if
If…, it is simply because
If…, why shall we
Moreover, if
If half the money were spent on
Having recognized…, it follows
Of course, if you… . But as soon as
But even if it could be proved
… would be of little use unless
… may be difficult, if not impossible
No amount of indignation can
Even a minor improvement can
The smallest change can
Anyone with the least knowledge can tell
A little study of…can help
Who is to say if
It is almost impossible… without
Hardly anyone… without
You can’t… without
It doesn’t matter whether
No matter how
Whatever the causes
However urgent the need
The more…; the more
… never… let alone

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十二、细节支持句型：
1.举例说明：
… is often cited as an example
A good case in point is
The most dramatic example
This offers a typical example
To the familiar facts, another may be added
As an illustration, we may take
History is filled with the examples
…, for one
Consider the case of
Take, for example
I recall from my childhood
What shall we say, for example
But consider, for example,
A very similar story can be told
Such examples might be given indefinitely
I can think of no better illustration than
The case is only one example
Suppose that
Legend has it that
Let us suppose that
Just think of
Just imagine what would be like if
There is hardly a man
It is a rare man who

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2.事实证明：
No one can deny the fact
We must face the fact
This brings out a fact
Yet it can’t change the fact
There is no justification for
The idea is hardly supported by facts
There is strong evidence that
All reliable data justify the view
Personal experience teaches me
Recent studies indicate
Tests have found that
According to an experiment
We have whole history to tell
Evidence is piling up that
Unortunately, none of the available data shows
As evidenced in the reports
While it may be true, the evidence suggests
Although…, the available information shows
Nothing could be more obvious than the evidence
You don’t have to look very far to find out the truth
No one is comfortable with the fact
This has proved to be the case
But the most surprising thing is
The most striking fact
There are instances when
Gone are the days when
One may not forget the old days
3.引用权威：
Wrote Edison, a great inventor
Many years ago, a writer remarked
As one scientist wrote
A noted teacher once told me
Many researchers find
4.数据引用：
… increased/decreased by X percent
… rose/dropped almost twice, compared with
A report estimates that the number is half the national average
… the number has more than doubled, as against
… the percentage was… X percent more than the 1990 level
More than three-quarters people preferred
There were a X percent decline this year, a drop of X percentage point from
The rate has reached an average of X percent
It accounts for X percent of the total
After leveling off for 3 years, the rate starts rising once again

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十三、承上启下句型：
1.承上阐述：
To understand the truth of…, it is important to see
To get a sense of how…, we must turn first to
To illustrate this point, let us consider
A study of… will make this point clear
But you may ask
But if
2.深入阐述：
But that’s only part of the story
Another equally important aspect is
Closely connected with this is
… may further be supported by
… is but one of many effects. Another is
Besides, other ways are
Moreover
… is also harmful
So does…
No less important
Not only…but also
3.反面阐述：
Despite the difficulty
On the other hand,
However…
Rather than
But the opposite is usually true

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第二编 写作常见语言错误

I.词法错误

A. Article 冠词
a. The machines could not run and people would have to fall back on their hands to produce what are essential for them to keep alive.
b. Machines could not run and people would have to fall back on their hands to produce what are essential for them to keep alive.
a. Pollution is the biggest problem of the cities.
b. Pollution is the biggest problem of the cities.
a. The housing problem in big cities is rather a headache to both government and people.
b. The housing problem in big cities is rather a headache to both the government and people.
a. Bicycle is the most common means of transport in our country.
b. The bicycle/A bicycle is the most common means of transport in our country.
a. On the contrary, the percentages of milk and meat are on a rise.
b. On the contrary, the percentages of milk and meat are on the rise.
a. We can’t avoid being beaten by the others.
b. We can’t avoid being beaten by others.
a. And once the artificial-intelligent robots were put into use, what would these clever “people” do to their producers?
b. And once robots with artificial-intelligence were put into use, what would these clever “people” do to their producers?
a. For an example, with the wide adoption of the automatic working apparatuses, more and more people will lose their jobs in the future.
b. For example, with the wide adoption of the automatic working apparatuses, more and more people will lose their jobs in the future.
a. Almost everyday I open TV at 6:30 p.m. and wait for the news program.
b. Almost everyday I turn on the TV at 6:30 p.m. and wait for the news program.
a. Then, during the second part, we’re showed some pictures of the foreign customs.
b. Then, during the second part, we’re showed some pictures of foreign places and customs.
a. My favourite programme is called “The Animal World”, which is provided by CCTV every Sunday night.
b. My favourite programme is called “Animal World”, which is provided by CCTV every Sunday night.
a. It provides us with natural scenes and the life of all kinds of wild animals, with the explanation by the narrator.
b. It provides us with views of natural scenes and a look of the life style of all kinds of wild animals, with an explanation by the narrator.
a. Not only do the leaders of the countries visit the foreign countries, but also the common people visit abroad.
b. Not only do the leaders of countries often visit the foreign countries, but also the common people visit abroad.
a. I think they are the questions of great interest.
b. I think they are questions of great interest.
a. In short, the bad ads can be classified into two categories. One category has the bad purpose. The advertisers want to sell cigarettes, drinks, guns and so on. ...The other category of bad ads are those in which the advertiser use violence and sex to promote their sales.
b. Generally speaking, the bad ads can be classified into two categories. One category has a bad purpose. The advertisers want to sell things like cigarettes, alcohol, and guns. ...The other category of bad ads are those in which the advertiser use violence and sex to promote their sales.
a. This seems to be on fashion now.
b. This seems to be in fashion now.
a. And also, they treat the firecrackers as the heritage of the Chinese culture.
b. And also, they treat firecrackers as the heritage of the Chinese culture.
a. Finally we can teach ourselves and learn the new knowledge.
b. Finally we can teach ourselves and learn new knowledge.
a. Higher English level will help you to find a satisfactory job in the future.
b. A higher English level will help you to find a satisfactory job in the future.
a. Some students whose major is chemistry, math or physics and so on would think that when they graduate from the college they’ll not apply English any more.
b. Some students with majors like chemistry, math or physics would think that when they graduate from college they’ll not use English any more.
a. Such opinion leads to surprising waste of water.
b. Such an opinion leads to a shocking waste of water.
a. And wide spread of education is also a good reaso

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b. And the wide spread of education is also a good reason.
a. The given graph tells us the changes of life expectancy and infant mortality of the developing countries in 1960 and 1990.
b. The given graph tells us the changes of life expectancy and infant mortality in the developing countries in 1960 and 1990.
a. There are other countless examples. All in all, we must keep the proverb in mind for lifetimePractice makes perfect.
b. There are other countless examples. In a word, we must keep the proverb in mind for a lifetimePractice makes perfect.
a. Community services as well as mass media are both golden chances to practice our ability, through which we can learn to cooperate with people, to contribute our intelligence to the society.
b. Community services is a golden chance to use our ability, through which we can learn to cooperate with people and contribute our intelligence to society.
a. I don’t think numbers have anything to do with the luck.
b. I don’t think numbers have anything to do with luck.

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B. Nouns 名词
1.可数名词
a. Even a lot of entertainment such as TV, recording and films need electricity.
b. Even a lot of entertainment such as TV, recordings and films need electricity.
a. People who suggested this said that one cause of the heavy traffic is traffic accident.
b. People who suggested this said that one cause of the heavy traffic is traffic accidents.
a. Two solutions have been recommended so far, and each one has both advantage and disadvantage.
b. Two solutions have been recommended so far, and each one has both advantages and disadvantages.
a. Man has lived in this world for thousands of years. They fight against nature from time to time and they survive.
b. Human beings have lived in this world for thousands of years. They have fought against nature from time to time and they have survived.
a. As long as we don’t give up and believe in ourselves, and in the meantime learn something from failure, we’ll certainly make our marks in the end.
b. As long as we don’t give up keeping believing in ourselves, and in the meantime learn something from failure, we’ll certainly make our mark in the end.
a. With money we can travel widely and have more experience.
b. With money we can travel widely and have more experiences.
a. What money will ring you depends on your personal belief and goal in life.
b. What money will ring you depends on your personal beliefs and goals in life.
a. During this process, job interview has arisen and appeared more and more important.
b. During this process, the job interview has arisen and appeared more and more important.
a. First, the interviewer can tell something about the job to the interviewee such as the wage, the work conditions and some other things which is relevant to the job.
b. First, the interviewer can tell something about the job to the interviewee such as the wages, the working conditions and something else which is relevant to the job.
a. They think that fresh water comes from such varieties of sources that it is always sufficient for use.
b. They think that fresh water comes from such a variety of sources that it is always sufficient for use.
a. The primary cause is that we can expand our horizon.
b. The primary cause is that we can expand our horizons.
a. In their opinion, people who change their job frequently are superficial and tactless.
b. In their opinion, people who change their jobs frequently are imprudent and tactless.
a. They range from foods, clothes to radios, TV sets, and even some medicine is fake, which has brought a lot of troubles in our daily life.
b. They range from foods, clothes to radios, TV sets, and even medicines are fake, which has brought a lot of troubles to our daily life.
a. First, government should forbid the fake commodities by law.
b. First, the government should forbid the fake commodities by law.

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2.不可数名词
a. The fresh air and beautiful sceneries will attract people to leave the overcrowded city.
b. The fresh air and beautiful scenery will attract people to leave the overcrowded city.
a. Nowadays radios and TV play a more and more important role in our daily life.
b. Nowadays radio and TV play a more and more important role in our daily life.
a. For example, setting off firecrackers often sets fire to buildings, and causes many damages.
b. For example, setting off firecrackers often sets fire to buildings, and causes a lot of damage.
a. They think only when they are absorbed in one work can they do it well.
b. They think only when they are devoted to one job can they do it well.
3.集合名词
a. Even a lot of entertainments such as TV, recordings and films need electricity.
b. Even a lot of entertainment such as TV, recordings and films need electricity.
4.名词前的数量
a. A great deal of new subjects, which are actually derived from both natural and social science, has come into existence and enrich the sea of human knowledge greatly.
b. A great number of new subjects, which are actually derived from both natural and social science, has come into existence and enriched the sea of human knowledge greatly.

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5.用词不当
a. They have little chance to find jobs.
b. They have little chance to find work.
a. They don’t get equal pay for equal job.
b. They don’t get equal pay for equal work.
a. For example, in reporting, a reporter can use it(tape recorder) instead of the old means of writing them on a notebook.
b. For example, a reporter can use it in interviews instead of the old means of writing them on a notebook.
a. Furthermore, tapes which contain sex and violence will lead young people into evil ways and do harm to their growth.
b. Furthermore, recordings which contain sex and violence will lead young people into evil ways and do harm to their growth.
a. With more and more people coming into this world, human beings are now in danger of food shortage because the land on which man can grow rice remains the same.
b. With more and more people coming into this world, human beings are now in danger of food shortage because the amount of land on which man can grow food crops remains the same.
a. It can lessen the crowding degree of streets and speed up the flow of traffic.
b. It can lessen the crowdedness of streets and speed up the flow of traffic.
a. In spite of all this, the greenization progress is relatively slow compared with cities in other countries.
b. In spite of all this, the green process is relatively slow compared with cities in other countries.
a. In the meantime, the grain requirement in people’s diet consequently kept dropping.
b. In the meantime, the grain consumption in people’s diet consequently kept dropping.
a. With the development of the standard of living, people now can afford to buy more milk and meat than before.
b. With the improvement of the standard of living, people now can afford to buy more milk and meat than before.
a. Two new roads were finished at the end of last year, and are expected to open to cars soon.
b. Two new roads were finished at the end of last year, and are expected to open to traffic soon.
a. There are many reasons which have caused such a change.
b. There are many factors which have caused such a change.
a. Learning English is not an easy thing.
b. Learning English is not an easy task.
a. They will push our society to a higher position.
b. They will push our society to a higher level of development.
a. Through participation, everyone can learn that on the playground he not only competes for himself but also for his team.
b. Through participation, everyone can learn that on the playing field he not only competes for himself but also for his team.
a. Motorcycles are much cheaper and consume much less oil than cars.
b. Motorcycles are much cheaper and consume much less gas than cars.
a. I believe one day motorcycles will become the most widely used traffic vehicles in China.
b. I believe one day motorcycles will become the most widely used vehicles in China.
a. Motorcycles, as a new type of traffic, is accepted by more and more people.
b. Motorcycles, as a new type of vehicle, are accepted by more and more people.
a. And the most important character is its fast rhythm.
b. And the most important character is its fast pace.

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a. On the one hand, the interviewer can introduce the main thing of the job he will provide to the interviewee, such as the specific things the interviewee should do if he takes the job, and the conditions for the job, and the wage or the profit the interviewee will get.
b. On the one hand, the interviewer can introduce the main aspects of the job opening to the interviewee, such as the specific requirements for the job, the working conditions, and the wages and benefits the interviewee will get.
a. Now, when a person is hunting for a job, there will always be a job interview.
b. Today when a person is hunting for a job, there are almost always job interviews.
a. In contrast, still a few of civilians expect the government to call off this regulation.
b. However, there are still a few citizens who expect the government to call off this ban.
a. Nowadays, there are two-day weekend in China.
b. Now there are two-day weekend in China.
a. However, some people still believe that fresh water is quite adequate for us.
b. However, some people still believe that fresh water supply is quite adequate for us.
a. You should practice under the direction of a teacher.
b. You should be trained under the direction of an instructor.
a. We ignore the natural laws completely and what turned out was a nationwide waste of sources.
b. We ignore the natural laws completely and what turned out was a nationwide waste of resources.
a. Suppose a student is expected to show up and give his presentation at class soon. He is in such a hurry that he may leave his presentation at home.
b. Suppose a student is expected to show up and give his presentation at class soon. He is in such a hurry that he leaves his manuscript at home.
a. I think a permanent pursue means nothing stagnant, because whatever career it is, once you devote yourself to it, it will give you pleasure and excitement.
b. I think a permanent pursuit means nothing will become stagnant, because whatever career it is, once you devote yourself to it, it can give you pleasure and excitement.
a. The magic power of the lucky numbers is just the vision s of some people.
b. The magic power of the lucky numbers is just the illusion s of some people.
a. They hope their call numbers, car numbers and other codes will include the number “8”.
b. They hope their call numbers, car numbers and other codes will all include the figure 8.
a. Some people think that certain numbers will bring good luck to them. With such a thought, they always want to get lucky numbers whatever they are doing.
b. Some people think that certain numbers will bring good luck to them. With such a belief, they always want to get lucky numbers whatever they are doing.

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6.名词的并列
a. This directly causes the problem of the world’s food shortage, housing and lack of jobs.
b. This directly causes the problem of the world’s food shortage, housing shortage and lack of jobs.
7.一致
a. From the figures, we can see easily that the proportions of grain, fruit and vegetables have declined a little, while that of milk and meat has risen.
b. From the figures, we can see easily that the proportion of grain, fruit and vegetables has declined a little, while that of milk and meat has risen.

C. Adjectives 形容词

1.比较级和最高级
a. Husbands and wives are now equal in the family.
b. Husbands and wives are now more equal in the family.
a. Also, you can hardly find out that in today’s families, women are being busy with dinners whereas men are comfortably sitting in armchairs reading newspapers.
b. Also, in today’s families it is more and more rare to find women busy with dinners whereas men are comfortably sitting in armchairs reading newspapers.
a. And there are times when we fail to do more satisfactory work.
b. And there are times when we fail to do satisfactory work.
a. I try my best to read more English articles to speed up my reading, because I believe the more I read the faster I can improve my reading comprehension.
b. I try my best to read as many English articles as possible to speed up my reading, because I believe the more I read the faster I can improve my reading comprehension.
a. So they often spend less time reading, listening and doing some exercises.
b. So they often spend less time reading, listening and doing some exercises than others.
a. It is my teacher who helps me to overcome a lot more difficulties.
b. It is my teacher who helps me to overcome many difficulties.
a. In modern society, the relationship between natural science and social science has become more and more close.
b. In modern society, the relationship between natural science and social science has become closer and closer.
2.用词不当/错误
a. On the way home, I thought early morning walk was really helpful.
b. On the way home, I thought early morning walk was really good and healthful.
a. In my opinion, the right solution to the problem is the combination of the two, that is, to lay down more roads in spacious areas and to open up more bus lines in downtown areas.
b. In my opinion, a better solution to the problem is the combination of the two, that is, to lay down more roads in spacious areas and to open up more bus lines in downtown areas.
a. With the development of big cities, a problem has arisen before us: traffic in cities has become more and more serious than before.
b. With the development of big cities, a problem has arisen before us: traffic in cities has become heavier and heavier than before.

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a. In big cities, such as Shanghai, the number of trees and other greenery is very small.
b. In big cities, such as Shanghai, the number of trees is small and other greenery is also scarce.
a. They can clean the air, beautify the city, develop a good climate and weaken noise.
b. They can clean the air, beautify the city, develop a healthy climate and reduce noise.
a. In addition, a bicycle will never give off poisonous gas as a car and it needs only a little place to park.
b. In addition, a bicycle does not give off poisonous gas as a car and it needs only a small place to park.
a. We are suffering from those uncurable diseases.
b. We are suffering from those incurable diseases.
a. Milk and meat have high protein content and as fruit and vegetables are vitamin contenting and they can keep fit.
b. Milk and meat have high protein content and as fruit and vegetables are vitamin rich and they can keep people fit.
a. And old people may be hurt by improper sports.
b. And old people may be hurt by taking part in some strenuous sports.
a. But we should not neglect the negative effects of those bad advertisements.
b. But we should not neglect the negative effects of those misleading advertisements.
a. I think the CET-6 certificate is reliable.
b. I think the CET-6 certificate is valuable.
a. Such opinion leads to surprising waste of water.
b. Such an opinion leads to a shocking waste of water.
a. As everyone can see, practice helps us to be efficient.
b. As everyone can see, practice helps us to be proficient.
a. Moreover, you will find better ways of doing things through consistent practice.
b. Moreover, you will find better ways of doing things through constant practice.
a. The more hasty you are, the slower.
b. The more hasty you are, the more slowly you achieve success.
a. In their opinion, people who change their job frequently are superficial and tactless.
b. In their opinion, people who change their jobs frequently are imprudent and tactless.
a. Once these fake commodities enter the market, they will do unevaluated harm to the society.
b. Once these fake commodities enter the market, they will do immeasurable harm to the society.
a. To stop these things happening, our government must establish a lawexclusive law to give those persons who produce fake commodities severe penalty.
b. To stop these things happening, our government must formulate special laws to impose severe penalties on those who produce fake commodities.
a. They shouldn’t be considered mysterious.
b. They do not have magic powers.
a. In big cities, especially in Shanghai, city traffic is too difficult.
b. In big cities, especially in Shanghai, city traffic is too heavy.

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3.形容词词序
1) a. This is no longer a childish unrealistic dream.
b. This is no longer an unrealistic childish dream.
2) a. This picture describes an American girl dressed in Chinese traditional costume.
b. This picture describes an American girl dressed in traditional Chinese costume.
D. Adverbs 副词
1.用词不当
1) a. We can say that almost all jobs which men can do are done perfectly by women.
b. We can say that almost all jobs which men can do are done equally well by women.
a. An early morning walk can help one to be light-hearted and to work effectively.
b. An early morning walk can help one to be light-hearted and to work efficiently.
a. However, the opportunity will not run into you voluntarily.
b. However, opportunities will not come to you of themselves.
a. So I prepared for it thoroughly and finally I won the first prize.
b. So I prepared for it carefully and finally I won the first prize.
a. In fact, fresh water is exactly inadequate.
b. In fact, our fresh water supply is far from adequate.
a. We should practice it from time to time, and thus we will slowly master it and do it perfectly.
b. We should practice it from time to time, and thus we will gradually master it and do it perfectly.
a. There are still some combined lucky numbers. Some people go out of the way to get the good “lucky numbers” because they firmly believe in lucky numbers.
b. There are even some combined lucky numbers. Some people go out of their way to get the good “lucky numbers” because they firmly believe in lucky numbers.

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2.副词短语
a. The industrial and Agricultural Revolutions which began in 1650 contributed a bit to the growth of population.
b. The industrial and Agricultural Revolutions which began in 1650 contributed a lot to the growth of population.
E. Pronouns 代词
1.用法不当
a. However, people have some different kinds of attitudes to failure.
b. However, people have different kinds of attitudes to failure.
a. Everyday I spent at least an hour on English in the past seven years.
b. Each day I spent at least an hour on English in the past seven years.
a. In order to make more profit, some manufacturers exaggerate their products’ functions in the advertisements. That is, the product does not live up to the standard advertised and the consumers will find themselves fooled.
b. In order to make more profit, some manufacturers exaggerate their products’ functions in the advertisements. Very often, the product does not live up to the standard advertised and the consumers will find themselves fooled.
a. To our Chinese, firecrackers are symbols of festivals and happiness.
b. To us Chinese, firecrackers are symbols of festivals and happiness.
a. There are many people who succeed in spite of “close relationship” to bad numbers.
b. There are many people who succeed in spite of their “close relationship” to bad numbers.
2.指代不明
a. For example, the need for jobs will make us develop our industries. It causes environmental problems.
b. For example, the need for jobs will make us develop our industries which in turn will causes environmental problems.
a. We always stick to the rules so that I never hurt others or be hurt.
b. We always stick to the rules so that I never hurt myself or others.
a. The old ones may think too much about safety, the young ones accept it more quickly.
b. Old people may think too much about safety, while/but/whereas young people accept them more quickly.
a. In some cases, it may lead to more serious consequences.
b. In some cases, the use of such a product may lead to more serious consequences.
a. But when the customers are attracted by them and buy the goods finally they will find it of no quality and worth nothing.
b. But when the customers are attracted by them and buy the goods finally they will find them of poor quality and worth nothing.
3.人称代词一致
a. First, we can’t deny that money is useful. You need money to buy food, to buy a house or to pay for your educational cost.
b. First, we can’t deny that money is useful. We need money to buy food, to buy a house or to pay for our educational cost.

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F. Prepositions 介词
介词错误
a. The greatest change occurs in grain, whose consumption dropped 4% from 49% in 1986 to 45% in 1990 among total food consumption.
b. The greatest change occurs in grain consumption, which has dropped 4% from 49% in 1986 to 45% in 1990 in total food consumption.
a. What we can conclude from the figures and the explanations is the people’s life is improving and the changes of people’s diet show that people’s interest is on the quality of food now and that our people’s health improving day by day.
b. What we can conclude from the figures and the explanations is the people’s life is improving and the changes in people’s diet show that people’s interest is in the quality of food now and that our people’s health improving day by day.
a. I have bought a tape recorder with which I can practise my ability of listening comprehension.
b. I bought a tape recorder with which I was able to improve my ability in listening comprehension.
a. In conclusion, I believe that the opportunities are abundant in our society and everyone is equal for them.
b. In conclusion, I believe that opportunities are abundant in our society and everyone is equal before them.
a. If a person places money prior to anything else, he will tend to lose the pleasure of his life.
b. If a person places money above all else, he will tend to lose the pleasure of his life.
a. Advertisements exist everywhere, on the newspaper, on TV, on the walls in the streets and even in the postboxes of our houses.
b. Advertisements exist everywhere, in the newspaper, on TV, on the walls in the streets and even in the postboxes of our houses.
a. People showed extraordinary enthusiasm in face of a great, speculative prosperity ahead.
b. People showed extraordinary enthusiasm in anticipation of a great, speculative prosperity ahead.

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G. Verbs 动词
-一般动词
-用词不当
a. In many countries, more and more women are acting as workers, farmers, scientists and even leaders.
b. In many countries, more and more women are now workers, farmers, scientists and even leaders.
a. I tripped on the way toward the park, breathing the fresh air and feeling extremely happy.
b. I strolled on the way toward the park, breathing the fresh air and feeling extremely happy.
a. If not controlled, the population of the world will amount to 7,000 million in 2000 as can be seen from the graph.
b. If not controlled, the population of the world will reach 7,000 million in 2000 as can be seen from the graph.
a. They can clean the air, beautify the city, develop a good climate and weaken noise.
b. They can clean the air, beautify the city, develop a healthy climate and reduce noise.
a. And it’s also everyone’s obligation to preserve trees.
b. And it’s also everyone’s obligation to protect trees.
a. In the meantime, I don’t think developing to the underground will help solve the problem.
b. In the meantime, I don’t think developing the underground will help solve the problem.
a. A road which can only hold two cars side by side can allow more than ten bicycles.
b. A road which can only allow two cars to pass may allow more than ten bicycles to run side by side.
a. Many things are to be done to make cars popular in China.
b. Many things must change before cars became common in China.
a. With the development of our society, people are becoming richer and richer, which enables them to get more nutritious food such as meat and milk.
b. With the development of our society, people are becoming richer and richer, which enables them to buy more nutritious food such as meat and milk.
a. What people concern is the quantity of food, not its quality.
b. What concerned people is the quantity of food, not its quality.
a. Milk and meat have high protein content and as fruit and vegetables are vitamin contenting and they can keep fit.
b. Milk and meat have high protein content and as fruit and vegetables are vitamin rich and they can keep people fit.
a. Now people are not stick to the quantity for the food is abundant and people can get enough food they want.
b. Now people’s attention is not focused on the quantity for the food is abundant and people can get all the food they want.
a. We can draw some conclusions according to the statistics.
b. We can draw some conclusions from/based on the statistics.

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a. The grain has always acted as the main food, while milk and meat take up the smaller proportion.
b. The grain has always served as the main food, while milk and meat take up the smaller proportion.
a. The reason for the decrease of car accidents in the city is that the traffic condition has been developed.
b. The reason for the decrease of car accidents in the city is that the traffic condition has been improved.
a. But sports can do harm to those people who cannot plan their activities properly.
b. But sports can do harm to those people who cannot balance their activities properly.
a. While taking part in sports, people can strengthen their muscles, quicken their speed of response and increase their ability of resisting diseases.
b. Being active in sports, people can strengthen their muscles, increase their response speed and build up their ability to resist diseases.
a. People may hurt themselves or others when they join in sports, especially those which are violent.
b. People may hurt themselves or others when they take part in sports, especially those which are violent.
a. In history, every scientific and technological revolution led to an immense surge in society, pumping the productive force to a higher level.
b. In history, every scientific and technological revolution led to an immense surge in society, pushing the productive force to a higher level.
a. Social science and natural science are mixed with each other today.
b. Social science and natural science are inseparable from each other today.
a. An example of this is that if we major in history and try to determine the time when an ancient book was written, we can take advantage of the PEXE technique which is commonly used in nuclear science.
b. An example of this is that if we major in history and try to determine the time when an ancient book was written, we can use the PEXE technique which is commonly used in nuclear science.
a. Being a teacher needs knowledge, patience, skills, etc.
b. Being a teacher requires knowledge, patience, skills, etc.
a. No matter they are accepted or not, the interview is a good occasion for them to practice their ability of introducing themselves to others.
b. No matter whether they are accepted or not, the interview is a good occasion for them to practice their ability of packaging and selling themselves.
a. The interviewer and the interviewee can know about each other through it.
b. The interviewer and the interviewee can learn about each other through it.
a. It is true that firecrackers make our festivals more enjoyable, but, I think, we can think out other entertainments.
b. It is true that firecrackers make our festivals more enjoyable, but, I think, we can find out other entertainments.
a. And also, we can appreciate the sound of firecrackers by listening to a tape recorder instead of setting them off.
b. And also, we can enjoy the sound of firecrackers by listening to a tape recorder instead of setting them off.
a. In conclusion, most students still don’t know how to spare the time and make it valuable.
b. In conclusion, most students still don’t know how to use the two-day weekend to their best advantage.
a. ...take up some hobbies, such as fishing, reading, planting and so on.
b. ...take up some hobbies, such as fishing, reading, or gardening.
a. Another reason may be that they have no confidence in passing through the test.
b. Another reason may be that they have no confidence in passing the test.
a. When you graduate you’ll have more chances to contact with foreigners, so it’s necessary for those students to gain “excellent” in the test, not “pass”.
b. When you graduate you’ll have more chances to contact foreigners, so it’s necessary for those students to gain “excellent” in the test, not “pass”.
a. Whether you will apply English or not in the future, English has undoubtedly been the most important language in our society.
b. Whether you will use English or not in the future, English has undoubtedly been one of the most important languages in our society.

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a. It is widely known that the fresh water will never be used up because we can get it from the rain, the rivers and the wells.
b. It is widely assumed that the world’s fresh water supply will never be used up because we can get it from the rain, rivers and wells.
a. On the other hand, the infant mortality was about 200 deaths per 1000 births in 1960 and the figure arrived at 100 in 1990.
b. On the other hand, the infant mortality was about 200 deaths per 1000 births in 1960 and the figure dropped to 100 in 1990.
a. On the other hand, the infant mortality has been decreased from about 200 deaths per 1000 births in 1960 to about 100 deaths per 1000 births in 1990.
b. On the other hand, the infant mortality has decreased from about 200 deaths per 1000 births in 1960 to about 100 deaths per 1000 births in 1990.
a. With the medical and living conditions developing, the life expectancy will be longer and the infant mortality will be lower in the developing countries in the future.
b. With the medical and living conditions improving, the life expectancy will be longer and the infant mortality will be lower in the developing countries in the future.
a. Many students complain that to recite so many words is really a great headache to them.
b. Many students complain that to memorize so many words is really a great headache to them.
a. We need much practice to obtain these abilities.
b. We need much practice to acquire these abilities.
a. If you emphasize only on speed but ignore the quality of your work, you will get the opposite effect.
b. If you emphasize only speed but neglect the quality of your work, you will get the opposite effect.
a. Haste may allow accidents to take place.
b. Haste may cause accidents to take place.
a. Therefore, I will not hesitate a moment when confronted with a chance to know the society for I have really benefited a lot from it.
b. Therefore, I will not hesitate a moment when presented with a chance to know society, for I have really benefited a lot from it.
a. It’s a good chance for me to get to know the society, to learn how to get along with my colleagues and to see how my knowledge is put into practice.
b. It’s a good chance for me to experience the working world, to learn how to get along with my colleagues, and to see how my knowledge can be put into practice.
a. It will help me to know the world outside the campus better.
b. It will help me to experience the world outside the campus better.
a. They often say like this: Take up one thing, like it and be good at it.
b. They often say: Take up one thing, enjoy doing it and be good at it.
a. It can make profits for them.
b. It can bring people profits.
a. The only way they should do is to try their best to promote their sales and to offer the consumer good service.
b. The only way they should do it is to try their best to promote their sales and to offer the consumer good service.
a. Her luck is not a bit damaged by her “bad” birthday.
b. Her luck has not a bit been affected by her “bad” birthday.
a. He wants to show how he eagered to be richer.
b. He wants to show how he longed to be richer.
a. From the graph, which shows the number of car accidents of 1990, we can learn that the car accidents were declined in Walton city in 1990.
b. From the graph, which shows the number of car accidents of 1990, we can learn that the car accidents declined in Walton city in 1990.

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一致性，平行
a. It not only relieves the burden on the big city, but also provide a much better environment for people to live in.
b. It not only relieves the burden on the big city, but also provides a much better environment for people to live in.
a. Due to the pollution, we will have no pure water, fresh air which are necessary to our lives.
b. Due to the pollution, we will have no pure water and fresh air which are necessary to our lives.
a. Motorcycles, as a new type of traffic, is accepted by more and more people.
b. Motorcycles, as a new type of vehicle, are accepted by more and more people.
a. A great deal of new subjects, which are actually derived from both natural and social science, has come into existence and enrich the sea of human knowledge greatly.
b. A great number of new subjects, which are actually derived from both natural and social science, has come into existence and enriched the sea of human knowledge greatly.
a. First, the interviewer can tell something about the job to the interviewee such as the wage, the work conditions and some other things which is relevant to the job.
b. First, the interviewer can tell something about the job to the interviewee such as the wages, the work conditions and something else which is relevant to the job.
-Phrasal Verbs 短语动词
a. And new ways can be carried out to prevent the pollution and control the population.
b. And new ways can be worked out to prevent the pollution and control the population.
a. When a motorcycle is started, it gives away a lot of smoke which contains poisonous chemical substances harmful to our health.
b. When a motorcycle is started, it gives off a lot of smoke which contains poisonous chemical substances harmful to our health.
a. Maybe you’ll ask why I am so absorbed in such a program.
b. Maybe you’ll ask why I am so attracted to such a program.
a. However, the opportunity will not run into you voluntarily.
b. However, opportunities will not come to you of themselves.
a. In fact, no one can be denied of the access to opportunity.
b. In fact, no one can be denied access to opportunity.
a. To grasp a foreign language is not easy, but I will go out of my way to gain successfor my ideal job.
b. To master a foreign language is not easy and to be a qualified interpreter is even harder, but I will go all out to gain successin my ideal job.

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a. These advertisement may say that it is worth the money to buy these goods and may boast the quality f these goods.
b. These advertisement may say that these goods are worth buying and may boast of the quality of these goods.
a. Taking into account of their behavior, we can safely come to the conclusion that these students will waste too much time if they don’t make good use of it.
b. Taking into account their behavior, we think it is clear that these students will waste too much time if they don’t study hard on work days.
a. ...You must listen to the tapes frequently. ... Keep it and you will improve greatly.
b. ...You must listen to English tapes frequently. ... Keep it up and you will improve greatly.
a. Staying on their posts and watching their achievement accumulating as time passes, they find no reason to change into another career where all should be done from zero.
b. Staying on their posts and watching their achievement accumulate as time passes, they find no reason to change to another career where they have to start from scratch.
a. I have heard several cases such as explosion caused by the commodities’ quality.
b. I have heard of several cases such as explosion caused by the commodities’ quality.
a. Once discovered, the people who produced them must be coped with strictly.
b. Once discovered, the people who produced them must be dealt with severely.
a. I do not believe such a ridiculous theory.
b. I do not believe in such a ridiculous theory.

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-助动词，情态动词
a. To master almost every skill, you can’t but practice.
b. To master almost every skill, you must practice.
a. We cannot strain our efforts and ignore the rules.
b. We mustn’t strain our efforts and ignore the rules.
a. Do “lucky numbers” really bring good luck?
b. Can “lucky numbers” bring good luck to us?
H. Connectives 连接词
-用词不当/用法不当
a. The sun had just risen, shining brilliantly, everything seemed to be covered with a layer of golden silk.
b. The sun had just risen, shining brilliantly and everything seemed to be covered with a layer of golden silk.
a. Some were doing morning exercises, some were playing badminton, some old people were having their tea while talking to each other cheerfully.
b. Some were doing morning exercises, some were playing badminton, and some old people were having their tea while talking to each other cheerfully.
a. When I walked in the street, there were only some young men who were running in the street.
b. While I was walking, I found that there were only some young men running in the street.
a. In spite of this obvious advantage, it also brings inconvenience to some people, who have to take buses not their cars, and so slow down their speed.
b. In spite of this obvious advantage, it also brings inconvenience to some people, who have to take buses instead of their cars, and so slow down their speed.
a. Because a bicycle is not expensive, most families can afford it.
b. Since a bicycle is not expensive, most families can afford it.
a. Later, the change was going on. As a result, there were more than 100,000 TV-watchers and only more than 10,000 film-goers in 1985.
b. Later, the change continued, until there were more than 100,000 TV-watchers and only more than 10,000 film-goers in 1985.

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a. However there are still a number of people who enjoy seeing films. Because the visual and audio effects of films are much better.
b. However there are still a number of people who enjoy seeing films, because the visual and audio effects of films are much better.
a. During the course of learning English, I met a lot of difficulties, such as how to enlarge my vocabulary, how to speed up reading, how to pronounce English words correctly, and so on.
b. During the course of learning English, I met a lot of difficulties, such as how to enlarge my vocabulary, how to speed up reading, and how to pronounce English words correctly, and so on.
a. The old ones may think too much about safety, the young ones accept it more quickly.
b. Old people may think too much about safety, while/but/whereas young people accept them more quickly.
a. So long as I am concerned, I am for the latter.
b. As far as I am concerned, I am for the latter.
a. I study hard, read a lot, take all kinds of courses in order to meet the challenge I may encounter in my future study.
b. I study hard, read a lot, and take all kinds of courses in order to meet the challenge I may encounter in my future study.
a. And I should get practical experience as much as theories.
b. And I should get practical experience while learning the theories.
a. In short, the bad ads can be classified into two categories. One category has the bad purpose. The advertisers want to sell cigarettes, drinks, guns and so on. ...The other category of bad ads are those in which the advertiser use violence and sex to promote their sales.
b. Generally speaking, the bad ads can be classified into two categories. One category has a bad purpose. The advertisers want to sell things like cigarettes, alcohol, and guns. ...The other category of bad ads are those in which the advertiser use violence and sex to promote their sales.
a. On the part of the interviewers, they can choose the best one out of the interviewees, other than the one appointed by the country in the past.
b. On the part of the interviewers, they can choose the best one out of the interviewees, instead of accepting the one appointed by the government as they did in the past.
a. No matter they are accepted or not, the interview is a good occasion for them to practice their ability of introducing themselves to others.
b. No matter whether they are accepted or not, the interview is a good occasion for them to practice their ability of packaging and selling themselves.

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a. On the one hand, the interviewer can introduce the main thing of the job he will provide to the interviewee, such as the specific things the interviewee should do if he takes the job, and the conditions for the job, and the wage or the profit the interviewee will get.
b. On the one hand, the interviewer can introduce the main aspects of the job opening to the interviewee, such as the specific requirements for the job, the working conditions, and the wages and benefits the interviewee will get.
a. In my opinion, although setting off firecrackers is one of the traditions that we Chinese have.
b. In my opinion, setting off firecrackers is one of the traditions that we Chinese have.
a. In my opinion, first of all, firecrackers should be banned, which can reduce the damage and danger.
b. In my opinion, first of all, firecrackers should be banned, so as to reduce the damage and danger.
a. The first, we have more spare time. ... The second, we have enough time to do something which we like.
b. First, we have more spare time. ... Second, we have enough time to do something we like.
a. It is widely known that the fresh water will never be used up because we can get it from the rain, the rivers and the wells. As a matter of fact, such belief is unfortunately wrong and possibly dangerous.
b. It is widely assumed that the world’s fresh water will never be used up because we can get it from the rain, rivers and wells. Actually/In fact/Unfortunately, such belief is wrong and possibly dangerous.
a. And with the society developing, we need more and more fresh water to meet the needs of industries, of increasing population. On the other hand, much of our precious water is polluted.
b. And with the society developing, we need more and more fresh water to meet the needs of industries and the increasing population. In addition/Besides/Moreover, much of our precious water is polluted.
a. There are other countless examples. All in all, we must keep the proverb in mind for lifetimePractice makes perfect.
b. There are other countless examples. In a word, we must keep the proverb in mind for a lifetimePractice makes perfect.
a. It’s the experience of our forefathers, however, it is correct in many cases even today.
b. It’s the experience of our forefathers. However, it is correct in many cases even today.
a. So far as I am concerned, I managed to find a part-time jobtutor an orphan.
b. As for me, I managed to find a part-time jobtutor an orphan.
a. Some people like having a permanent job. They don’t want to change their jobs. While some others frequently change their jobs.
b. Some people like having a permanent job. They don’t want to change their jobs. Meanwhile some others frequently change their jobs.
a. Almost everyone of us has bought some fake commodities, for instance, fake shoes, fake bags, and the worst thingfake medicine.
b. Almost everyone of us has had the experience of buying fake commodities, for instance, fake shoes, fake bags and, worst of all, fake medicines.
a. I wandered around the park, to my delight, I found a few middle-school students talking to each other in English in the southeast corner of the park.
b. I was wandering around the park when I found, to my delight, a few middle-school students talking to each other in English in the southeast corner of the park.

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-过于绝对化
a. On the other hand, sports have a few ill effects.
b. On the other hand, sports may also cause some ill effects.
a. For example, almost everybody had watched apples falling from an apple tree but only Newton discovered the Law of Gravity.
b. For example, many people had watched apples falling from an apple tree but only Newton discovered the Law of Gravity.
a. With the development of modern transportation, you can get to any place by plane, by car, by ship, or by bicycle.
b. With the development of modern transportation, you can get to any place by plane, by car, or by ship.
a. The leaders of countries always have a talk about the important events in the world, and try to find a way to keep the world’s peace.
b. The leaders of countries often visit each other, holding talks about the important events in the world, and trying to find ways to keep the world’s peace.
a. In return, I can also learn a lot from foreign countries so that I can serve my motherland.
b. In return, I can also learn a lot about foreign countries so that I can serve my motherland better.
a. But when the customers are attracted by them and buy the goods finally they will find it of no quality and worth nothing.
b. But when the customers are attracted by them and buy the goods finally they will find them of poor quality and worth nothing.
a. Since there are so many advantages of a job interview, those who look for a job will most certainly get a good one and those who need people to do a job will also most certainly find some one that is qualified.
b. Through the job interview, people who look for a job will have a better chance of getting a good one and those who need people to do a job will have a better chance of finding some one that is qualified.
a. Now, when a person is hunting for a job, there will always be a job interview.
b. Today when a person is hunting for a job, there are almost always job interviews.
a. In a word, firecrackers should be banned for the benefit of all people!
b. In a word, firecrackers should be banned for the benefit of most people!
a. “Should firecrackers be banned” is always the controversial topic among the Chinese people.
b. “Should firecrackers be banned” has been a controversial topic among the Chinese people for quite some time.
a. Sports fans can play in the playground.
b. Sports fans can take part in more physical activities.
a. Whether you will apply English or not in the future, English has undoubtedly been the most important language in our society.
b. Whether you will use English or not in the future, English has undoubtedly been one of the most important languages in our society.

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a. Man has been able to cure the diseases which were incapable of being cured.
b. Man is able to cure the diseases which were incapable of being cured.
a. Nowadays our knowledge is mostly derived from books, which is really limited.
b. Nowadays, as students, our knowledge is mostly derived from books, which is really limited.
a. With the rapid development of our society, the campus is no longer an ivory tower.
b. With the rapid development of our society, the university campus can no longer be an ivory tower.
a. Those who have fallen victims of fake commodities will never buy them again, even the commodities are good next time.
b. Those who have fallen victims to fake commodities of a certain brand will never buy that brand again, even if the commodities are genuine the next time.
a. Hence, 13, 4 and other so-called “evil” numbers are wiped off from cards, lists, menus, etc.
b. Hence, 13, 4 and other so-called “evil” numbers are wiped off from certain cards, lists, menus, etc.

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逻辑不够严密
a. Though it gives us more convenience, the two-day weekend has quite a few problems.
b. Though it gives us more convenience, the two-day weekend has also given rise to quite a few problems.
a. Some students who are interested in social work can join many clubs.
b. Students who are interested in campus activities can join different clubs.
a. I take CET-6 not only for passing the test, but for improving my English.
b. I take CET-6 not only for passing the test, but for further improving my English.
a. With the increasing number of population and factories, the amount of the fresh water in use is also growing rapidly.
b. With the growth of population and industry, the amount of the fresh water used is also growing rapidly.
a. They recite words at the very moment and after some time...
b. They try to memorize words at the very moment they come across them and review them time and again...
a. Otherwise, you suffer from it, because you can’t exert your every effort in your job.
b. Otherwise, you suffer from it, because you have got no motivation to exert your every effort in your job.
a. Almost everyone of us has bought some fake commodities.
b. Almost everyone of us has had the experience of buying fake commodities.
a. Of course, some people have had good luck through “lucky numbers”, but I think that that is only a chance.
b. Of course, some people think they have had good luck through “lucky numbers”, but I think that that is only a chance.
a. Have you ever wondered that numbers would associate with your luck?
b. Have you ever wondered whether numbers would associate with your luck?

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II.句法错误
主谓一致
a. But now large amounts of water and air has been polluted, which brings about various problems troubling man’s life.
b. But now large amounts of water and air have been polluted, which brings about various problems troubling their life.
a. My ideal job is a teacher.
b. My ideal job is to be an excellent teacher.
-重复
a. Man is faced with more and more problems which threaten man’s existence on Earth.
b. Man is faced with more and more problems which threaten his existence on Earth.
a. People’s opinions about whether firecrackers should be banned vary from person to person.
b. Opinions about whether firecrackers should be banned vary from person to person.
a. During the past thirty years, developing countries have been greatly developed in many aspects.
b. During the past thirty years, developing countries have made great progress in many aspects.
B. 从句
-定语从句
a. We may encounter some problems which need not only natural science but also social science.
b. We may encounter some problems whose solution involves knowledge not only of natural science but also of social science.
a. What on earth is the role money playing in our society?
b. What on earth is the role money plays in our society?
a. When I refresh, I will do something which I like.
b. When I relax, I will do something (that) I like.
C. 倒装句
a. Only in this way, you can get the true job of achieving your goals.
b. Only in this way, can you get the true job of achieving your goals.

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D. 句子的连接与简练
-句子的连接
a. Motorcycles are much cheaper and consume much less oil than cars. But they can run at the same speed as cars.
b. Motorcycles are much cheaper and consume much less oil than cars, but they can run as fast as cars.
a. Second, whoever breaks the regulation should be fined or punished. Then everyone will comply with this regulation.
b. Second, whoever breaks the regulation should be fined or punished so that everyone will comply with this regulation.
a. Some persons thought the law is no good. Because they think setting off firecrackers is a beneficial thing.
b. Some persons think the law is no good because they regard setting off firecrackers as a beneficial thing.
a. First, passing CET-4 only means that you have the ability to read, write, speak and listen to simple English, you are far from good at English.
b. First, passing CET-4 only means that you have the ability to read, write, speak and listen to simple English, and you are far from good at English.
a. And with the society developing, we need more and more fresh water to meet the needs of industries, of increasing population.
b. And with the society developing, we need more and more fresh water to meet the needs of industries and the increasing population.
a. Second, scientists must work even harder to purify sea water, polluted water and try to find substitutes in industry to reduce the use of fresh water.
b. Second, scientists must work even harder to purify sea water and polluted water, and try to find substitutes to reduce the use of fresh water.
a. Furthermore, people’s living conditions are improved in these years. People can keep good health in these conditions.
b. Furthermore, people’s living conditions are improved in recent years, which means better health.
a. The result is that your brain is less and less efficient, your process is slower and slower.
b. The result is that your brain is less and less efficient, and your process is slower and slower.
a. Community services as well as mass media are both golden chances to practice our ability, through which we can learn to cooperate with people, to contribute our intelligence to the society.
b. Community services is a golden chance to use our ability, through which we can learn to cooperate with people and contribute our intelligence to society.
a. But in fact, there are also many people who think numbers have nothing to do with luck.
b. But there are also many people who think that numbers, in fact, have nothing to do with luck.
a. Good numbers bring good luck is a false conclusion.
b. That certain numbers bring good luck is a completely false conclusion.
-指代不明
a. Every day, after they have finished their work in the big city, they come back to their comfortable house by bus or by train, just as they usually do in holidays.
b. Every day, after they have finished their work in the big city, they come back to their comfortable house in the satellite by bus or by train, just as they usually do in holidays.
a. It provides us with natural scenes and the life of all kinds of wild animals, with the explanation by the narrator.
b. It provides us with views of natural scenes and a look of the life style of all kinds of wild animals, with an explanation by the narrator.

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a. These elements differ a lot from one another.
b. These elements differ a lot from one person to another.
a. Finally, I want to teacher the students all that I know and help them to work better for our country in the future.
b. Finally, I want to teacher the students all that I know and help them to develop their potential so that they can work better for our country in the future.
a. Job-hopping, therefore, is not practical to them, because one would be taken as a sheer idiot out of his domain and into other’s profession.
b. Job-hopping, therefore, is not practical to them, because one could be taken as a sheer idiot once he left his domain and ventured into another profession.
a. People are getting richer, and also the living condition is getting better, but some people are not satisfied with the present condition, which they thought would be like heaven a few years ago.
b. A lot of people are getting richer, and their living conditions are getting better. But still some of them are not satisfied. They dream of getting rich overnight and living a heavenly life, which, of course, is impossible to achieve by fair means.
a. We can find fake Nike shoes, fake Panasonic recorders, fake Philips electronic facilities, even fake video CDs everywhere.
b. Everywhere we go, we can find fake Nike shoes, fake Panasonic recorders, fake Philips electronic facilities, even fake VCDs and so on.

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简练的表达
a. As I had nothing to do, I decided to take a morning walk. So I went to the park.
b. As I had nothing to do, I decided to take a walk to the park.
a. As far as my ideal job is concerned, I think I want to be an interpreter in the future.
b. As far as my ideal job is concerned, I want to be an interpreter.
a. Some want to be doctors, some want to be teachers, some want to be engineers, and so on.
b. Some want to be doctors, some want to be teachers, and some want to be engineers.
a. These fake commodities’ quality is always very poor. They may cause a great loss to the consumers, or even the life.
b. As the quality of the fake commodities is always very poor, they may cause great damage to the consumers, or even endanger their lives.
a. For instance the so-called lucky number “8” is widely used now. Some people think that “8” can bring good luck.
b. For instance the so-called lucky number “8” is widely used now because it is believed to bring good fortune.
多余的表达，重复表达
a. So far as I am concerned, the program called “ZhengdaZongyi” on channel two every Saturday evening is my favorite one during the weekend.
b. As far as I am concerned, the program called “ZhengdaZongyi” on channel two every Saturday evening is my favorite TV program.
a. There is no consensus of opinion among people as to the views on opportunity.
b. There is no consensus among people as to the views on opportunity.
a. In our society, some people think certain numbers can bring them good luck.
b. Some people think certain numbers can bring them good luck.

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III. 时态的误用（现在、过去、进行、完成及将来时）
a. When I walked in the street, there were only some young men who were running in the street.
b. While I was walking , I found that there were only some young men running in the street.
a. We still have time if we act just now.
b. We still have time if we act right now.
-完成时态
1) a. With the opening of our country toward the world in recent years, English becomes more and more important.
b. With the opening of our country toward the world in recent years, English has become more and more important.
a. I have bought a tape recorder with which I can practise my ability of listening comprehension.
b. I bought a tape recorder with which I was able to improve my ability in listening comprehension.
a. Do you have a feeling that the world is getting smaller and smaller although the size of the earth doesn’t change?
b. Do you have a feeling that the world is getting smaller and smaller although the actual size of the earth hasn’t change?
a. One is that the economy has developed quickly during the past years. This allowed the government to put more money in the health care program.
b. One is that the economy has developed quickly during the past years. This has allowed the government to put more money in the health care program.
-将来时
a. The need for more jobs makes us develop our industries.
b. The need for more jobs will make us develop our industries.

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-过去时的乱用&误用
a. This is what we called the problem of population explosion.
b. This is what we call the problem of population explosion.
a. I admired scientists when I was a little child, for they knew a lot.
b. I admired scientists when I was a little child, for they know a lot.
a. Firecrackers did bring us happiness as well as tears.
b. Firecrackers do bring us happiness as well as tears.
-时态一致
a. Man has lived in this world for thousands of years. They fight against nature from time to time and they survive.
b. Human beings have lived in this world for thousands of years. They have fought against nature from time to time and they have survived.
a. The rain makes the roads muddy, and often resulted in car accident.
b. The rain makes the roads muddy, and often results in car accident.
a. You are not to be supervised every hour by your employers. And you are not frequently told what to do or how to do.
b. You are not supervised every hour by your employers. And you are not frequently told what to do or how to do it.
IV. 条件&虚拟
a. Most of us may have such experiences: when you go to some place far away from the city you live in and think you know nobody there, you are surprised to find that you should run into one of old classmates on the street! Perhaps both of you would cry out, “What a small world!”
b. Most of us have had such an experience which reminds us the world is shrinking. Perhaps when you went to some place far away from the city you live in and thought you knew nobody there, you were surprised to find that you ran into one of old classmates on the street! Perhaps both of you cried out, “What a small world!”
a. So it is high time that we should spare no efforts to get to know the world outside the campus right now.
b. So it is high time that we spared no efforts to get to know the world outside the campus right now.
a. If there were no electric power, the world would be a totally different one. First of all, almost all the machines had to stop running and we had to use our hands to produce goods. In the evening, we had to live in darkness and we couldn’t play or work. The development of our modern life had to slow down or even stop.
b. If there were no electric power, the world would be a totally different one. First of all, almost all the machines would have to stop running and we have to produce goods by hand. In the evening, we would have to live in darkness and couldn’t play or work. The development of our modern life would be slowed down or even stop.
a. If more bus routes were opened up, the number of bicycles and cars in the streets will be controlled.
b. If more bus routes were opened up, the number of bicycles and cars in the streets would be controlled.

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V. 标点错误&首字母大写错误
a. I wandered around the park, to my delight, I found a few middle-school students talking to each other in English in the southeast corner of the park.(句号)
b. I wandered around the park. To my delight, I found a few middle-school students talking to each other in English in the southeast corner of the park.
VI. 中国式英语
-汉语思维
a. Others were doing Chinese exercises.
b. Others were practising kung fu/tai chi chuan/martial art.
a. It plays an important role in many fields such as industry, agriculture and people’s daily life.
b. It plays an important role in many fields such as industry, agriculture and the daily life of men.
a. In a word, all things would be in a mess.
b. In a word, things would be in a mess.
a. A car can’t move without petrol, but a bicycle only needs a person’s energy.
b. A car can’t move without petrol, but a bicycle only needs human energy.
a. There is no doubt that the industry of bicycle will go on developing in China.
b. There is no doubt that the bicycle industry will go on developing in China.
a. Grain, as the main food of most Chinese, is now playing a less important role in people’s diet, while the proportion of some high-energy food such as milk and meat has increased.
b. Grain, as the staple/principal food of most Chinese, is now playing a less important role in people’s diet, while the proportion of some high-energy foods such as milk and meat has increased.
a. People of nowadays are paying more attention to the structure of their diet.
b. People now are paying more attention to the structure of their diet.
a. Some of them also want to recall the life of the “good past”.
b. Some of them also want to recall the life of the “good old days”.
a. To a Chinese, English is not so easy to learn as his native language.
b. To a Chinese, the task of learning English well is not easy.
a. In the past time, I had a lot of difficulties in learning English.
b. In the past, I had a lot of difficulties in learning English.
a. My vocabulary reserve is too small to understand a text of medium level.
b. My vocabulary is too small to understand a text of medium level.
a. I have bought a tape recorder with which I can practise my ability of listening comprehension.
b. I bought a tape recorder with which I was able to improve my ability in listening comprehension.
a. However, everything has its black side.
b. However, everything has its dark/negative side.
a. How the government will do with them?
b. What will the government do with them?
a. There is no doubt that proper physical activities keep our bodies fit.
b. There is no doubt that properly balanced physical activities keep us physically fit.
a. It makes you feel tired if you exercise too much.
b. You will feel exhausted if you exercise too much.
a. Almost everyday I open TV at 6:30 p.m. and wait for the news program.
b. Almost everyday I turn on the TV at 6:30 p.m. and wait for the news program.
a. We also learn some knowledge about animals, even some plants.
b. We also learn a lot about animals, even some plants.
a. Besides, the pictures are very beautiful; some of them are also very valuable.
b. Not only is the photography very beautiful, it is fascinating, too.

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a. Social science, on the other hand, constructs the spiritual buildings of human beings.
b. Social science, on the other hand, contributes to the spiritual development of human beings.
a. Therefore, as college students, we should learn any kind of knowledge as much as possible, not only in order to widen our horizon but to meet the requirements of modern society.
b. Therefore, as college students, we should learn as much knowledge as possible, not only in order to widen our horizon but to meet the requirements of modern society.
a. You are not to be supervised every hour by your employers. And you are not frequently told what to do or how to do.
b. You are not supervised every hour by your employers. And you are not frequently told what to do or how to do it.
a. This is the four years I can make full use of to gain knowledge as much as possible.
b. This is the four years I can make full use of to gain as much knowledge as possible.
a. These advertisement may say that it is worth the money to buy these goods and may boast the quality f these goods.
b. These advertisement may say that these goods are worth buying and may boast of the quality of these goods.
a. And as a customer myself, I can’t trust the advertisements too much.
b. And as a customer myself, I can’t trust the advertisements with a grain of salt.
a. And it will be better if he emphasizes that this is the very job he wants and he won’t throw his sight on any job except this one.
b. And it will be better if he emphasizes that this is the very job he wants and he won’t cast an eye on any job except this one.
a. In my opinion, above all, I will relax myself on Saturday.
b. As for me, I will relax myself on Saturday.
a. According to those mentioned above, I decide to make a good plan for the two-day weekend.
b. In order to benefit most from the two-day weekend, I decide to make a good plan for the two-day weekend.
a. These problems are really serious.
b. This is really a serious problem.
a. English study requires reading, listening, speaking and writing.
b. The mastery of English requires the abilities to read, listen, speak and write efficiently.
a. However, as a matter of fact, the result is far less than satisfactory and quite often goes to the opposite.
b. However, as a matter of fact, the result is far less than satisfactory and quite often is the exact opposite.
a. I’d like to say haste makes waste.
b. I must say haste makes waste.
a. Finally, knowing the world outside the campus may make us full of a sense of duty and help us make great achievements in the future.
b. Finally, knowing the world outside the campus may awaken in us a high sense of duty and help us make greater achievements in the future.
a. As is know to all, there are many ways we can know the community, such as the service for the society and the TV, radio or newspaper.
b. As is know to all, there are many ways we can know the community, such as through community service or keeping informed through TV, radio or newspaper.
a. Therefore, I will not hesitate a moment when confronted with a chance to know the society for I have really benefited a lot from it.
b. Therefore, I will not hesitate a moment when presented with a chance to know society, for I have really benefited a lot from it.

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a. Regardless of the pay, I think the most important thing is that I can really know a lot about the society.
b. I don’t mind the pay, but what I need is the chance that through it, I can really learn a lot about the society.
a. We can also get to know the society through taking part in serving for the society.
b. We can also learn about society through volunteer work.
a. According to me, I will try my best to study well first.
b. As for me, I will try my best to study well first.
a. Any other job can’t attract me no matter what the benefit is.
b. No other job can attract me no matter what the benefit is.
a. In a word, I want to find a job that fits me, and money and other things are out of thought.
b. In a word, I want to find a job that fits me, and money and other things are not my chief concern.
a. Staying on their posts and watching their achievement accumulating as time passes, they find no reason to change into another career where all should be done from zero.
b. Staying on their posts and watching their achievement accumulate as time passes, they find no reason to change to another career where they have to start from scratch.
a. Second, the consumers should tell the difference between the real and fake ones when they do shopping.
b. Second, the consumers should learn to tell the difference between the real and fake commodities when they do shopping.
a. It can make them earn a lot of money so that they can be very rich.
b. The number “8”, some believe, can enable people to earn a lot of money and become very rich.
a. For example, in China, the number “8”is regarded as “Fa” by some people, which means they will make much money.
b. For example, in China, 8 is regarded as a lucky number by some people, because the pronunciation of this figure comes near to the character “发” in Chinese, which means “getting prosperous”.
a. She achieved a good study at the nation’s most prestigious university and later gained good reputation in her career.
b. She excelled in her studies at the nation’s most prestigious university and later gained good reputation in her career.
a. I think there is no relation between numbers and luck.
b. I don’t think there is any relation between numbers and luck.
a. I think that good luck needs us to create.
b. I think that good luck needs to be created.
a. A rich man bought his car license plate number with several “8”.
b. A rich man paid a large sum of money in order to get a car license plate with several “8’s” in its number.